Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Chapter 12; part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from pickthorn
Barbara... I'm so glad that Cassie is safe and reunited with Sara. I can have a nice relaxing Christmas now. :o) I like the action you described in the rescue. Great writing. Hope you have a Great Christmas and next year brings good health and happiness to you.
pickthorn
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Barbara... I'm so glad that Cassie is safe and reunited with Sara. I can have a nice relaxing Christmas now. :o) I like the action you described in the rescue. Great writing. Hope you have a Great Christmas and next year brings good health and happiness to you.
pickthorn
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
A fine job, Barbara. I thought the narration read perfectly, but found one nit in your dialogue:
"Matt said Cassie's on her way to the hospital.">>seems like it would read better as "their way to the hospital" instead of just 'her'. Your call. Fine write.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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A fine job, Barbara. I thought the narration read perfectly, but found one nit in your dialogue:
"Matt said Cassie's on her way to the hospital.">>seems like it would read better as "their way to the hospital" instead of just 'her'. Your call. Fine write.
Isaiah
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Because I used Cassie it would be her, if Cassie was plural then it would be their. Thank you for your kind review.
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Ah... that explains it. Very good.
Comment from dportwood
barbara.wilkey,
I enjoyed this chapter as I have all of them. I like the way you write with clarity, emotion, and keep everything clean. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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barbara.wilkey,
I enjoyed this chapter as I have all of them. I like the way you write with clarity, emotion, and keep everything clean. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from KayteeF
Once again this is a lively read.
At least Cassie is away from her captors and with her mum now.
Joe took the 'bull by the horns' and kissed Sarah in front of, making his intentions honourable I am sure.
A good pacey section of the whole chapter.
The treatment is really taking it out of you, Barbara. Bedrest is really important. Working hard is not to be forced on you.
Thanks for the update on your recuperation.
I am always so happy to see your next post as the whole thing is coming together.
God Bless and protect you from harm.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Once again this is a lively read.
At least Cassie is away from her captors and with her mum now.
Joe took the 'bull by the horns' and kissed Sarah in front of, making his intentions honourable I am sure.
A good pacey section of the whole chapter.
The treatment is really taking it out of you, Barbara. Bedrest is really important. Working hard is not to be forced on you.
Thanks for the update on your recuperation.
I am always so happy to see your next post as the whole thing is coming together.
God Bless and protect you from harm.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your words of wisdom.
Comment from bowls
Thanks for the great chapter. I was so relieved that everything has turned out well so far. I feel I know your characters as real people and I'm concerned about their welfare. (Obviously the mark of a good writer.)
Merry Christmas to you. Make sure you get as much rest as you need. Let's hope the New Year sees you up and at 'em.Near the beginning you write FROM HIS BEHIND HIS BELT. Perhaps there's a word missing here.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thanks for the great chapter. I was so relieved that everything has turned out well so far. I feel I know your characters as real people and I'm concerned about their welfare. (Obviously the mark of a good writer.)
Merry Christmas to you. Make sure you get as much rest as you need. Let's hope the New Year sees you up and at 'em.Near the beginning you write FROM HIS BEHIND HIS BELT. Perhaps there's a word missing here.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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I think maybe it has an extra word. Thank you for catching it.
Comment from Connie P
Thank goodness he finally got her back. I'm glad it turned out that way and now maybe Sara will relax and allow a relationship to bloom! Although, he has to go back and get the other girls.
Merry Christmas, Barbara!
Connie
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank goodness he finally got her back. I'm glad it turned out that way and now maybe Sara will relax and allow a relationship to bloom! Although, he has to go back and get the other girls.
Merry Christmas, Barbara!
Connie
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Now, that Cassie is safe, I'll send my TF to help Brian.
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I think they'll need the help!
Comment from Rama Rao
I was worried about you when I didn't see a chapter posted by you on Sunday. Today's posting confirms everything is OK.
I'm feeling greatly relieved.
As for the chapter, the action moves fast and the action scene has come alive. However, in this para, "he saw the man on the porch... hit that man. It's not very clear who got hit. Recommend calling him the short or stubby to make it easier for the reader.
A great job, as usual.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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I was worried about you when I didn't see a chapter posted by you on Sunday. Today's posting confirms everything is OK.
I'm feeling greatly relieved.
As for the chapter, the action moves fast and the action scene has come alive. However, in this para, "he saw the man on the porch... hit that man. It's not very clear who got hit. Recommend calling him the short or stubby to make it easier for the reader.
A great job, as usual.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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I orginally had the man described but used shorter two times in a row and was afraid I would get gigged for it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from x-cheshire-puss-x
I haven't had the chance to read all of this yet, but I can already tell it's fabulous. The characters, the plot, everything. I enjoyed it a lot, and hopefully will read the rest soon!
Happy Holidays,
Erzy
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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I haven't had the chance to read all of this yet, but I can already tell it's fabulous. The characters, the plot, everything. I enjoyed it a lot, and hopefully will read the rest soon!
Happy Holidays,
Erzy
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from fictionwriter
Another great chapter. I'm glad that Joe was able to rescue Cassie and be able to get them both out of the house safely. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Another great chapter. I'm glad that Joe was able to rescue Cassie and be able to get them both out of the house safely. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
A wonderful chapter and I am glad Cassie got out alive. I hope you have the best Christmas ever. Get lots of rest and your in my prayers. Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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A wonderful chapter and I am glad Cassie got out alive. I hope you have the best Christmas ever. Get lots of rest and your in my prayers. Shirley
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.