All Hallows Eve
Halloween Poetry Contest Submission41 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
!!! Wonderfully wrought!!!
The consistency of meter makes it a joy to read and the imagery is
spot on for the topic. The rhyming is like frosting on a carefully
carved cake.
It's virtually impossible for me to choose a favorite stanza, but
I must admit, the phrasing of
if you should dare,
To seek to meet
to trick or treat.
really was a tasty bon mot :-)
REALLY well done - - - and great pairing with the artwork :-)
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!!! Wonderfully wrought!!!
The consistency of meter makes it a joy to read and the imagery is
spot on for the topic. The rhyming is like frosting on a carefully
carved cake.
It's virtually impossible for me to choose a favorite stanza, but
I must admit, the phrasing of
if you should dare,
To seek to meet
to trick or treat.
really was a tasty bon mot :-)
REALLY well done - - - and great pairing with the artwork :-)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from robyn corum
I.,
Wow. Nice imagery here ... NOT. *smile* Love that artwork, though. For real. That is cool! This is a great entry for the Halloween contest. It should do well. I enjoyed the internal rhyming - I imagine that added another depth to the difficulty in the creation, eh? Well, nice job!
My favorite lines are:
So please beware if you should dare,
To seek to meet to trick or treat.
Foul demons roam the earth unseen,
On this, the night called Halloween.
--> extremely cool!
But -- I have a question... The following lines confuse me and I have to wonder if they are saying what you MEAN them to say...
There are few minds who ne'er escape,
The sinful lust of hells' sweet rape.
When you say there are FEW minds who NEVER escape...that sounds like MOST or MANY of the minds DO escape... see what I mean? So that doesn't sound too frightening... I don't think that's what you're intending. You may want to revise that...perhaps? Or am I misunderstanding? (That happens a lot! hahaha)
Thanks so much! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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I.,
Wow. Nice imagery here ... NOT. *smile* Love that artwork, though. For real. That is cool! This is a great entry for the Halloween contest. It should do well. I enjoyed the internal rhyming - I imagine that added another depth to the difficulty in the creation, eh? Well, nice job!
My favorite lines are:
So please beware if you should dare,
To seek to meet to trick or treat.
Foul demons roam the earth unseen,
On this, the night called Halloween.
--> extremely cool!
But -- I have a question... The following lines confuse me and I have to wonder if they are saying what you MEAN them to say...
There are few minds who ne'er escape,
The sinful lust of hells' sweet rape.
When you say there are FEW minds who NEVER escape...that sounds like MOST or MANY of the minds DO escape... see what I mean? So that doesn't sound too frightening... I don't think that's what you're intending. You may want to revise that...perhaps? Or am I misunderstanding? (That happens a lot! hahaha)
Thanks so much! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Hi,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing and for your insightful comments. You are absolutely right. That is not what I was intending so I have changed the line to read, ''There's but few minds who may escape''. I think that sounds better. Thank you again for reading and reviewing. Have a great day!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
superb supernatural poem perfect for Halloween, monstrously spooky fun, wonderful form and flow liked very much kind regards and good luck with the competition , meia xx
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superb supernatural poem perfect for Halloween, monstrously spooky fun, wonderful form and flow liked very much kind regards and good luck with the competition , meia xx
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Idamarty - this is an extremely well written poem. Good rhyme scheme throughout. In all stanzas, lines one and two have good internal rhyme and lines three and four are rhyming couplets. A very well thought out piece of work with a suitably fearful accompanying picture. Very good use of alliteration in 'stygian skies'. I wish I had a 6 left for you. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Idamarty - this is an extremely well written poem. Good rhyme scheme throughout. In all stanzas, lines one and two have good internal rhyme and lines three and four are rhyming couplets. A very well thought out piece of work with a suitably fearful accompanying picture. Very good use of alliteration in 'stygian skies'. I wish I had a 6 left for you. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Very vivid and clear. The picture matches perfectly.
This is well written with good tempo and rhyme.
It definitely says Halloween.
Good luck in your contest.
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Very vivid and clear. The picture matches perfectly.
This is well written with good tempo and rhyme.
It definitely says Halloween.
Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from livelylinda
Perfect picture/colors. Enough description of the horrors of Halloween to make the reader look over his/her shoulder while reading this piece. I could almost see the steam rising up out of the cauldron and hair raises up the back of my neck anticipating the wicked laughter of the witches . . .delightful! livelylinda
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Perfect picture/colors. Enough description of the horrors of Halloween to make the reader look over his/her shoulder while reading this piece. I could almost see the steam rising up out of the cauldron and hair raises up the back of my neck anticipating the wicked laughter of the witches . . .delightful! livelylinda
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from Mimi Linny
An eerie and spooky entry! Very nice job in rhyming and the rhythm is pretty smooth and lends to an good read. Think you've done a nice job on this one. Good luck in the contest!
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An eerie and spooky entry! Very nice job in rhyming and the rhythm is pretty smooth and lends to an good read. Think you've done a nice job on this one. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very nicely done, idamarty.
You've composed your entry for the Halloween Poetry Contest using a very unique rhyme scheme.
The first and second lines do not rhyme. So, we have an a,b,c,c rhyme scheme throughout with internal rhymes coming in lines one and two.
Presented in five well rhymed quatrains this should be a strong contender for top honors.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Very nicely done, idamarty.
You've composed your entry for the Halloween Poetry Contest using a very unique rhyme scheme.
The first and second lines do not rhyme. So, we have an a,b,c,c rhyme scheme throughout with internal rhymes coming in lines one and two.
Presented in five well rhymed quatrains this should be a strong contender for top honors.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Hi Dean,
Thanks for reading and reviewing. Always love to read what you have to say as you are the King of horror! Love all of your poems. You are truly gifted. Thank you again and have a great day!
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You're more than welcome and you do the same. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
With internally rhyming first and second lines in each quatrain stating the rhyme scheme simply as abcc does not do this justice. The metre (iambic tetrameter) too is faithfully followed almost 100% of the time. I say almost because "So please be aware, should you dare" places the iambic stress on the "A" of "aware" while the natural pronunciation, at least for this Englishman puts the stress on the second syllable.
"So be aware if you should dare" maintains the sense of your line and keeps the iambic and natural stresses in line.
That little metrical hiccup is the only faulte I could find with this and I am not knocking a star off for that.
2nd Review.
The rewrite you have put in has preserved the iambic integrity of the whole. -- much sweeter now.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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With internally rhyming first and second lines in each quatrain stating the rhyme scheme simply as abcc does not do this justice. The metre (iambic tetrameter) too is faithfully followed almost 100% of the time. I say almost because "So please be aware, should you dare" places the iambic stress on the "A" of "aware" while the natural pronunciation, at least for this Englishman puts the stress on the second syllable.
"So be aware if you should dare" maintains the sense of your line and keeps the iambic and natural stresses in line.
That little metrical hiccup is the only faulte I could find with this and I am not knocking a star off for that.
2nd Review.
The rewrite you have put in has preserved the iambic integrity of the whole. -- much sweeter now.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Hi,
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and I have used your advice and gone back to change the line with the metrical hiccup in it. Thank you for point that out to me. Have a great day.
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I had a look and wrote a rider to my review. That is a great improvement.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Halloween poem. There are much more about the celebration of Hallows eve than meets the eye of modern man. The history is much darker than we can imagine.
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A very well-written Halloween poem. There are much more about the celebration of Hallows eve than meets the eye of modern man. The history is much darker than we can imagine.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017