Bound By Our Sins
2nd Place34 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
You really created an interesting story. I kept waiting for Carl to shut Becky up long before he did. The surprise came when we realize that Carl and been in that room before. He was already a murderer. Becky didn't realize how dangerous her little game was.
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reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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You really created an interesting story. I kept waiting for Carl to shut Becky up long before he did. The surprise came when we realize that Carl and been in that room before. He was already a murderer. Becky didn't realize how dangerous her little game was.
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Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thanks, Beth. This one was twisty. i tried hard to surprise the reader at the end.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Douglas, you have an outstanding entry for the contest, good luck. I never saw the end coming. The twist is well executed, so to speak. I don't know if it matters, but you refer to the money being left on the counter twice and a table once...does it need to be consistent? Your call. Thank you for entering. Terry.
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Douglas, you have an outstanding entry for the contest, good luck. I never saw the end coming. The twist is well executed, so to speak. I don't know if it matters, but you refer to the money being left on the counter twice and a table once...does it need to be consistent? Your call. Thank you for entering. Terry.
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thanks, Terry! This one turned out very creepy. Appreciate you, friend and thanks for another awesome contest!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Now this is more my cup of tea, and you fixed it just right with lemon and honey and one hell of a tale. Well done. Thanks for beginning my SUnday morning with a smile.
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reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Now this is more my cup of tea, and you fixed it just right with lemon and honey and one hell of a tale. Well done. Thanks for beginning my SUnday morning with a smile.
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Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Thank you, Tom I find myself wondering if you anticipated Becky's demise or were caught by surprise? D
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow Douglas, this is an inventive murderous write and Carl turned out to be unpredictable in the end and not the pussy that his girlfriend believed him to be. I must admit this tale sent a shiver down my spine, a well told chilling story.
Just one suggestion for you here:
she was a little too bossy and (highly) strung.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Wow Douglas, this is an inventive murderous write and Carl turned out to be unpredictable in the end and not the pussy that his girlfriend believed him to be. I must admit this tale sent a shiver down my spine, a well told chilling story.
Just one suggestion for you here:
she was a little too bossy and (highly) strung.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-May-2023
reply by the author on 07-May-2023
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Ha! Shivering spines is the greatest compliment you could have given me. That was my goal! Thanks for being you!