Poppy and Odi's Mission
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Poppy and Odi's Mission THE END"A Cube 16 Poem Book
65 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Sandra.
It is a nicely written end to a fairy tale about land and sea creatures working in unison to help each other. I wish this could happen among all us humans. No racial hatred or fear would be a nice change.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Sandra.
It is a nicely written end to a fairy tale about land and sea creatures working in unison to help each other. I wish this could happen among all us humans. No racial hatred or fear would be a nice change.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Joan! I'm delighted you enjoyed reading my little story. Warm hugs my friend, Sandra xxxx
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You are most kindly welcome. That I did.
Have a great week.
Joan
Comment from LJbutterfly
I thoroughly enjoyed this story and appreciate the work you obviously had to put into writing the lines and researching the pictures. The Cube 16 format was perfect for maintaining children's interest, and the idea to create a coloring book is incredibly clever. Boom! 6 stars.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I thoroughly enjoyed this story and appreciate the work you obviously had to put into writing the lines and researching the pictures. The Cube 16 format was perfect for maintaining children's interest, and the idea to create a coloring book is incredibly clever. Boom! 6 stars.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for this really lovely review, and that shiny gold star! That was so nice of your. I'm glad you liked the idea of a colouring book, it will be something for the children to do when they finish reading each page, or later after they've read the story. I've also got a little game for them to play which will be put at the back of the book. :)) Thanks again, my friend! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Gert sherwood
Poppy and Odi's Mission
sandramitchell; Now her is not only children here is an adult who had fun reading about pulling out a whales tooth. Plus the drawings are amazing.
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Poppy and Odi's Mission
sandramitchell; Now her is not only children here is an adult who had fun reading about pulling out a whales tooth. Plus the drawings are amazing.
Gert
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Aw, thank you so very much for this lovely review, and the golden sixth star, Gert! I'm delighted you enjoyed reading it, and that you liked the illustrations. That is so nice of you! Sending a warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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sandramitchell
You are most welcome
Gert
Comment from Ben Colder
Your computer skills are really edifying to your work. No doubt this is your calling. I am sure children are delighted to read your work for you a very talented. Blessings to you, Sandy.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Your computer skills are really edifying to your work. No doubt this is your calling. I am sure children are delighted to read your work for you a very talented. Blessings to you, Sandy.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much, Chuck, for this lovely review and golden star! I do enjoy writing for children, especially in rhyme because it's easier for them to read. I've now got to get this one ready to publish as well as Betrayal, so I won't be on here as much for a while. I hope your editing is coming along well? Thank you again, my dear friend, for you constant support throughout. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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I understand and wish you the best.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think this is a great little story and with the blank illustrations for the kids to colour in I am sure it will be a winner.
A couple of things I noticed:
The first picture - after the second stanza - is of a shark. You can clearly see the gills.
Typo here in the author's notes:
'the poor whales toothache.' => Apostrophe needed in whale's.
The rest is sheer magic. Good luck with this one.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I think this is a great little story and with the blank illustrations for the kids to colour in I am sure it will be a winner.
A couple of things I noticed:
The first picture - after the second stanza - is of a shark. You can clearly see the gills.
Typo here in the author's notes:
'the poor whales toothache.' => Apostrophe needed in whale's.
The rest is sheer magic. Good luck with this one.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Aw, thank you so much, Jim, for this lovely review. As soon as I read I'd put a shark instead of a while up there, I went straight into Pixabay and found one of the whale with his mouth open. There are loads of other whales and sharks but not many Orca whales with open mouths. I needed him to be under water. Half way through I wished I'd had the shark with the toothache, but I couldn't go back and change what I'd done so far.
Thanks for the wonderful comments, Jim, and the apostrophe error. All sorted. I have a visitor staying this week until Sunday, so I'll have a chat next week if you are around?
Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's always a pleasure to be taken back in time and get to be a child again, if only for the few minutes while I read one of your children's poem books. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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It's always a pleasure to be taken back in time and get to be a child again, if only for the few minutes while I read one of your children's poem books. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Aw, thank you so much, Ric! I'm delighted there are so many older kids on this site that enjoy going back to their childhood, like me! Lol. Thank you so much for the sixth shiny star, too, my friend. You are so kind. Love and hugs coming your way. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Eunice Amero
This is so sweet. You are so talentive. Wished I'd of written it. But you deserve the credit. There was a wor, I don't want tp fig your work up but you have out twice. But it's up to you but maybe you could put, "Let's try it now." Out and now dosn't really ryhme but somehow shout, stout. You look up out to see the ryhmning words. But forgive me for trying to mess up your writing. I simply love this. It is so sweet. Keep up the good work and I was happy they got the tooth out. LOL
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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This is so sweet. You are so talentive. Wished I'd of written it. But you deserve the credit. There was a wor, I don't want tp fig your work up but you have out twice. But it's up to you but maybe you could put, "Let's try it now." Out and now dosn't really ryhme but somehow shout, stout. You look up out to see the ryhmning words. But forgive me for trying to mess up your writing. I simply love this. It is so sweet. Keep up the good work and I was happy they got the tooth out. LOL
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hi, Eunice, Thank you so very much for this really wonderful review and the golden sixth star! More than that, thank you big time for spotting that stanza with the same word ending. I hadn't noticed that!! I have changed it now to read ....
"It just might work--
Let?s try a strand,"
said Poppy, and
reached out her hand.
I'm really so grateful to you for that! I'm delighted you enjoyed this little tale, thank you for all your wonderful reviews. Warm hugs, my friend! :)) Sandra xxx
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Wow that works. You are more than welcome and I would love to see more of your work. I loved that sweet story. The photos matcched it right on. Thank you again for sharing it work like this should be published.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The pictures and poem
made a perfect ending, Sandra.
-You included a lot of sea creatures
who agreed to help.
-It was fun and informative, too.
-I loved the picture right after
"while we're inside." I think you
probably put that one together.
-The story flows, and there is
a lot of team work, a perfect
idea for children learning how
problems can be solved.
-The whale had quite an
ordeal, but it all worked out in the end!
-All of the teeth images were great, too.
-You should be very proud of
the whole project!!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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-The pictures and poem
made a perfect ending, Sandra.
-You included a lot of sea creatures
who agreed to help.
-It was fun and informative, too.
-I loved the picture right after
"while we're inside." I think you
probably put that one together.
-The story flows, and there is
a lot of team work, a perfect
idea for children learning how
problems can be solved.
-The whale had quite an
ordeal, but it all worked out in the end!
-All of the teeth images were great, too.
-You should be very proud of
the whole project!!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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That was a hard picture to do, getting the children inside the whale's mouth, lol. Can you just imagine that?
Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Pam, I'm so pleased you thought the ending was perfect. I will most likely split this part in two as it had 30 stanzas while the others had 16-18. I wanted to finish it this week. I can't believe the reception it got from everyone. It seems the older we get the younger we are in spirit, lol. Thank you, my friend, your reviews have always been amazing. Sending love and hugs your way. :)) Sandra xxxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. No, I cannot imagine children in a whale's mouth! I agree with you about the younger spirit, too. Hugs are sent back to you:):)
Comment from Begin Again
I always have a six for you and your wonderful children's story...The animals and the children all coming together to help a friend in need is an awesome lesson and story for the children who will read your books.
Great job! It made me smile from start to end.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I always have a six for you and your wonderful children's story...The animals and the children all coming together to help a friend in need is an awesome lesson and story for the children who will read your books.
Great job! It made me smile from start to end.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review and the sixth gold star, Carol! I really am pleased you enjoyed reading it. Now to catch up on my own reviewing. I'd no sooner posted this part when both my boys and their families decided to descend on me! Full house, but so nice! Warm hugs my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Sandra, isn't this just too sweet. I loved it, and they finally got the tooth out. Your imagination is wonderful, and the poetic form just suits this so very well. I have very much enjoyed it. I'm sure Odi and Poppy will be over the moon when they see this. A big hug, Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Awe, Sandra, isn't this just too sweet. I loved it, and they finally got the tooth out. Your imagination is wonderful, and the poetic form just suits this so very well. I have very much enjoyed it. I'm sure Odi and Poppy will be over the moon when they see this. A big hug, Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you so very much for this wonderful review, Ulla, and all the lovely stars. I really hope the children will enjoy reading it when Alexis gives them both a copy. I will have it all ready for her when she returns from France. I'm sure she'll stay with us a few days before heading back to Scotland. Sending you a warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx