Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Good Night, Keilah"A collection of my children's poems
63 total reviews
Comment from krys123
This poem was written very beautifully and a great tribute to you granddaughter. This is a great poem for any child to be read to and it's very mystifying in the way that it is written with the magical creatures that the words and in the sea. Your rhyming was done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained except for one way you use they syllabic rhyme and being between "been" and "green" which is truly fine but very different for some others. Your rhythm was also done very well and made it easy for me to read and understand your poem very correctly. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex/AK
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This poem was written very beautifully and a great tribute to you granddaughter. This is a great poem for any child to be read to and it's very mystifying in the way that it is written with the magical creatures that the words and in the sea. Your rhyming was done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained except for one way you use they syllabic rhyme and being between "been" and "green" which is truly fine but very different for some others. Your rhythm was also done very well and made it easy for me to read and understand your poem very correctly. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex/AK
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Alex, thanks a lot for your kind review of my children's poem.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome Steve
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Well, I certainly can relate to this! I have four grandsons, so I know the pull they have upon your heart. Adapearl writes about her grandson, Sawyer too.
I love this and the cute picture. I had one girl and three boys, so I really had fun with this phase of fairy princesses.
No doubt this will be a family heirloom to pass down for generations.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Well, I certainly can relate to this! I have four grandsons, so I know the pull they have upon your heart. Adapearl writes about her grandson, Sawyer too.
I love this and the cute picture. I had one girl and three boys, so I really had fun with this phase of fairy princesses.
No doubt this will be a family heirloom to pass down for generations.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks a lot for the kind words. It is wonderful to have grandchildren to share things like this with.
Steve
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Steve. You are right, the name could be substituted very easily...not to take away from your intent for your grand daughter of course> I love this from start to finish, Steve. Bob
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hi, Steve. You are right, the name could be substituted very easily...not to take away from your intent for your grand daughter of course> I love this from start to finish, Steve. Bob
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Bob, thanks so much for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from emrpoems
A wonderfully written poem to be enjoyed by children.
Good meter and aabb rhymes. Easy flow of words.
Great repetition of your lines and a lovely lullaby
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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A wonderfully written poem to be enjoyed by children.
Good meter and aabb rhymes. Easy flow of words.
Great repetition of your lines and a lovely lullaby
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from jmdg1954
This was wonderfully done. The photo was a great inspiration for your poem. The flow of the wording seemed effortless to write because it was so to read. The rhyme was spot on and I would like to email this to my daughter-in-law so they can read it to my two grandchildren (if you don't mind?)
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This was wonderfully done. The photo was a great inspiration for your poem. The flow of the wording seemed effortless to write because it was so to read. The rhyme was spot on and I would like to email this to my daughter-in-law so they can read it to my two grandchildren (if you don't mind?)
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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John, thanks for the great review.
Of course you can share it around.
Steve
Comment from allborn66
This is a very cute poem. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece. The word choice is appropriate for the intended audience.
Barbara
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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This is a very cute poem. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece. The word choice is appropriate for the intended audience.
Barbara
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks, Barbara - glad you enjoyed this.
Steve
Comment from GWHARGIS
I have three grandchildren and just may take you up on your offer. I liked the fairy tale feel to this. I know little children, girls especially, love to pretend and fairies and princesses are a big hit. What a lucky girl she is to have sucha talented and loving grandmother. Nice imagery and the rhyming was great. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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I have three grandchildren and just may take you up on your offer. I liked the fairy tale feel to this. I know little children, girls especially, love to pretend and fairies and princesses are a big hit. What a lucky girl she is to have sucha talented and loving grandmother. Nice imagery and the rhyming was great. Nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the lovely review.
Steve
Comment from Janie King
How absolutely adorable.I love the fairy costume and the tennis shoes. She has to be such a delight. There's nothing more special gift from God than the gift of a child. This is an adorable poem. I have no children or grandchildren and I'm 66 so the odds are none are none are coming along. But I have two adorable little male Maltese puppies that would probably enjoy it. Delightful read. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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How absolutely adorable.I love the fairy costume and the tennis shoes. She has to be such a delight. There's nothing more special gift from God than the gift of a child. This is an adorable poem. I have no children or grandchildren and I'm 66 so the odds are none are none are coming along. But I have two adorable little male Maltese puppies that would probably enjoy it. Delightful read. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Ha, ha. You could probably read the telephone directory to your dogs and they would appreciate it....
Thanks for reviewing.
Steve
Comment from strandregs
Man you've nailed pure and
Brilliant execution of an enchanting format. And so captivating for children.
I saloot your mastery.
I extended the salute for effect :)
Z.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Man you've nailed pure and
Brilliant execution of an enchanting format. And so captivating for children.
I saloot your mastery.
I extended the salute for effect :)
Z.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Zelick, thanks so much for the rave review and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from BLACKDYKE
A very good goodnight verse kiwi'
The rhyming and the rhythm are simply
beautiful. I just love the repetitivity
of it all too. Such a singing and dancing
poem for children. Sorry it's worth a
sixer, but I ain't any left. Eric
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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A very good goodnight verse kiwi'
The rhyming and the rhythm are simply
beautiful. I just love the repetitivity
of it all too. Such a singing and dancing
poem for children. Sorry it's worth a
sixer, but I ain't any left. Eric
Comment Written 23-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Eric, thanks for the warm review and the virtual six.
Steve
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My pleasure