Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Meshe Nair
Well written chapter. Shows good emotional tension for Sara here. Hope she will get to understand Joe's work and him better.
Good luck with your chemo and my prayers are with you.
Meshe Nair
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Well written chapter. Shows good emotional tension for Sara here. Hope she will get to understand Joe's work and him better.
Good luck with your chemo and my prayers are with you.
Meshe Nair
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from jennyindy
First off,being new here I didn't know of your personal battle,when I chose to review this chapter.
So I would very much like to send you strength,hope and safe hugs if ok? I will be thinking of you on Oct.28th.
About your writing..I love it,you drew me into the plot and characters immediately.I can't wait to read the earlier chapters...I would buy this at the store based on this alone!
Hang in there,Peace and gentle healing to you,
Jenny
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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First off,being new here I didn't know of your personal battle,when I chose to review this chapter.
So I would very much like to send you strength,hope and safe hugs if ok? I will be thinking of you on Oct.28th.
About your writing..I love it,you drew me into the plot and characters immediately.I can't wait to read the earlier chapters...I would buy this at the store based on this alone!
Hang in there,Peace and gentle healing to you,
Jenny
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your thoughts. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from mcfinlayson
Very strong narrative. I really liked the dialog it is believable and draws the reader on into the chapter. I found my attention wandering a little in the middle when they were talking about the paint colors. Overall you have a clear writing style and your characters have what I call 'true voices'. Well done.
Good luck with Chemo! Stay positive.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Very strong narrative. I really liked the dialog it is believable and draws the reader on into the chapter. I found my attention wandering a little in the middle when they were talking about the paint colors. Overall you have a clear writing style and your characters have what I call 'true voices'. Well done.
Good luck with Chemo! Stay positive.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi barbara
First of all, this was a good chapter, the story is maintaining the tension nicely and I have to say I'm formulating my own theory and suspect list on this one ...
Secondly, good luck with the Chemo, not a lot f fun I' told, but I'm sure it will be a success. Prayers with you as always.
Patrick
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Hi barbara
First of all, this was a good chapter, the story is maintaining the tension nicely and I have to say I'm formulating my own theory and suspect list on this one ...
Secondly, good luck with the Chemo, not a lot f fun I' told, but I'm sure it will be a success. Prayers with you as always.
Patrick
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Great continuation. Spag free and excellent as always.
Barbara, I will be with you in thought and prayer during your chemo. I'm told advances have been made, I hope it is not too rough on you, but focus on the outcome. Twenty years ago my mother at age 51 chose to die rather than take chemo. I respected her decision but wish she had braved it.
Blessings,
Connie
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Great continuation. Spag free and excellent as always.
Barbara, I will be with you in thought and prayer during your chemo. I'm told advances have been made, I hope it is not too rough on you, but focus on the outcome. Twenty years ago my mother at age 51 chose to die rather than take chemo. I respected her decision but wish she had braved it.
Blessings,
Connie
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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I am sorry about your mother. Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Dear Barbara:
You're doing a wonderful job, beside writing is such a great therapy, I think you really are drawing in this book the character's inner and expressing them so well.
You're always in my prayers my dear friend. Don't be afraid, God is by your side...
Love and blessing!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Dear Barbara:
You're doing a wonderful job, beside writing is such a great therapy, I think you really are drawing in this book the character's inner and expressing them so well.
You're always in my prayers my dear friend. Don't be afraid, God is by your side...
Love and blessing!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What tension, and two of the men dead!!
walking past as their bodies touched
their bodies brushed against each other as she passed
These two lines are so close - might you consider changing one.
Haven't you ever heard the term? I'm sure she hasn't - as you've used "she" hasn't - I fancy you need to change the first sentence to - Hadn't she ever - just seemed wrong somehow.
Just ignore if not in agreement, my friend
Margaret.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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What tension, and two of the men dead!!
walking past as their bodies touched
their bodies brushed against each other as she passed
These two lines are so close - might you consider changing one.
Haven't you ever heard the term? I'm sure she hasn't - as you've used "she" hasn't - I fancy you need to change the first sentence to - Hadn't she ever - just seemed wrong somehow.
Just ignore if not in agreement, my friend
Margaret.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from R. K. Alan
You did a great job showing Sara's conflicting emotions and her tension, poor dear. Joe is a gentle man, and that comes across as well. Good job with your characters.
BTW... I am not a big fan of blue in a living room.
Ray aka krylon
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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You did a great job showing Sara's conflicting emotions and her tension, poor dear. Joe is a gentle man, and that comes across as well. Good job with your characters.
BTW... I am not a big fan of blue in a living room.
Ray aka krylon
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Well, who knows what color this living room will end up by the time Sara is finished, at least it's not orange. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Sara is angry is Joe because Joe killed the men who might have known where Cassie is. After she talks to George, she realizes that Joe is hurting too. He did what he had to in a difficult situation.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Sara is angry is Joe because Joe killed the men who might have known where Cassie is. After she talks to George, she realizes that Joe is hurting too. He did what he had to in a difficult situation.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from animatqua
Another exciting chapter!
Beyond the writing, I will say you have all of my good thoughts for this therapy you are beginning. I sat with a dear friend through a number of Chemo sessions. They helped sustain her life.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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Another exciting chapter!
Beyond the writing, I will say you have all of my good thoughts for this therapy you are beginning. I sat with a dear friend through a number of Chemo sessions. They helped sustain her life.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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I know chemo is necessary and the only chance I have of living cancer free, but it's still scares me. Thank you for the kind review.
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I follow a Pagan path of spirituality, so I do `pray' in a manner that is different from most on site.
It still may comfort you to know there were strong prayer forms put into the Universe for you today.