Warrior Poet
A sonnet39 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Oh come on, your sword is hardly rusty. Maybe it's been outta action for a bit but when you have that fire in the er...belly, yeah..the belly, well,...you'll be back on top, Slick. Perfectly iambicated and flawless as always. Will WOULD be proud.
P
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Oh come on, your sword is hardly rusty. Maybe it's been outta action for a bit but when you have that fire in the er...belly, yeah..the belly, well,...you'll be back on top, Slick. Perfectly iambicated and flawless as always. Will WOULD be proud.
P
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Oh, it's sharp and ready, my love. Just dipping into the warrior's world for a bit. Thanks so much, P!
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LOL All good
Comment from boxergirl
Ha!Ha! Your sword, your sword, too dull to wield. I seriously doubt it. Good job with your Shakespearean Sonnet. It reminds me of some of his writings. 8-)
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Ha!Ha! Your sword, your sword, too dull to wield. I seriously doubt it. Good job with your Shakespearean Sonnet. It reminds me of some of his writings. 8-)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thanks so much, boxer girl. You're right. It's sharp, honed, and ready...as always, but it was fun to get grizzled for this one. I appreciate it.
Comment from Tatarka2
I thought this was really outstanding. My only suggestion would be to consider breaking it up into stanzas - the ideas in each stanza might be even more powerful then. Still, I think this deserves a 6.
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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I thought this was really outstanding. My only suggestion would be to consider breaking it up into stanzas - the ideas in each stanza might be even more powerful then. Still, I think this deserves a 6.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend, for that sixer. Sometimes I break them up, and sometimes I don't. You may be right about this one, though, since each stanza is very different.
Comment from JavaJunkie
Very nice with a great complimentary picture. I thought the lines flowed well with good imagery throughout. I like that you begin with a question and end with an answer that reads much like a battle cry.
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Very nice with a great complimentary picture. I thought the lines flowed well with good imagery throughout. I like that you begin with a question and end with an answer that reads much like a battle cry.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Harv
So good and powerful I am going to be able to go n back to this to keep me going on this long road, it is true poetry of being a warrior, standing long
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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So good and powerful I am going to be able to go n back to this to keep me going on this long road, it is true poetry of being a warrior, standing long
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you very much, Harv, for your great review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Marillion
I really like the subtle contrast from the sword in one hand and the feather quill in the other, and with the sunset makes it all the more striking.
Sort of like, when the man wearies of the battle of the sword, and then trades it to put pen to paper.
Well done.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax
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reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Hi Marillion
I really like the subtle contrast from the sword in one hand and the feather quill in the other, and with the sunset makes it all the more striking.
Sort of like, when the man wearies of the battle of the sword, and then trades it to put pen to paper.
Well done.
Cheers
Keep Smilin'... Jax
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you very much, Jax. I appreciate the great review.
Comment from Gloria ....
Beautifully sophisticated sonnet in elegant iambic pentameter, David. Your intricate rhymes such as destroyed and void, and blood and mud well set off the tone of the poem. It lets us feel and believe, this is something of a different nature - a cut above the norm.
Your description in the octet is vivid and eloquently glides into the philosophical ascendency of the sestet. The couplet furnishes a bold resurgence to break the wall and fight valorous even though well-past the edge of naive notions of glory's poetic sword.
Exceptional, dear one. Or, in short, I dig it man.
Gloria
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Beautifully sophisticated sonnet in elegant iambic pentameter, David. Your intricate rhymes such as destroyed and void, and blood and mud well set off the tone of the poem. It lets us feel and believe, this is something of a different nature - a cut above the norm.
Your description in the octet is vivid and eloquently glides into the philosophical ascendency of the sestet. The couplet furnishes a bold resurgence to break the wall and fight valorous even though well-past the edge of naive notions of glory's poetic sword.
Exceptional, dear one. Or, in short, I dig it man.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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My dear Gloria, thank you so much for your great review, and I dig you, too, lady. So glad to be back amongst you again.
Comment from Walter L. Jones
Good to see you back, always a voice in the desert, and a smile with perfection given, lost once again in the image and more in the push of the keys, special once again the write and the words, best day you can find.. Walt
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Good to see you back, always a voice in the desert, and a smile with perfection given, lost once again in the image and more in the push of the keys, special once again the write and the words, best day you can find.. Walt
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-May-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend, for your great review, and the sixer.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So many friends are foes; old foes, now friends,
Alliances established, then destroyed.
Such sweet beginnings led to bitter ends
How very true that is. One thing that's certain about life... things change. We change. Those around us change. And the human mind is so set in its ways that often it can't accept change. A warrior keeps fighting, even when it's no longer necessary or appropriate. And pacifists are too idealistic to fight when they have to. Life is simple, but it's too confusing for the most sophisticated brains that ever existed to handle.
Oh, yeah. We're doomed, all right. A brain is only as good as what you DO with it.
"Lay down you swords and shields.
Study war no more."
It'll never happen. What a waste of brain cells. Should've given them to horses.
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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So many friends are foes; old foes, now friends,
Alliances established, then destroyed.
Such sweet beginnings led to bitter ends
How very true that is. One thing that's certain about life... things change. We change. Those around us change. And the human mind is so set in its ways that often it can't accept change. A warrior keeps fighting, even when it's no longer necessary or appropriate. And pacifists are too idealistic to fight when they have to. Life is simple, but it's too confusing for the most sophisticated brains that ever existed to handle.
Oh, yeah. We're doomed, all right. A brain is only as good as what you DO with it.
"Lay down you swords and shields.
Study war no more."
It'll never happen. What a waste of brain cells. Should've given them to horses.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Amen to all of that, Phyllis. Thank you, my friend. Sorry for my absence. I've missed a great deal of your story, but I'm determined to catch back up.