Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Adri7enne
Moving right along, Bev. I'm a bit confused. Rick has a sister who is in danger and maybe this step to the dark side has to do with saving her???
It gets a bit complicated, but I'm sure all will be revealed.
Good chapter, Bev.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Moving right along, Bev. I'm a bit confused. Rick has a sister who is in danger and maybe this step to the dark side has to do with saving her???
It gets a bit complicated, but I'm sure all will be revealed.
Good chapter, Bev.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Yes, that's it Adrienne. You're not the only one to mention the sister confusion. It goes to why Rick has resorted to this desperate move now that he can't get paid for being a snitch on behalf of one of the victim's sons (M. Buell).
As always, thanks so much, Adrienne.
:) Bev
Comment from Hareem.S
I like how the story begins in an interesting manner. The well structured dialogues keeps the reader entertained till the end. It was a pleasure to read this story.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I like how the story begins in an interesting manner. The well structured dialogues keeps the reader entertained till the end. It was a pleasure to read this story.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Hareem. I realy appreciate your very kind review. :)
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Writingfundimension,
Now that you've got the shoot first talk later boys involved, things can get a lot worse for Fr Brian, Rick and Jana. I wouldn't trust the FBI's SWAT team to get it right as they're dealing with spectral forces they can't shoot - but they can do a lot of damage to everyone else.
Patrick
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi Writingfundimension,
Now that you've got the shoot first talk later boys involved, things can get a lot worse for Fr Brian, Rick and Jana. I wouldn't trust the FBI's SWAT team to get it right as they're dealing with spectral forces they can't shoot - but they can do a lot of damage to everyone else.
Patrick
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I swear you're reading my mind, Patrick. I'll bet you know how stories are going to end halfway through movies? I do that all the time and it drives my husband crazy.
Anyway, thanks for the wonderful review and the fact you're still on board!
:) Bev
Comment from A Matter Of Words
You do an excellent job of raising the emotions of the reader. The dialogue is excellent, very natural. The suspense keeps getting tighter. Is it Father Brian in the cave?
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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You do an excellent job of raising the emotions of the reader. The dialogue is excellent, very natural. The suspense keeps getting tighter. Is it Father Brian in the cave?
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Stephanie, thank you so much for this grand review. I appreciate it. Yes, it is Father Brian in the cave.
Hugs, Bev
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You are very welcome. It is a riveting story.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, rick is being led by the devil dog now, but who is his sister? I don't remember a sister from the other chapters. but it could be one that I missed.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, rick is being led by the devil dog now, but who is his sister? I don't remember a sister from the other chapters. but it could be one that I missed.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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The sister is only coming out in this chapter, Sweet. It's been a bit confusing so will re-think my approach when I edit this chapter. Thanks for sharing and caring enough to review so generously.
:) Bev
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting addition to the story that the author has created with this piece of writing. I have been following this story sporadically and this post is full of tension and intrigue. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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This is an interesting addition to the story that the author has created with this piece of writing. I have been following this story sporadically and this post is full of tension and intrigue. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much. Mighty generous of you!
:) Bev
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No problem.
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Comment from JW
It seems like in the midst of some major problems I'm currently dealing with that may end up costing me both my job & residence. (Note: through no fault on my part.) I may have missed your last chapter.
Sorry.
Anyhow, this one is another good one. No spags were found, and it easily holds the reader's interest while progressing the storyline.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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It seems like in the midst of some major problems I'm currently dealing with that may end up costing me both my job & residence. (Note: through no fault on my part.) I may have missed your last chapter.
Sorry.
Anyhow, this one is another good one. No spags were found, and it easily holds the reader's interest while progressing the storyline.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Jonathon, I'm sorry to hear of your problems. The fact you're taking time out in the midst of all that you describe is something I treasure. Thank you and good luck! :) Bev
Comment from CR Delport
Jana still has faith in Rick, and I think she suspects he's possessed. Now I wonder who the dark figure in the cave is? Father Brian perhaps? Another great chapter that is well written with no obvious errors. Good job.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Jana still has faith in Rick, and I think she suspects he's possessed. Now I wonder who the dark figure in the cave is? Father Brian perhaps? Another great chapter that is well written with no obvious errors. Good job.
Christelle.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, CR. Yes, it's Father Brian in the cave and Jana is on her way. The only two people, at this point, who care what happens to Rick. When a cop goes bad, it's hard for everyone to fathom. And most would not accept the fact that a man can be possessed by a demonic influence. My point with Brian and Jana is that they represent cultures that understand the very real danger of such phenomenon.
Much appreciated!
Bev
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Wow, Bev, have you had any books published yet? Even I can tell that this is top stuff, very intriguing writing. It is the sort of writing that you don't want to put down, and the action is high-powered, fantastic, Giddy
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Wow, Bev, have you had any books published yet? Even I can tell that this is top stuff, very intriguing writing. It is the sort of writing that you don't want to put down, and the action is high-powered, fantastic, Giddy
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Giddy, thank you so very much! I am really honored by our compliments and generosity. I am working with an editor and plan to see what I can do with this novel when it's finished. I have a lot of work ahead of me, but comments like yours keep me pushing forward.
:) Bev
Comment from Aussie
allplanned (space.) Your pace and direction send the reader along the path with the beast and it's captives. You leave us wanting more with the black-clad figure hiding inside the mine. Well done my friend.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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allplanned (space.) Your pace and direction send the reader along the path with the beast and it's captives. You leave us wanting more with the black-clad figure hiding inside the mine. Well done my friend.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Kay, thanks so much for this gracious and generous review. I went back and corrected the spaggie too :) Always nice to know you've got my back. Hugs, Bev