The Gift
A foal is born41 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
Beautiful story of new life and the miracle of how it comes to be. Very appropriate as we start the New Year. I'm sure you've watched the birth of a colt. I've seen calves born and watched my grandchildren come into the world and I'm amazed at the magic of the moment.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Beautiful story of new life and the miracle of how it comes to be. Very appropriate as we start the New Year. I'm sure you've watched the birth of a colt. I've seen calves born and watched my grandchildren come into the world and I'm amazed at the magic of the moment.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Hi again Beth! Thank you so much. I have seen foals born, just not my horses. They would always wait me out, and after I got too tired, they'd have them, after I went inside. Now, they make cameras so you can watch them from your house! :) Thanks again Beth! Hug, Susan
Comment from Gungalo
Sigh, I loved this write Realist!! It has appeal to all and makes me feel warm all over. What about him ... up there in the corner?
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Sigh, I loved this write Realist!! It has appeal to all and makes me feel warm all over. What about him ... up there in the corner?
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Hi Miss C! Hmm, great point. I should have added a sentence about the old cat? IF i get time I will. I so appreciate this great review. Wow! But more so that you got a good feeling from it. Wonderful! :)) Susan
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Great write Susan!!!
Comment from adewpearl
You set the stage well in your opening lines - vivid descriptive detail definitely contributes to the mood
I like the mother's point of view
What a life-affirming story for the beginning of this new year :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
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You set the stage well in your opening lines - vivid descriptive detail definitely contributes to the mood
I like the mother's point of view
What a life-affirming story for the beginning of this new year :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
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Hi there!! Thank you, and it's a real pleasure when you enjoy my work...I am very grateful. Please keep safe and warm!! Susan
Comment from Espresso momma
I really did like this story. It was so realistic and the photos both of the new filly and the mother in the profile were perfect. Happy new year to you and yours.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
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I really did like this story. It was so realistic and the photos both of the new filly and the mother in the profile were perfect. Happy new year to you and yours.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
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Hi there!! Thank you, and it's a real pleasure when you enjoy my work...I am very grateful. Please keep safe and warm!! Susan
Comment from c_lucas
A very interesting tale of birth from a horse's point of view. This is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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A very interesting tale of birth from a horse's point of view. This is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Charlie! Thank you again! SO glad you enjoyed it. I love foals...so this was easy to write about! I've been lucky to have had three from three different mares over the years. Thank you again C! :)) Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from robina1978
Don't think this was just fantasy you wrote, You seem to know quite a bit about it. Your story was well written and held my attention till the end. Love horses anyway.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Don't think this was just fantasy you wrote, You seem to know quite a bit about it. Your story was well written and held my attention till the end. Love horses anyway.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Ine! Thank you again!! What a thrill...I really am happy you love horses....they are special creatures, that's for sure! Big hugs! Susan
Comment from humpwhistle
Nicely done, Susan. There are so many aspects of nature
we humans arrogantly overlook. You use of the moon
as the catalyst is a nice touch. Who is to say it isn't that way. As always, your love of horses shines through.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Nicely done, Susan. There are so many aspects of nature
we humans arrogantly overlook. You use of the moon
as the catalyst is a nice touch. Who is to say it isn't that way. As always, your love of horses shines through.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Lee, Thank you so much! I always feel so alive when I'm outside, whether it be under the sun, in moonlight, even in the rain. I would sleep outside all the time if I could. :) I'm glad you enjoyed this one! ... hug, Susan
Comment from Jade Johnson
This was a lovely short story. I loved that she waited for the humans to get out of the way. It finished well... That the magic of the moonlight stirred her will to live.
I saw no errors.
Blessings Jade
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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This was a lovely short story. I loved that she waited for the humans to get out of the way. It finished well... That the magic of the moonlight stirred her will to live.
I saw no errors.
Blessings Jade
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Jade! One of my favorite names too! Thank you so much....what a thrill to know you enjoyed this so. Glad to hear from you! Hug! Susan
Comment from Kaine Darcwater
This is a good story. At first, you had me believing that the little horse was not going to survive. It sure took it a long time to come around. That cat was one nasty little thing waiting to eat the afterbirth. I think horses are beautiful but for some odd reason they are frightened of me. My friend used to have one and it would run every time I came near. Happy New Year. Kudos. ;)
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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This is a good story. At first, you had me believing that the little horse was not going to survive. It sure took it a long time to come around. That cat was one nasty little thing waiting to eat the afterbirth. I think horses are beautiful but for some odd reason they are frightened of me. My friend used to have one and it would run every time I came near. Happy New Year. Kudos. ;)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Bryan! Thank you! I bet if you were around horses more often, you would relax and they wouldn't run off. The one your around may just be silly too. Try taking a peeled apple for it? Peel it, they hate the wax the stores put on the apples. Keep your hand flat too, or it will accidently bite your hand. Wish you could be around my three. You'd love them. And they would like you too. Happy New Year to you too Bryan! Thank you for a kind and welcome review...OUCH...time for pain meds. Hug, Susan
Comment from mumsyone
Great story, well written, and I'm glad it ended well for the little filly and her mother. Thanks for sharing.
She sighed and moaned,(. There) there was no way to escape the stall, so she resigned herself to the twelve by twelve enclosure and relaxed.
The little filly stirred as the rays of moonlight shone on her,(no comma) and(comma) as if waking from a dream, she jerked up, trying to stand, but stumbled and almost toppled over, her new legs weak and wobbly.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Great story, well written, and I'm glad it ended well for the little filly and her mother. Thanks for sharing.
She sighed and moaned,(. There) there was no way to escape the stall, so she resigned herself to the twelve by twelve enclosure and relaxed.
The little filly stirred as the rays of moonlight shone on her,(no comma) and(comma) as if waking from a dream, she jerked up, trying to stand, but stumbled and almost toppled over, her new legs weak and wobbly.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
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Hi Mumsy! Thank you, and I think I fixed your suggestions too! ?? I am very happy you liked this and for the help too! HUG!! Susan