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Comment from adewpearl
an twelve pound bundle - a twelve
What a lovely, inspirational story of a little baby who had the spirit and fight in him to overcome huge odds and live to see another day and another day and another day. :-) I could just picture him awakening and cooing at the surgeons. This is quite an emotional essay, a strong contender in the hero contest :-) Brooke
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an twelve pound bundle - a twelve
What a lovely, inspirational story of a little baby who had the spirit and fight in him to overcome huge odds and live to see another day and another day and another day. :-) I could just picture him awakening and cooing at the surgeons. This is quite an emotional essay, a strong contender in the hero contest :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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Brooke,
At forty two this year, I still am inspired by his loving heart...regardless of the brain damage, he is an exceptional son...smiles to you
Comment from Jeru
This is an awesome piece and hooray for all the miracle babies! The big question is: how is Johnny today? I would suggest bridging that time line :)
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This is an awesome piece and hooray for all the miracle babies! The big question is: how is Johnny today? I would suggest bridging that time line :)
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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Jeru,
I assumed since I used the date of 1968, people would know his age. But I have altered the ending to show that he is going to be 42 this year. His heart out shines the brain damage and I am truly lucky. smiles to you....
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a wonderful heart-warming story. Not only is it well written and well edited, it brought a lump to my throat at the thought of him waking up and cooing
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This is a wonderful heart-warming story. Not only is it well written and well edited, it brought a lump to my throat at the thought of him waking up and cooing
Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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Goldwell,
His heart is pure gold even though he does suffer from brain damage. I am thankful God gave him to me. Smiles....
Comment from Mrs Jones
I remember how an - a twelve pound. This is a beautiful story and that baby certainly is a hero. It is a pity that you wrote this in "telling" and not story form.
Good luck
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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I remember how an - a twelve pound. This is a beautiful story and that baby certainly is a hero. It is a pity that you wrote this in "telling" and not story form.
Good luck
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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Rose,
Thank you for reading Johnny's story. His heart is pure gold even if he suffers from brain damage. I am blessed to have him. Smiles to you....
Comment from frazzledauthor
This piece is well written, about a crisis well lived. The fear and the feeling of almost no hope are clearly portrayed. The aloneness of the situation is equally clear. Heroes do come in all sizes and ages. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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This piece is well written, about a crisis well lived. The fear and the feeling of almost no hope are clearly portrayed. The aloneness of the situation is equally clear. Heroes do come in all sizes and ages. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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frazzled,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate it very much...Smiles to you
Comment from dragonqueen1983
what a niced story you have withing your poem. is it always nice to read about a 'miracle'. i love the colours that you used
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what a niced story you have withing your poem. is it always nice to read about a 'miracle'. i love the colours that you used
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2010
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dragonqueen
I didn't realize it was under poems so I have asked Tom to correct my error..Thanks for reading...He is a miracle! Smiles to you,