Swirling swallows.
Wending wheeling.83 total reviews
Comment from Jay Squires
I shouldn't sample such candy so close to dinner. This is a delight, Roy. No message. Sheer enjoyment of the flight of sound and the fluttering images they produce. Great work, Roy, though it's more like great pleasure.
Blessings, Friend.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
I shouldn't sample such candy so close to dinner. This is a delight, Roy. No message. Sheer enjoyment of the flight of sound and the fluttering images they produce. Great work, Roy, though it's more like great pleasure.
Blessings, Friend.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thanks Jay, as always gracious and encouragingly commented and reviewed, blessing my friend, Roy.
Comment from JourneyHolm
Well done. I thought this was a pretty good poem. I think it lacked in fluidity at certain points, but this prompt was very difficult. 7 syllables is such an awkward line... Thank you for sharing :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
Well done. I thought this was a pretty good poem. I think it lacked in fluidity at certain points, but this prompt was very difficult. 7 syllables is such an awkward line... Thank you for sharing :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from crzypnter
Hi Roy,
Easy to see why this one is the winner. Congrats on your awards they are well deserved as the sixer. Great job. Thanks for sharing. God bless always.
August
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
Hi Roy,
Easy to see why this one is the winner. Congrats on your awards they are well deserved as the sixer. Great job. Thanks for sharing. God bless always.
August
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thanks August for this generous, encouraging review great accolade and exceptional rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a delight to read :) Seven lines - check. Seven syllables per line - check. 1 alliteration in every line - I see two alliterations in every line but one. You met the contest requirements and a little bit more. Congratulations on placing first. Well deserved!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
This is a delight to read :) Seven lines - check. Seven syllables per line - check. 1 alliteration in every line - I see two alliterations in every line but one. You met the contest requirements and a little bit more. Congratulations on placing first. Well deserved!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Joy, for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi Roy ...
As you may well know, I am anything but a poet. But I do appreciate the fine art created by those who are so good at the art. Loved this piece of work from you. Interesting how you took the silly antics and playfulness of the swallows and then turned on the alarm about the hawks waiting for their prey.
Wishing you the very best. God Bless ...
ALan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
Hi Roy ...
As you may well know, I am anything but a poet. But I do appreciate the fine art created by those who are so good at the art. Loved this piece of work from you. Interesting how you took the silly antics and playfulness of the swallows and then turned on the alarm about the hawks waiting for their prey.
Wishing you the very best. God Bless ...
ALan
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Alan, for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
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Always a pleasure, my friend!
Comment from Tessa Kay
Congratulations. A worthy winner. Every word in this poem has strength. I like the bedlam's bag. Very original and saying a lot in just two words. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
Congratulations. A worthy winner. Every word in this poem has strength. I like the bedlam's bag. Very original and saying a lot in just two words. Well done. :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Teresa for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from poetadeu
This is a fascinating read. I love to
watch the hawks in my area when they are sitting in
watch for their prey to show it's head or tail. They
are cunning hunters and almost never miss. You have
this form of write done to a tee, and I am just now
aware of this form and find it quite full of interesting
facts about the subject. Best wishes for your writing prompt.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
This is a fascinating read. I love to
watch the hawks in my area when they are sitting in
watch for their prey to show it's head or tail. They
are cunning hunters and almost never miss. You have
this form of write done to a tee, and I am just now
aware of this form and find it quite full of interesting
facts about the subject. Best wishes for your writing prompt.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
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It's a pleasure! ::}}Joyce
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It's a pleasure! ::}}Joyce
Comment from Jacob Collins
I loved the imagery and alliteration in this piece, Roy. You captured the glide of two swallows well in this piece and I loved the words used such as: swirling, wheeling, tumbling turning. Excellent choice of words. I couldn't find any faults. Congrats on winning the contest by the way...Jacob
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
I loved the imagery and alliteration in this piece, Roy. You captured the glide of two swallows well in this piece and I loved the words used such as: swirling, wheeling, tumbling turning. Excellent choice of words. I couldn't find any faults. Congrats on winning the contest by the way...Jacob
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Jacob, for your most delightfully outstanding review and fabulous stars, Roy.
Comment from Glasstruth
So beautifully written. The flow is magnificent and the rhyming is unforced and is very, very moving, action is constant with the use of 'ing' words. Well composed. Congrats on the win. Les
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
So beautifully written. The flow is magnificent and the rhyming is unforced and is very, very moving, action is constant with the use of 'ing' words. Well composed. Congrats on the win. Les
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Les, for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Chrissy710
Roy this is really great and clever wording also . Congratulations on your win Didn't know I was in such good company . Well deserved, and the Hawk will bide it's time and look our swallow Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
Roy this is really great and clever wording also . Congratulations on your win Didn't know I was in such good company . Well deserved, and the Hawk will bide it's time and look our swallow Cheers Christine
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Thanks Christine for the marvellous review and gracious comments, blessings, Roy.