Another Pretty Face
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Comment from bookishfabler
All I know, I wouldn't let that man out of my arms after what he did for my daughter. Great chapter.
"We just discussed how good Joe is with Cassie." Dani reached for Sara's hand and motioned for her to sit. "Why are you afraid to admit how much you love (-Joe((him)?"
raped you like it was his standard behavior . Why are you using these excuses to deny your love for him?"
(Move over period)
hugs book
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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All I know, I wouldn't let that man out of my arms after what he did for my daughter. Great chapter.
"We just discussed how good Joe is with Cassie." Dani reached for Sara's hand and motioned for her to sit. "Why are you afraid to admit how much you love (-Joe((him)?"
raped you like it was his standard behavior . Why are you using these excuses to deny your love for him?"
(Move over period)
hugs book
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and eagle eye. I will check out those areas.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Ah, yes. It's self-examination time. The arguements and revelations are clear enough to chart them pro and con. Sara's friends, and Joe's, seem to have an awful lot invested in a "relationship" that's barely two weeks old. I know where I'd go with this. I wonder what you'll do. Such suspense! Good work. By the way, no SPAG that jumped out and bit me. Nancy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Ah, yes. It's self-examination time. The arguements and revelations are clear enough to chart them pro and con. Sara's friends, and Joe's, seem to have an awful lot invested in a "relationship" that's barely two weeks old. I know where I'd go with this. I wonder what you'll do. Such suspense! Good work. By the way, no SPAG that jumped out and bit me. Nancy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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We shall see where I go with this. I know where I'm going because the novel is finished. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bowls
Another fascinating chapter. I'm so glad you aren't rushing to an ending (as I probably would be tempted to do) and are giving the relationship time after all the trauma. I'll be sad when the story ends; I've found it so interesting. Happy New Year to you, and I hope 2011 proves to be a very good year for you.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Another fascinating chapter. I'm so glad you aren't rushing to an ending (as I probably would be tempted to do) and are giving the relationship time after all the trauma. I'll be sad when the story ends; I've found it so interesting. Happy New Year to you, and I hope 2011 proves to be a very good year for you.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from mshugh
the pitcher of tea - change it to "a pitcher of tea" = the "the" makes it sound like we are going for a specific pitcher of tea - which you have not introduced - make sense?
Now you will find this VERY funny - but you should check with the hubby - I don't think that's a serious crime, do you?"
I don't know many men who could string together a sentence that long withour pausing or hemming and hawing - especially military men - LOL - no a fault - just a chuckle.
Holy mother - your dialogue is like a 1000% better - bava! bravissima!
Intense - love it!
Happy New Year and I hope you are recovering
All the best for 2011
Michael
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the pitcher of tea - change it to "a pitcher of tea" = the "the" makes it sound like we are going for a specific pitcher of tea - which you have not introduced - make sense?
Now you will find this VERY funny - but you should check with the hubby - I don't think that's a serious crime, do you?"
I don't know many men who could string together a sentence that long withour pausing or hemming and hawing - especially military men - LOL - no a fault - just a chuckle.
Holy mother - your dialogue is like a 1000% better - bava! bravissima!
Intense - love it!
Happy New Year and I hope you are recovering
All the best for 2011
Michael
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and chuckles. I appreciate your insight. I hope you have a great Christmas and have a wonderful New Year. I hope 2011 isn't as busy for you.
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You're welcome as always
Comment from R. K. Alan
Well... she has gotten a lot of helpful advice... will she finally admit it. Will she finally let her guard down. I am getting a little frustrated by that woman. Ray aka krylon
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Well... she has gotten a lot of helpful advice... will she finally admit it. Will she finally let her guard down. I am getting a little frustrated by that woman. Ray aka krylon
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I think Sara will get her act together, at least I hope so.
Comment from marcii
I wouldn't have thought after this much time of knowing him it would be such a hard decision though one has to remember she was raped in her passed which would make her more harder for her to truly trust anyone very close to her. Also she must conceder Cassie, although I doubt their would be a problem their.
Good chapter
Marcii
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I wouldn't have thought after this much time of knowing him it would be such a hard decision though one has to remember she was raped in her passed which would make her more harder for her to truly trust anyone very close to her. Also she must conceder Cassie, although I doubt their would be a problem their.
Good chapter
Marcii
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Earthwriter
very nicely written you are a really good story teller and what you write is easy for the reader to follow and relate with nicely done
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very nicely written you are a really good story teller and what you write is easy for the reader to follow and relate with nicely done
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from LadyWave
I hope you are having some good days, Barbara! I've still been following the story... just didn't have a chance to comment on the last couple of chapters. There's something I thought was a little off in this chapter - after the ordeal she went through, I don't think Sara would let Cassie out of her sight, even if she just went to Sara's parents' house for the day. I feel like Sara would be more focused on Cassie than Joe right now. I also thought Cassie seemed a little too unfazed by the whole experience (sorry, I know that was the last few chapters, but I'm catching up). I was expecting her to be more rattled. Even if she wasn't physically harmed, it had to be a traumatic experience, being kept by those men. Her emotions in the aftermath didn't ring true to me. Just something to possibly consider. Looking forward to the next installment!
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I hope you are having some good days, Barbara! I've still been following the story... just didn't have a chance to comment on the last couple of chapters. There's something I thought was a little off in this chapter - after the ordeal she went through, I don't think Sara would let Cassie out of her sight, even if she just went to Sara's parents' house for the day. I feel like Sara would be more focused on Cassie than Joe right now. I also thought Cassie seemed a little too unfazed by the whole experience (sorry, I know that was the last few chapters, but I'm catching up). I was expecting her to be more rattled. Even if she wasn't physically harmed, it had to be a traumatic experience, being kept by those men. Her emotions in the aftermath didn't ring true to me. Just something to possibly consider. Looking forward to the next installment!
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I will take another look at that. Thank you for your review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this chapter, sara having a confidante to talk to is probably a different thing than she's used too. isn't it duffel bag?
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this chapter, sara having a confidante to talk to is probably a different thing than she's used too. isn't it duffel bag?
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nicnac
Nicely done!
I'm so glad Dani talked with Sara! Now she will face her fears and hopefully make the right decision.
I think there was a ring in the bag - and Joe didn't want her to find it. ;)
Didn't find any snags or spag.
Nic
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Nicely done!
I'm so glad Dani talked with Sara! Now she will face her fears and hopefully make the right decision.
I think there was a ring in the bag - and Joe didn't want her to find it. ;)
Didn't find any snags or spag.
Nic
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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We shall see if you are right. Thank you for your review.