Contest Entry and Winners
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Never Again"Short Stories
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Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Quite a great twist at the end. Yeah, it flowed very well and the contest requirements were met. Nothing to suggest, liked it all the way.
best of luck in contest
K
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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Quite a great twist at the end. Yeah, it flowed very well and the contest requirements were met. Nothing to suggest, liked it all the way.
best of luck in contest
K
Comment Written 13-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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Kashif,
Thanks for stopping by to read my story. As always, I appreciate the comments. Smiles to you...
Comment from RazberryBullet
Oh, this horrible thing happens far too often :( I'm glad Jack was finally caught in the act.
Liked this line especially: My heart shattered like a broken mirror, knowing neither her nor I had any control :)
Good job!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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Oh, this horrible thing happens far too often :( I'm glad Jack was finally caught in the act.
Liked this line especially: My heart shattered like a broken mirror, knowing neither her nor I had any control :)
Good job!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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RazzberryBullet,
Glad you enjoyed the story and one of my favorite lines as well. Thank you so much...Smiles to you
Comment from FredCollingwood
I should have killed you, you good for nothing pig > Gees. Don't candycoat it. I love this.
The room was buzzing with people, EMT's worked on the bullet hole in Jack's leg,> His leg?? Next time aim up a little and toward the middle.
Great story--Gripping!
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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I should have killed you, you good for nothing pig > Gees. Don't candycoat it. I love this.
The room was buzzing with people, EMT's worked on the bullet hole in Jack's leg,> His leg?? Next time aim up a little and toward the middle.
Great story--Gripping!
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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Fred,
I wanted to call him something else, but preferred not to turn x-rated. And yes, I thought about shooting him and raising his voice a few octaves...calling him BOBBIT...Thanks for the kind review. Smiles to you...
Comment from SteveG1960
You do an amazing job portraying a tragic part of our society. The tension you created drove the story at a heart pounding pace. I felt my body tense as Carrie stopped outside the bedroom door, great read and wonderful construction.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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You do an amazing job portraying a tragic part of our society. The tension you created drove the story at a heart pounding pace. I felt my body tense as Carrie stopped outside the bedroom door, great read and wonderful construction.
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2010
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Steve,
Thank you so much for reading and enjoying my story. The best gift possible is when someone else truly appreciates my work. Smiles to you...