Lessons Learned and Spiritual
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "White Hope for 2023"Do good and feel good poems
36 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-You did a good job with the topic,
imagery, colors, and rhyme.
-The syllable count is good, as well.
-A good job describing the feelings
of having "midnight blues" and
trying to deal with them.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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-Nice image and presentation.
-You did a good job with the topic,
imagery, colors, and rhyme.
-The syllable count is good, as well.
-A good job describing the feelings
of having "midnight blues" and
trying to deal with them.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Bless you Pam, it's fixed! I don't know how I missed that but thank you again
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You are welcome. As promised, you have a new rating and review!!! I am glad you fixed it.
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Thank you so much!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Sherry SG
This reverse haiku conveys beautiful imagery and emotion.
The syllable and line count requirements have been met, along with the rhyme.
I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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This reverse haiku conveys beautiful imagery and emotion.
The syllable and line count requirements have been met, along with the rhyme.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Sherry, Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful reviews. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Overall an integrated presentation- illustration and text combine well! The use of colour here is natural, rather than 'forced'. There is a sense of the mystical here.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Overall an integrated presentation- illustration and text combine well! The use of colour here is natural, rather than 'forced'. There is a sense of the mystical here.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Sarah, Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful reviews. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Comment from royowen
An excellent post dear friend, oh yes we are into the new year and you've made a gem of an entry in this reverse haiku, the narrative and cleverness of words needs must, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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An excellent post dear friend, oh yes we are into the new year and you've made a gem of an entry in this reverse haiku, the narrative and cleverness of words needs must, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Me again Roy, Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful reviews. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
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Well done Debi
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Hope for 2023, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, shows that the burdens of the previous life, surrendered at dawn of January 1st, are gone and the new has arrived. Nice.
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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This haiku, Hope for 2023, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, shows that the burdens of the previous life, surrendered at dawn of January 1st, are gone and the new has arrived. Nice.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2023
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Hi Bill! Boy, am I ever late in thanking you for your wonderful reviews. Once again, I am so sorry. I am usually more on the ball, and I do truly appreciate your wonderful comments for my White Hope poem! Thank you so very much my dear friend.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your line end rhymes are spot on, and that plus the colours gives an interesting read. BUT, the prompt says the syllable count should be 7-5-7, wheareas I seem to see the classical 5-7-5. Hope you'll be able to fix this. Kate xx
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Your line end rhymes are spot on, and that plus the colours gives an interesting read. BUT, the prompt says the syllable count should be 7-5-7, wheareas I seem to see the classical 5-7-5. Hope you'll be able to fix this. Kate xx
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much Katharine! I'm so appreciative for you catching this!
