Unyielding Trial
on mental health41 total reviews
Comment from catch22
Hi Jimi, it's been awhile. You've penned a dramatic write that I assume was haibun. If so, I would consider revisiting the end stanzas because they grew a bit wordy compared with the rest of the poem. The imagery is stark and powerful as you map the psyche of a depression sufferer. Powerful writing.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
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Hi Jimi, it's been awhile. You've penned a dramatic write that I assume was haibun. If so, I would consider revisiting the end stanzas because they grew a bit wordy compared with the rest of the poem. The imagery is stark and powerful as you map the psyche of a depression sufferer. Powerful writing.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
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catch, it has been a while. I vacillate between coming back and staying away. Life is just busy. I am sure you can relate. I will check on the last stanza. thank you so very much for your review. I am humbled.. jimi
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I completely understand. Life does have a way of getting in the way. I am glad you are back for now.