The Pool
A Reverie44 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad poem of rememberance likened to the nature you see before you. Your words were a joy to read and the artwork matched perfectly. I loved the picture you painted of the heron and her ballet dance skimming the water, just perfect, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This is a sad poem of rememberance likened to the nature you see before you. Your words were a joy to read and the artwork matched perfectly. I loved the picture you painted of the heron and her ballet dance skimming the water, just perfect, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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What a lovely review, Dolly! Many thanks. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Teri7
Tony, This is a very hauntingly beautiful poem to me. You used great descriptive words and lovely art work! Blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Tony, This is a very hauntingly beautiful poem to me. You used great descriptive words and lovely art work! Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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What a lovely review, Teri! Many thanks. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from jppoet
Another of your great poems, artfully sculpted with rich rhymes and whose musical metrical cadences dance in sweet harmony with your lovely photo. Congrats. john
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Another of your great poems, artfully sculpted with rich rhymes and whose musical metrical cadences dance in sweet harmony with your lovely photo. Congrats. john
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks for your review of this one, John. I was consciously attempting some euphony of vowel sounds and so particularly appreciated your comments about the musicality of the piece. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
When I first looked at the two blocks of text, octave and sestet, all in iambic pentameter I thought "Petrarchsn Sonnet" but when I began to read I realised this was something else. The rhyme scheme -- here entirely in rhyming couplets debarred this from that classification, despite the two distinct subjects, the fish in the octave and the fisherman (heron) in the sestet.
This seemed to invite the reader to concentrate on the euphony created by the differing vowel sounds in turn created often from the same vowel letters. Technically this abrogation of assonance shouldn't work, but what it does is remove the banality that can become the curse of the rhyming couplet, especially when continued over a number of lines.
I recognise where this is coming frome and as a first atttempt at this style I think you have done brilliantly.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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When I first looked at the two blocks of text, octave and sestet, all in iambic pentameter I thought "Petrarchsn Sonnet" but when I began to read I realised this was something else. The rhyme scheme -- here entirely in rhyming couplets debarred this from that classification, despite the two distinct subjects, the fish in the octave and the fisherman (heron) in the sestet.
This seemed to invite the reader to concentrate on the euphony created by the differing vowel sounds in turn created often from the same vowel letters. Technically this abrogation of assonance shouldn't work, but what it does is remove the banality that can become the curse of the rhyming couplet, especially when continued over a number of lines.
I recognise where this is coming frome and as a first atttempt at this style I think you have done brilliantly.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks, Jim. Glad you found this euphonious. You are right - that is exactly what I was aiming for. The poetic form is heroic verse, rhymed couplets in iambic pentameter, but I decided not to describe it as such because of the occasional metric inversions and slant rhymes. I did have the structure of the Petrarchan sonnet in the back of my mind, too - which explains the arrangement into an octet and sestet. A great pleasure to have such a perceptive review and six stars from you just before I hit the hay! Good night!