Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Fairy Playground"A collection of my children's poems
57 total reviews
Comment from Bayberry
What a spritely delight you've presented here. The words trip along nicely down to the land of sleep and dreams. It's very well written and the choice of artwork is perfect.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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What a spritely delight you've presented here. The words trip along nicely down to the land of sleep and dreams. It's very well written and the choice of artwork is perfect.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Steve
Comment from volunteer angel
Your poem flows like music and the rhymes were absolutely wonderful! The use of metaphors was well done. "Sparkling gems and gleaming gold" was great alliteration. So was the personification used in this poem. Great job! V.A.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Your poem flows like music and the rhymes were absolutely wonderful! The use of metaphors was well done. "Sparkling gems and gleaming gold" was great alliteration. So was the personification used in this poem. Great job! V.A.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the enthusiastic review and the six stars - I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This was a lovely poem. Your words painted a lovely picture. It was very cleverly written and very well thought out. I enjoyed reading it very much kiwisteveh.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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This was a lovely poem. Your words painted a lovely picture. It was very cleverly written and very well thought out. I enjoyed reading it very much kiwisteveh.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Steve
Comment from Carolyn 12
This is such a pretty vision reading your words of fairies..So easy to visualize what you wrote and with the picture as background-even better..Thank you so much for sharing..
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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This is such a pretty vision reading your words of fairies..So easy to visualize what you wrote and with the picture as background-even better..Thank you so much for sharing..
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Ekim777
How does one assess a dream like fantasy. Who could not love this spell binding piece. Mid way I thought of Puck and his crew and suddenly he pranced into view. Your rhythm went like a song; you never faltered and your rhyming was consummate, you sounded as if you could go on forever. It would have been nice is something extraordinary could have occurred or am I being insatiable. One is left wondering what kind of world you live in. -Ekim
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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How does one assess a dream like fantasy. Who could not love this spell binding piece. Mid way I thought of Puck and his crew and suddenly he pranced into view. Your rhythm went like a song; you never faltered and your rhyming was consummate, you sounded as if you could go on forever. It would have been nice is something extraordinary could have occurred or am I being insatiable. One is left wondering what kind of world you live in. -Ekim
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you - yes, it was tempting to go on, and yes, I did contemplate a magical event for the ending, but to tell the truth, I couldn't think of anything suitable so I decided to retain the 'feel' and just send them all off to sleep.
As for my world - there are no fairies, alas. An ogre or two maybe...
Steve
Comment from --Turtle.
I read through this poem,
I thought it was perfectly crafted.
The imagery is creative and witty, the rhyming and flow draws a person in, I loved the fairy tale appeal and the alliteration. The mood set is fun as a whole world is woven around the reader.
I really enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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I read through this poem,
I thought it was perfectly crafted.
The imagery is creative and witty, the rhyming and flow draws a person in, I loved the fairy tale appeal and the alliteration. The mood set is fun as a whole world is woven around the reader.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind words - glad you enjoyed the fairytale.
Steve
Comment from Colette
This is a beautiful little poem which amuses the child
within. Beautifully written, I totally enjoyed my visit
to the fairy playground, thank you.
Colette
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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This is a beautiful little poem which amuses the child
within. Beautifully written, I totally enjoyed my visit
to the fairy playground, thank you.
Colette
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Colette.
Hopefully that's settled the child within me for a while and I can get mack to my usual silly stuff!
Steve
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Fabulous poem - Brilliant rhyming - Great imagery.
I can just see those fairies astride the bumble bees and zipping through threes with Yeehah, lol
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Fabulous poem - Brilliant rhyming - Great imagery.
I can just see those fairies astride the bumble bees and zipping through threes with Yeehah, lol
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Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Yeehah!?
It's not broncos they're riding you know - the correct term is 'Beehah!'
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
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"Beehah!" Brilliant! lol
Comment from fun_tosha
I will be reviewing your poem. Remember that these are only my personal suggestions and ultimately you and only you can decide what works best for your poem.
Title: The title of the poem is good.
Grammar, Punctuation, Grammar, Spelling: None found by me.
My favorite part: I liked the first and the forth stanza the most. They won my heart :)
Reaction ; I could imagine the scene and i loved the way you expressed it.
Kudos and Applause: I loved the flow and the rhythm of the poem. I also liked the rhyming words that you used.
The words suit the topic and the topic fits the theme.
Overall Impression: I liked the poem a lot. Keep up the good work.
Keep sharing your work with us.
Thanks for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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I will be reviewing your poem. Remember that these are only my personal suggestions and ultimately you and only you can decide what works best for your poem.
Title: The title of the poem is good.
Grammar, Punctuation, Grammar, Spelling: None found by me.
My favorite part: I liked the first and the forth stanza the most. They won my heart :)
Reaction ; I could imagine the scene and i loved the way you expressed it.
Kudos and Applause: I loved the flow and the rhythm of the poem. I also liked the rhyming words that you used.
The words suit the topic and the topic fits the theme.
Overall Impression: I liked the poem a lot. Keep up the good work.
Keep sharing your work with us.
Thanks for sharing your work.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review!
Steve
Comment from misscookie
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This is marvelous ,just marvelous. You should get publish for a children poem/story book. I could see them laughing as it read to them or others reading by themselves its for children of all ages. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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This is marvelous ,just marvelous. You should get publish for a children poem/story book. I could see them laughing as it read to them or others reading by themselves its for children of all ages. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2011
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Thank you - I have a few poems I may try to get published one day. I am glad you enjoyed my fairy poem - it is a first for me.
Steve
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Your welcome, you did a great job.goos luck that's what I want to do but itcost so much money.