Your Last Night
Free Verse51 total reviews
Comment from Aspiredwriterdeeje
Thank you for not being afraid to tap into what you had gone through and give the world a glimpse. Keep writing for him because you nailed this. I am sure you will nail many more things if you keep writing like this. The music sets a tone, but the insight into your head makes it worth so much more.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you for not being afraid to tap into what you had gone through and give the world a glimpse. Keep writing for him because you nailed this. I am sure you will nail many more things if you keep writing like this. The music sets a tone, but the insight into your head makes it worth so much more.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Aspiredwriterdeeje,
Thank you so much for your most kind six-star rating. I'm happy that you thought I "nailed" this. That's a high compliment to me. I like that you enjoyed the insight into my head.
Again, thank you for the wonderful rating.
Yours,
luna
Comment from LIJ Red
Sometimes even old men and women cry for their mother as death comes for them.
Excellent free verse. The headlines are depressing, too. More overdoses every day all across the nation. The song fits well with the poem.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Sometimes even old men and women cry for their mother as death comes for them.
Excellent free verse. The headlines are depressing, too. More overdoses every day all across the nation. The song fits well with the poem.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your warm, insightful and supportive review, LlJ. I appreciate your support.
Best,
jeni
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Writing about traumatic events can indeed be cathartic and hopefully also bring some solace to others. Emotional and heartfelt piece.
"Mom, can I move in with you? - need closing speech marks here.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Hi there,
Writing about traumatic events can indeed be cathartic and hopefully also bring some solace to others. Emotional and heartfelt piece.
"Mom, can I move in with you? - need closing speech marks here.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thanks for your kind words ofo review, giraffmang. I'll make the noted correction. thank you for pointing it out. I appreciate your warm support.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Ulla
Hi Luna, I Iack words of comfort. Tears are rolling down my cheeks when I read this, and write this. You are a heck of a brave mother to write about it. He broke your heart. But your son must have been such an unhappy person. He cried out for help. I'm sorry I'm not helping you. Al the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Hi Luna, I Iack words of comfort. Tears are rolling down my cheeks when I read this, and write this. You are a heck of a brave mother to write about it. He broke your heart. But your son must have been such an unhappy person. He cried out for help. I'm sorry I'm not helping you. Al the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Ulla, the only thing that anyone can say is I'm sorry. Thank you for your comment about my bravery, I don't feel so brave sometimes. He was an unhappy person and I'm glad that he is now at rest. You are indeed helping me, don't ever think that you weren't.
Best,
jeni
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Yes, I know that we mothers feel that we are supposed to protect our children, but we can't. I hope I can give you some words to comfort you. I honor your grieving now and the beautiful poetry that is coming out of you heart. I understand that there will always be a hole in your heart that Mickey took but I know that he wants you to let go of any feelings of wishing you could have helped him. It was an impossible situation. I know he wants you to be at peace as he is. How sweet to have his angel-spirit hovering around you now day and night. Well done on your poem. You are a wonderful mother and I know Mickey wants you to hear that again and agin and to embrace it. Drugs and the killing they do have nothing to do with how much we love or protect our children.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Yes, I know that we mothers feel that we are supposed to protect our children, but we can't. I hope I can give you some words to comfort you. I honor your grieving now and the beautiful poetry that is coming out of you heart. I understand that there will always be a hole in your heart that Mickey took but I know that he wants you to let go of any feelings of wishing you could have helped him. It was an impossible situation. I know he wants you to be at peace as he is. How sweet to have his angel-spirit hovering around you now day and night. Well done on your poem. You are a wonderful mother and I know Mickey wants you to hear that again and agin and to embrace it. Drugs and the killing they do have nothing to do with how much we love or protect our children.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear nancy,
thank you for the exceptional six-star review you laid upon this poem. I appreciate you warm and supportive words of review. I wish I could say more, but I'm a bit emotionally spent at this time. I'm sure you'll understand.
Best,
jeni
Comment from robina1978
The photo must be your son, Mickey. You are so courageous to write in such detail. He first tried Gran who turned him down. He phoned you, and told somebody that he was moving in with you. It is indeed a horror story.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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The photo must be your son, Mickey. You are so courageous to write in such detail. He first tried Gran who turned him down. He phoned you, and told somebody that he was moving in with you. It is indeed a horror story.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear robina, yes the photo is a picture of my son. Thank you for your understanding review, and acknowledging that this was a horror story and continues to be that.
Best,
Jeni
Thanks for the kind six-star review that you laid upon this poem. I'm honored.
Comment from mbroyles2
You displayed true emotion and heartfelt words in this dedication.
I can see your grief and the way your writing displays the way you cope.
Very good writing!
Michael
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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You displayed true emotion and heartfelt words in this dedication.
I can see your grief and the way your writing displays the way you cope.
Very good writing!
Michael
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Michael. I appreciate your kind words of review and support.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Drug use has devastating effects on more than the user.
As this poem depicts, overdosing leaves more questions than answers for those left behind.
Tough situation for you to be in.
However, poem will written.
Unfortunate he did not see this for himself.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Drug use has devastating effects on more than the user.
As this poem depicts, overdosing leaves more questions than answers for those left behind.
Tough situation for you to be in.
However, poem will written.
Unfortunate he did not see this for himself.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it and am glad that you found the poem well-written.
Comment from hifein
tears came to my eyes as i read your beautiful tribute your son, from the perspective of a broken hearted mother. the love comes through. it is good that you are able to write again, to help you get through the haze of time now that grieving is possible. you protected him as best as he would let you. the stanza that begins 'i am able to write again" is most poignant and beautiful and reminds me of 'shall i compare theee to a summers day' in the sonnet written by shakespeare when he lost his son hamnet. my best, hi
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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tears came to my eyes as i read your beautiful tribute your son, from the perspective of a broken hearted mother. the love comes through. it is good that you are able to write again, to help you get through the haze of time now that grieving is possible. you protected him as best as he would let you. the stanza that begins 'i am able to write again" is most poignant and beautiful and reminds me of 'shall i compare theee to a summers day' in the sonnet written by shakespeare when he lost his son hamnet. my best, hi
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind words of review. I'm happy you told me what stanza you liked and am honored at the comparison to shakespeare.
Comment from Franklin Price
Your sadness and grief are fully exposed in this heartfelt poem. I grieve with you and for you. I have never had a child die but, out of 5 siblings, four of them have had it happen; never due to drugs, but to accidents, crib death, and abuse. I know this doesn't ease your pain. I just wanted you to know you are not alone. Drugs and addiction are terrible. They are a personal choice, over which another has no control.
As a mother, I know you think there is something you could have done, but drugs are no respecters of mothers. I apologize if I have said more than I should have, but I feel for you. You are not alone.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Your sadness and grief are fully exposed in this heartfelt poem. I grieve with you and for you. I have never had a child die but, out of 5 siblings, four of them have had it happen; never due to drugs, but to accidents, crib death, and abuse. I know this doesn't ease your pain. I just wanted you to know you are not alone. Drugs and addiction are terrible. They are a personal choice, over which another has no control.
As a mother, I know you think there is something you could have done, but drugs are no respecters of mothers. I apologize if I have said more than I should have, but I feel for you. You are not alone.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your kind review, Franklin Price. My heart goes out to your siblings. You didn't say more than you should have. I just want to note one thing; my son did not choose to take heroin. He tried to stop many, many times. He hated it. However he was addicted so the choice was not his. He was happiest when he was clean, and helped many, many people to get clean, even when he was using.
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I know addiction is difficult if not impossible, at times to overcome. i'm sure your son was a good person who happened to be an addict. such a shame.