Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is very good. Just keep an eye on your dialogue.
He reluctantly continued. "I foolishly believed I could keep this business to myself, but I see that's not going to be possible now. I must warn you that some of what you'll hear will require you to have faith, also, in me." ( comma after continued)
"I never thought I'd live to see this day." Brian quipped. (comma after day)
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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This is very good. Just keep an eye on your dialogue.
He reluctantly continued. "I foolishly believed I could keep this business to myself, but I see that's not going to be possible now. I must warn you that some of what you'll hear will require you to have faith, also, in me." ( comma after continued)
"I never thought I'd live to see this day." Brian quipped. (comma after day)
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank so much barbara!