Swirling swallows.
Wending wheeling.83 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Swirling swallows bedlam's bag
Wending wheeling twirl and tag
Tumbling turning flutt'rings flight
Cluttering clowns pluck their plight
Hawks come hunting surf the skies
Silent stalking their surprise
Silly swallows spirit's sag.
Do you know, I'm still learning all these different styles, Roy - another that is new to me -- and so cleverly presented - no wonder it's a winner - congratulations, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Swirling swallows bedlam's bag
Wending wheeling twirl and tag
Tumbling turning flutt'rings flight
Cluttering clowns pluck their plight
Hawks come hunting surf the skies
Silent stalking their surprise
Silly swallows spirit's sag.
Do you know, I'm still learning all these different styles, Roy - another that is new to me -- and so cleverly presented - no wonder it's a winner - congratulations, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks Margaret for these lovely worse and great review, I appreciate them. Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Mark Valentine
Congrats on the well-deserved contest win. A great poem that goes above and beyond the contest requirements in terms of alliteration with not just one, but two examples in almost every line. The poem not only sounds great, but you wove a coherent narrative. Wish I had a six left.
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Congrats on the well-deserved contest win. A great poem that goes above and beyond the contest requirements in terms of alliteration with not just one, but two examples in almost every line. The poem not only sounds great, but you wove a coherent narrative. Wish I had a six left.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Your approval's enough Mark, thank you for the great wrap, blessings, Roy.
Comment from nomi338
Wow! Alliteration gone wild. You certainly fulfilled the requirements of the writing prompt and at the same time you created a realistic scenario that was reinforced by your excellent visual representation. This was a perfect union of visual and verbal creating a unified message.
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Wow! Alliteration gone wild. You certainly fulfilled the requirements of the writing prompt and at the same time you created a realistic scenario that was reinforced by your excellent visual representation. This was a perfect union of visual and verbal creating a unified message.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks, for this wonderful review and comments,
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My pleasure.
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. I enjoyed the read with rhyme and alliteration. This makes a worthy entry. Best wishes for the prompt. I wanted to enter but missed the deadline.
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Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. I enjoyed the read with rhyme and alliteration. This makes a worthy entry. Best wishes for the prompt. I wanted to enter but missed the deadline.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks, for this wonderful review and comments,
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good entry for the Alliteration contest. Very well done. The description of the swallows flight is good. A bit uncertain about line four, but overall a fine entry for the contest. Good Luck - warm regards Dorothy x
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A good entry for the Alliteration contest. Very well done. The description of the swallows flight is good. A bit uncertain about line four, but overall a fine entry for the contest. Good Luck - warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks Dorothy, for this wonderful review and comments,
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Nice rhyming scheme in this Rhyming Alliterisen. I love your theme and the alliteration you employed really worked. It is a tasking contest. Good luck.
ola thomas
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Nice rhyming scheme in this Rhyming Alliterisen. I love your theme and the alliteration you employed really worked. It is a tasking contest. Good luck.
ola thomas
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks, for this wonderful review and comments,
Comment from Dawn Munro
WOW! I am so impressed with this poem I hardly know where to begin - with so much alliteration, one would think some of it would sound a bit forced, but this is as smooth as a baby's behind! What imagery too - WOW. Best of luck. I enjoyed this very much!
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WOW! I am so impressed with this poem I hardly know where to begin - with so much alliteration, one would think some of it would sound a bit forced, but this is as smooth as a baby's behind! What imagery too - WOW. Best of luck. I enjoyed this very much!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks Dawn, you are the queen of encouragement, thank you.
Comment from mfowler
You've cleverly described these will of the wisp characters in this well structured and entertaining poem. You certainly employed the alliterations effectively and seem to have met guidelines. I liked the final line with its 4 alliterations in a row:
Silly swallows spirit's sag.
Best of luck.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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You've cleverly described these will of the wisp characters in this well structured and entertaining poem. You certainly employed the alliterations effectively and seem to have met guidelines. I liked the final line with its 4 alliterations in a row:
Silly swallows spirit's sag.
Best of luck.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks Mark, for this wonderful review and encouraging comments,
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job with the rhythm and alliteration of the prompt, I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job with the rhythm and alliteration of the prompt, I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks SW, for this wonderful review and comments,
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a brillliant one, really fantastic. I wish I had a 6 for this one. Not only did you follow the rules but you have captured the whole essence of the swallow. They are the most flighty of all the birds. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
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That was a brillliant one, really fantastic. I wish I had a 6 for this one. Not only did you follow the rules but you have captured the whole essence of the swallow. They are the most flighty of all the birds. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks Sandra, for this wonderful and most encouraging comments,
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You are welcome, I voted for you, it was the best by a mile. I see you won! Congratulations. xxx