My Mother
a remembrance70 total reviews
Comment from fictionwriter
That's one of the hardest things to deal with. My first husband died of cancer, but he told everyone it wasn't that bad, so I was the bad person when I called them all to come, because they said he died because I didn't believe he could beat it. Not an easy thing no matter what. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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That's one of the hardest things to deal with. My first husband died of cancer, but he told everyone it wasn't that bad, so I was the bad person when I called them all to come, because they said he died because I didn't believe he could beat it. Not an easy thing no matter what. Great job.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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People can be so cruel. I recently lost students because I had to start my classes a little later because, I was, in of all places, the hospital. Let's hope this narcissistic trend in society wears off soon. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from InHisownwrite
a very sad, yet beautiful portrayal of everyday life, and the things people go through.. the way they handle it etc..
you tie so many different things in with it... miles apart, relationships, some good, some not... very touching and well written.. Bryan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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a very sad, yet beautiful portrayal of everyday life, and the things people go through.. the way they handle it etc..
you tie so many different things in with it... miles apart, relationships, some good, some not... very touching and well written.. Bryan
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a superb review.
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Excellent...........
Comment from AnnaLinda
Alvin,
This is a very moving free verse poem
about your Mother's last days and your
devotion and sensitivity to her in her
last days and moments. I think that your
using 'she did' twice and 'I did' once
is interesting and I am glad to hear that
you were able to be with her in her last
moments and to release her to God.
Your poem has a smooth flow as well.
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Alvin,
This is a very moving free verse poem
about your Mother's last days and your
devotion and sensitivity to her in her
last days and moments. I think that your
using 'she did' twice and 'I did' once
is interesting and I am glad to hear that
you were able to be with her in her last
moments and to release her to God.
Your poem has a smooth flow as well.
Linda
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Using "did" as an auxiliary verb is a very Southern thing and my family is very Southern. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from bard owl
Your poem is beautiful. Letting go of life, whether by us or a loved one is the hardest thing a mortal can do. Yet the thought of going home to God is such comfort. Very vivid, aching imagery in this piece, Alvin. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Your poem is beautiful. Letting go of life, whether by us or a loved one is the hardest thing a mortal can do. Yet the thought of going home to God is such comfort. Very vivid, aching imagery in this piece, Alvin. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a superb review.
Comment from Nicki_Mist
Such a sad poem but one that is beautiful because she wanted you there to be with her. I'm sure you gave her comfort. Your imagery, flow and rhythm was very well in this poem.
Nicole
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Such a sad poem but one that is beautiful because she wanted you there to be with her. I'm sure you gave her comfort. Your imagery, flow and rhythm was very well in this poem.
Nicole
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from words
You told the story well.
The family dynamic unfolded fully with just a few deft strokes of the pen:
My father was senile.
My mother asked me every two weeks
to drive to Arizona from California
to see her.
After two days, my sisters would ask me to leave--
they said I was upsetting the household,
so I left.
Moving and very well penned.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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You told the story well.
The family dynamic unfolded fully with just a few deft strokes of the pen:
My father was senile.
My mother asked me every two weeks
to drive to Arizona from California
to see her.
After two days, my sisters would ask me to leave--
they said I was upsetting the household,
so I left.
Moving and very well penned.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Yes, that's the saddest part of the poem to me, but I did it because I loved my mother. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from Krugerrand
Thank you for sharing this stressful and traumatic event. The depth of sorrow and frustration is enough to make anyone want to cry AND slap some people around.
I'm completely uneducated where poetry is concerned, so ignore me if I'm out in left field, but this read more like prose to me than poetry.
Regardless, the words are powerful and the reader feels emotion to their core.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thank you for sharing this stressful and traumatic event. The depth of sorrow and frustration is enough to make anyone want to cry AND slap some people around.
I'm completely uneducated where poetry is concerned, so ignore me if I'm out in left field, but this read more like prose to me than poetry.
Regardless, the words are powerful and the reader feels emotion to their core.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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It's more like a prose poem--a poem that tells a story. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from skye
Families experience loss in different ways.
Your poem speaks of your place in the family when your dear Mother died.
How generous you were to leave your own life and spend her last days, doing all she needed so she could leave.
Beautifully crafted, filled with such pain.
Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Families experience loss in different ways.
Your poem speaks of your place in the family when your dear Mother died.
How generous you were to leave your own life and spend her last days, doing all she needed so she could leave.
Beautifully crafted, filled with such pain.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Yes, it was very, very painful. Thank you for understanding that.
Comment from Blue Danube
Hello Alvin:
I've been away from FanStory for a while.
Glad to have found your poem upon my return to reviewing this morning.
As I see it, "My Mother" is a wonderfully written story in verse.
Within its relatively brief lines I find a complete tale of loss, pain, family strife and a whole lot more.
I was entranced while reading this.
Blue
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Hello Alvin:
I've been away from FanStory for a while.
Glad to have found your poem upon my return to reviewing this morning.
As I see it, "My Mother" is a wonderfully written story in verse.
Within its relatively brief lines I find a complete tale of loss, pain, family strife and a whole lot more.
I was entranced while reading this.
Blue
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the extraordinary review; i have missed you. I am glad you were entranced.
Comment from yellowrosebud
How beautiful and sad is this poem.I love the cadence of it each line told a story of family and love for your mother.It's clear your mother depended on you and you answered the call.God bless you in a mighty way through your beautiful gift of poetry! Well Done! I love it.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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How beautiful and sad is this poem.I love the cadence of it each line told a story of family and love for your mother.It's clear your mother depended on you and you answered the call.God bless you in a mighty way through your beautiful gift of poetry! Well Done! I love it.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2012
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Thanks for a superb review.