Clocks stand motionless
The Lost87 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I like the proximate rhyme in time/defined = lost/soul doesn't work as well for me
What is the prepares - that phrase isn't working for me at all
To lose one's life companion all those years has to be heart shattering. A thoughtful expression of grief.
Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I like the proximate rhyme in time/defined = lost/soul doesn't work as well for me
What is the prepares - that phrase isn't working for me at all
To lose one's life companion all those years has to be heart shattering. A thoughtful expression of grief.
Brooke
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Why would someone review if you don't like the work or is it the money
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reviews are meant to offer constructive criticism - that is their purpose
Comment from arnie47
The last line just floored me. What a powerful piece. Talk about time standing still and it does because events like this are forever frozen in our minds. Great job.
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The last line just floored me. What a powerful piece. Talk about time standing still and it does because events like this are forever frozen in our minds. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Kingsland
I get the over all meaning in this poem. You have good emotions being drawn to the reader in it. This one line I just doesn't make sense for me as you have it written.
What is the prepares, why continue on life,
What is the prepares just doesn't ring right in my ear and seems to be grammatically incorrect.
Other than that I found this piece to be well written and to have a good voice... John
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I get the over all meaning in this poem. You have good emotions being drawn to the reader in it. This one line I just doesn't make sense for me as you have it written.
What is the prepares, why continue on life,
What is the prepares just doesn't ring right in my ear and seems to be grammatically incorrect.
Other than that I found this piece to be well written and to have a good voice... John
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks john
Comment from Janet Foor
So sorry for your loss GW.
"Clocks stand motionless" is a well written phrase. It conveys thought provoking and unsettling emotions.
Well done.
Janet
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So sorry for your loss GW.
"Clocks stand motionless" is a well written phrase. It conveys thought provoking and unsettling emotions.
Well done.
Janet
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from lauriesummer
This piece is beautiful, but also abstract and a bit difficult to comprehend. The ending, however, is beautiful. As humans, we can take something as simple as a clock, and it can be the inspiration for our questioning what life is all about, and how we will go on, when, in many ways, time has stopped. Wishing you well.
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This piece is beautiful, but also abstract and a bit difficult to comprehend. The ending, however, is beautiful. As humans, we can take something as simple as a clock, and it can be the inspiration for our questioning what life is all about, and how we will go on, when, in many ways, time has stopped. Wishing you well.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Louise Michelle
It isn't easy when we lose a loved one, but it is comforting to know that our souls live on and we will be united in the after life. Nicely written. Hugs, Lou
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It isn't easy when we lose a loved one, but it is comforting to know that our souls live on and we will be united in the after life. Nicely written. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks Lou
Comment from Bryan G
My condolences go out to you Deepwater. Words cannot express the sorrow that you are feeling, but words are comfort for the poet in the worst of times. I will keep you in my prayers.
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My condolences go out to you Deepwater. Words cannot express the sorrow that you are feeling, but words are comfort for the poet in the worst of times. I will keep you in my prayers.
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Thanks Bryan
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Sad poem but one that is felt by half the couples on Earth at some point. I was just talking about this to another member recently. What a sad way to end your life... alone and grieving. Life isn't easy.
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Sad poem but one that is felt by half the couples on Earth at some point. I was just talking about this to another member recently. What a sad way to end your life... alone and grieving. Life isn't easy.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Comment from chasennov
The Lost "Clocks stand motionless" Losing someone is a terrible experience that happens to the best people in the world. It is something or someone nothing can be replaced with. An excellent poem you have created here. Well done.
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The Lost "Clocks stand motionless" Losing someone is a terrible experience that happens to the best people in the world. It is something or someone nothing can be replaced with. An excellent poem you have created here. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you
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My pleasure.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Beautiful poem and heart-wrenching. If this is true please accept my deepest condolences. Your words are lovely and the artwork you picked is terrific with this poem. Regards, AT=/
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Beautiful poem and heart-wrenching. If this is true please accept my deepest condolences. Your words are lovely and the artwork you picked is terrific with this poem. Regards, AT=/
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you