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Another Pretty Face

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Can love survive small town gossip?

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Comment from Readywriter52
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The task force is on the trail of a child pornography ring. They think that Cassie is still alive, but she is in great trouble. She can be anywhere by now.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
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Great chapter and again I get so involved I forget to edit. I love the characters and the way they interact with each other. I want to serf the web to catch the bad guys. Good job.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Realist101
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Hi there! Painting!!! I am now gazing at my unfinished kitchen. NO energy to get it done either. Your story has a great combination of emotions and descriptions, also great tension too! I like how Sara is trying to keep busy to ease her mind. I try to do that, but it rarely works for me! Nice job Barbara!! ") Susan

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    Thank you girlfriend, for your kind review. I am up late for me so I am calling it a night.
reply by Realist101 on 07-Nov-2010
    Sleep well you! ") HUG! S.
Comment from Begin Again
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Barbara,

This story is coming along great.I really enjoy how the characters are tied in from your previous one.

With the chemo and everything, I don't know how you feep your mind wrapped around the story but you...and it's terrific.

Haugs and lots of good thoughts,

Carol

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    Thank you for your kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Belinda
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Hi, Barbara, interesting chapter. You've described the situation and Sara very well. The way she's wary about taking money from Joe is so sweet and innocent. George is great too, it's not an easy job to calm a woman in Sara's condition. You're a very imaginative author.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Continuting to be a great story. It certainly holds my attention and your writing puts me in the midst of the action. I did find one sentence that i am pasting below with a suggestion. Great job.

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 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    I made that correction. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from marcii
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The story continues to be a delight to read, though seemed to slowed down a bit in excitement but then again it can't be action, action all the time.

Hope your chemo doesn't hurt too much. As for your posting, though you obviously love your writing you must put your health first and your readers know this.

Marcii

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Babibrn
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I think I like your work very much. May I ask how long have you been writing.Are you published? I am new to fanstory and I am just getting used to this site. So If I have asked any ignorant question forgive me. Im sorry

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    No question is dumb, so never apologize for asking a quesion. No I am not published. I am looking for an agent. That was my summer's job, but I had some health issues and never got the letters mailed. Thank you very much for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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What is "vinca?"

She scanned [at] the living room walls. "I have one 'peppermint vinca' wall, one 'angle[angel] food', and two 'so soft lilac' walls." She titled[tilted] her head and put her hands on her hips.

"I'm sure[,] if you try really hard[,] you can force yourself."

She was [na?ve] and never suspected anything liked this could happen."

"When we're together, I feel everything will work out and life will be perfect[. T]hen he leaves and reality sinks in.

People from around the world [buy internet these videos]."

but don't know how it's going [to] play out or if it's going to effect us at all."

We'll all be praying for you Thursday.

Roberta

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    I don't have a clue what vinca is. I went to a paint shop and thought those colors were attractive and that was a name of one of them.
Comment from Pili Pubul
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Well my friend , first let me tell you that I seldom review stories, just poems , but even if I had not read the other chapters, you managed to get my interest and curiosity. Good dialogue. I hope you do well in next chemo, and I think you will.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2010


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
    Thank you for the kind review and friendship.
reply by Pili Pubul on 07-Nov-2010
    You are very welcome my friend.