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In Fiddler's Field

A Minute Contest Entry

52 total reviews 
Comment from kiwisteveh
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A lovely atmospheric piece - Founders Field - Why the change from Fiddlers Field, I wonder - I quite liked that...

meets the requirements of the Minute Poem form very well in both rhyme and meter.

Second verse in particular sounds gloomy/doomy.

I am slightly puzzled by 'should you survive your fate lies sealed' - must be a fate worse than death then....

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    I liked it much better too, Steve. But when two reviewers ask me how it pertained to music, I thought I'd better change it. Do you like Fiddler's Field better? If so, I'll switch it back while there's still time.

    Anyhow, thanks very much for the feedback. I appreciate it.
reply by kiwisteveh on 04-Apr-2015
    It's just a name I guess - something that helps evoke the haunted nature of the place and retains the alliteration is what you're after - splitting hairs!
Comment from flylikeaneagle
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Five x Five! Excellent rhymes and beat and color of ink. Spooky with the strangeness of the moon, Dean. You have your own style like an artist with a brush full of paint. I enjoy reading your amazing poems and stories. The moon is full tonight, be safe! Don't forget the hamburgers and s'mores at the campfire.
flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Thank you, Nancy, I won't forget.
    Have a blessed resurrection Sunday, my friend. :)
Comment from LIJ Red
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Now I wonder who would write such a thing and thank us for reading their work?
I've read a few minute poems so I'll not count syllables and all that. The images
and flow here are quite excellent.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Doesn't everyone thank the readers for reading their work? I'd never really noticed. As for me, I feel it is the least that I can do.

    Much obliged, Red. ;)
Comment from Kingsrookviii
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I enjoyed this poem and respect the format constraints you dealt with. The language is tremendous and has a good scary feel to it. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts with me about the poem, John. I very much appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from Delahay
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This is not a very cheerful poem is it? It does describe the eerie feeling of a graveyard at night with the moonlight shining on the tombstones. It does not have to be an evil place but it is easy to picture it so.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    This one speaks to those old family secrets some families wish to stay buried but often don't, Delahay.

    Thanks so much for reading and reviewing my work. It is very much appreciated.
Comment from MoonMuse
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Fantastic job on the Minute form. The imagery is wonderful. "...and ghosts she brings/out from their tombs/death's barren wombs..." - love it. Flawless flow and solid rhymes from start to finish. This was not at all what I was expecting considering the title is so close to "In Flander's Fields", but I was pleasantly surprised. Best of luck with the contest. Cheers!

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    Thank you for the very generous six star rating and encouraging review, MoonMuse. I'm so glad to know that you enjoyed this.

    Have a very Happy Easter. :)
Comment from patcelaw
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Nicely written for the format. Good luck in the contest.
May you weekend be blessed and may the message of hope Easter brings, dwell in you heart. Patricia

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for your review and thoughtful Easter wishes, Patricia.
Comment from artemis53
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Very well done and it looks like it's in the parameters. This is the first contest entry that I've seen with this macabre theme making it quite unique.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for your review, artemis. ~
Comment from shanat
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Yep gave me the creeps! The color contrast works too adding extra fright, inspired a second read and the poem flows really well.
Thanks, shanat :)

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    Thank you very much for your thoughtful review, shanat.~
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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This was well written. Before I read it I thought it had to do with music. Picture fully supported the poem. Poem flowed nicely from one verse to the next. Write on.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2015

reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
    Thanx for your encouraging comments, bmwhsd. They are very much appreciated. :}