Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a really cute little poem that I'm sure kids would enjoy. I don't get that part about Danny, though. Poor little guy who had a crack in his tooth and decided he didn't like eating honey and would go back to eating NUTS? I do not think he has thought that one through too well. hahahaha Thanks!
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a really cute little poem that I'm sure kids would enjoy. I don't get that part about Danny, though. Poor little guy who had a crack in his tooth and decided he didn't like eating honey and would go back to eating NUTS? I do not think he has thought that one through too well. hahahaha Thanks!
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I think this is funny also, thanks ...
Comment from Eliz T.
Very sweet and I like how it takes real animals, real behaviors and just ties them all together in a fun loving way. Obviously it is an imaginary scene, but it has roots in reality. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Very sweet and I like how it takes real animals, real behaviors and just ties them all together in a fun loving way. Obviously it is an imaginary scene, but it has roots in reality. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Eliz, I am grateful for your comments
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading this children's poem, I am very fond of this genre.
The rhymes work well here without feeling forced and they create a rhythm that is almost lyrical. The selected artwork is a perfect choice and adds an additional layer to your writing.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I enjoyed reading this children's poem, I am very fond of this genre.
The rhymes work well here without feeling forced and they create a rhythm that is almost lyrical. The selected artwork is a perfect choice and adds an additional layer to your writing.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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K.L. I do feel great reward from your comments, which I value, always!
Comment from Pantygynt
A good word teaching piece. Surely the quail should have been called Quentin if only to keep the alliterative pattern going. Or if Quentin is too posh, how about Queenie?
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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A good word teaching piece. Surely the quail should have been called Quentin if only to keep the alliterative pattern going. Or if Quentin is too posh, how about Queenie?
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Of course, duh ...I defer with respect and appreciation, my friend - Quentin it should be .
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello mystery poet a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your children's poem, nice flow, nice rhymes, and a fun message for the kids. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Hello mystery poet a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your children's poem, nice flow, nice rhymes, and a fun message for the kids. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I surely do appreciate your comment - I have been accused of using too adult words - but I think, how is a child to learn otherwise?