Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Oh yes, I am old enough to know of and love Aretha's wonderful music and voice.... But as this is a poem meant for everyone to read and understand I am not sure using Aretha really worked... At first I though you meant Alexa...but then I read your notes...
Perhaps you could rework it so that the thoughts in your head are easier to connect with...
This is not to say that I did not like the poem or the image, but because I do like it I am giving you an honest review because I do believe it could be even better...
Lisasview, new to this site

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

So Lisa, you are giving me a four because it is your opinion about the ending, which everyone else thought was brilliant? Ratings here are not about whether we agree on the topic or how it made us feel as reviewers. Ratings are supposed to be done on the quality, and the workmanship of the poem. This was a challenging one and since everyone has a different opinion it can not be fairly judged that way. I am trying to help. If you would have said that my meter was off, or structurally it was bad, I would accept that. Thank you tho for taking a look at it, but I looked to see how you rated some others that were horribly done in the way they were written and yet you gave them a five. I just wish they would help new people a little more when they first come on. It isn't your fault, but it is damaging to rankings when they are not more clear how ratings should be given. And I mean this with the utmost respect. However suggestions are always welcome.

reply by Lisasview on 20-Jun-2023

Oh my goodness... I thought I had given you a 5...I really loved your poem and only gave a few suggestions...sorry to have upset you... I got a 4 because someone felt that my poem What a Mess did not say enough about how I felt, etc. about the flood in our basement... I really felt that was so unfair...but ...what could I do

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Oh you didn't upset me Lisa. But I think the site could help new people more. I watched for a half of a year before joining the writing part, but that was hard to do. Lol...if your intentions were a five, you can still change it and push save again. Thank you so much.

reply by Lisasview on 20-Jun-2023

Yes, I thought I had tapped a 5... but I am on painkillers for a broken clavicle and 3 broken ribs so I am blaming my lack of attention on that... I accidentally gave 6 stars to poets, where I did not ended to... Yikes..

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Ouch! I just said a little prayer for you as I know how wicked it is to live in pain. I also know the way opioids are as I just weaned off of mega doses of ten years. I hope you don't have to stay on them too long. I have Lupus and have had so many replacements from breaking things that drs called me bionic woman. Please feel better and I thank you so very much!

reply by Lisasview on 20-Jun-2023

Luckily I refused opioids... so I am on other pain things...not a perfect solution ,,but even at 75 I am strong...

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

You are awesome. Good for you!!

reply by Lisasview on 20-Jun-2023

You are most welcome

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Aretha Franklin, The Queen of Soul' had a gorgeous voice. I do remember her song 'Respect' and others.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. It was fun to read. I have met a few men, and women, who have this ego issue. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Hey Barb, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend

Comment from karenina

Excellent

I've suffered egotistical fools such as the gent in your poem. Those who never met a mirror they didn't love.
Those who had a PhD I suspected was purchased at Wal-Mart.

Great job carrying the same rhyme scheme throughout...

Light-hearted, yes... Yet these types can never love anyone more than themselves!

Sing it, Aretha!

(Smile)

Karenina

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Hey there K. I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend

reply by karenina on 20-Jun-2023

Hey anonymous!

You make that challenge look easy!

It's not!

:)

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

I do love Aretha! Her scene in "The Blues Brothers" is marvelous. Your poem is pretty dang good too. I think your line about big egos don't correct is absolutely the truth. Well done. Terry.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Hi Terry, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

I think we all have met this type of guy. I know I have. I forget what number he was in the lineup. I ran so fast, it's a blur. A cautionary story-in-a-poem in 8-6-8-6 form, very much like a duotrain. This last stanza with Respect by Aretha Franklin is the perfect ending. As we say here in the south, "He ain't gettin' none!"

Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :)) xoxo

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Hi Sally, I thank you for the awesome review and kind comments for my poem. I love the challenge of alternating only two rhymes, a little twist at the end, and "Respect" is a must. Thanks so much, my dear friend.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

A fun and flowing verse with humour and a good message that big egos don't allow for anyone else in their world! I'm glad she left because being spattered like a fly would have told her everything she needed to know! Thanks for sharing. Debbie

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Awe, Debbie you are so sweet. Thank you for such a kind review and comments, my friend.

Comment from CD Richards

Excellent

It's hard to understand why people pursue or stay with someone who doesn't respect them - yet many of us do. The story progression is good, and the end rhymes are spot on. Well done, and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Hi CD, I thank you so very much for such kind comments for my poem. I truly appreciate it, my friend!

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Thanks for the author's note - I needed it! However, regardless of who Aretha is, your poem underscores the general truth that true connections only occur when we think more of others than ourselves. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Thank you so very much for such kind comments for my poem. I truly appreciate it, my friend!

Comment from Monica Chaddick

Excellent

This was a very good message told in a whimsical way. This happens all too often. Your rhyming was spot on and the flow was very good, making for an easy read.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Awe thank you Monica! I so appreciate your very kind review and comments for my poem! Thanks again, my dear friend!

Comment from Heather lyn Tobias

Excellent

haha that was perfect. I really enjoyed the poem. The rhyming was right on and kept me smiling the whole way through. Well done! Good subject.ð??? Relationships are not easy but we get through them.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Heather, I thank you for your awesome review and words. You are so kind, and so appreciated, my friend!