The Becoming
A lycanthropic love story...sort of.33 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
Well composed and well stated story about the demon that we all battle every day within our self. This is a story that holds the readers attention. Don
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Well composed and well stated story about the demon that we all battle every day within our self. This is a story that holds the readers attention. Don
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Don. I am very pleased to know that you liked it.
Comment from Ramona Hughes
This is a very engaging and imaginative piece. It is very cohesive and enjoyable to read. The characters are well written and believable. I enjoyed the descriptions of the metamorphoses, and the little 'love' story between the original werewolf and his newly made mate.
Well Done!
Good Luck in the contest!
22 line after the third red cross: use of the word 'than' twice... Otherwise I found no typos or other criticism for this work.
(In what sounded more than like choking than a whisper, Pearse dropped down on all fours. "Oh, my sweet Sessie...")
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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This is a very engaging and imaginative piece. It is very cohesive and enjoyable to read. The characters are well written and believable. I enjoyed the descriptions of the metamorphoses, and the little 'love' story between the original werewolf and his newly made mate.
Well Done!
Good Luck in the contest!
22 line after the third red cross: use of the word 'than' twice... Otherwise I found no typos or other criticism for this work.
(In what sounded more than like choking than a whisper, Pearse dropped down on all fours. "Oh, my sweet Sessie...")
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for you in depth, insightful review and most generous rating, Ramona. I appreciate you finding that typo for me as well, great catch! I must have edited and reedited this fifty times, yet I knew I would overlook something, lol. I'll take care of that right away. I'm most grateful.
Comment from lancellot
A nicely penned tale. I like the brief intro and the character build up of the victim. It made him more than a random meal. Well done, my friend, I saw this contest and wondered how it go. I like the way you went at the prompt.
notes:
["]My dear Mr. McCreary, I can't thank you enough for rescuing my beloved S
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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A nicely penned tale. I like the brief intro and the character build up of the victim. It made him more than a random meal. Well done, my friend, I saw this contest and wondered how it go. I like the way you went at the prompt.
notes:
["]My dear Mr. McCreary, I can't thank you enough for rescuing my beloved S
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Lance, I am really pleased that you liked this story. I almost didn't enter it. But, I've had an idea bouncing around in my brain-pan for awhile, so I just decoded to jump in with both feet.
I'll take care of that typo right away!