Lingering Devotion Part-2
First time meeting.35 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Lingering Devotion" Part Number 2
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
  |
"Lingering Devotion" Part Number 2
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
-
Thank you so much, Ricky, for taking time out to read my foolishness. I'm glad you liked it and greatly appreciate the generous review and kind words.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Oh no. This really is a convoluted tale of crossed wires and lost opportunities. Real life can be hell sometimes. Something in me hopes that Ric will somehow step in before the wedding, but improbabilities are rare, sadly. I don't know whether the 'exceptional' is for the enjoyment you granted me, or for the quality of the writing. Maybe both. (thanks also for reminding me in this to reach for concision in my endeavors for this morning) Kate xx
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
 |
Oh no. This really is a convoluted tale of crossed wires and lost opportunities. Real life can be hell sometimes. Something in me hopes that Ric will somehow step in before the wedding, but improbabilities are rare, sadly. I don't know whether the 'exceptional' is for the enjoyment you granted me, or for the quality of the writing. Maybe both. (thanks also for reminding me in this to reach for concision in my endeavors for this morning) Kate xx
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
-
Thank you so much, Kate, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. And even more so for finding time to read and review my foolishness when you're right in the middle of your time consuming quest. I'm glad you like it. Now I have to go back and add five lines that I should have ended it with. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
-
yes, well, I grow easily bored with Chrissie, sadly. I hate the 6 lines you added. Much preferred to be left wondering, hoping part 3 would appear.
-
Part three is still coming. The lines were intended to set two in concrete. But part three will change everything.
-
oof! Just posted. Ready to start chapter 11... K
Comment from nomi338
Sometimes things just don't work out. I met the girl of my dreams and everything went better than I could have asked for. Unfortunately I did not have much experience at being a boyfriend and I made critical mistakes one after the other. I was kind of hooked on alcohol at the time which she found to be a turnoff. Needless to say, we broke up and I have regretted every since. I have been married for nearly 50 years and I am reasonably happy, but I have never forgotten the one I foolishly let get away.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
|
Sometimes things just don't work out. I met the girl of my dreams and everything went better than I could have asked for. Unfortunately I did not have much experience at being a boyfriend and I made critical mistakes one after the other. I was kind of hooked on alcohol at the time which she found to be a turnoff. Needless to say, we broke up and I have regretted every since. I have been married for nearly 50 years and I am reasonably happy, but I have never forgotten the one I foolishly let get away.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
-
Thank you so much, Nomi, for your generous review and kind words. Yes, I think all of us can relate to such experiences, but sadly, we never get completely over them. What is sometimes called the "What ifs." I've just realized that I need to add five lines to this ending to make it complete thanks to you. I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate YOU!
-
Just keep writing and submitting. I love your stories.
Comment from Maria Millsaps
What a surprising ending. Interesting love story about the one that got away. Poor Ric, now what? Is he going to attend the wedding and speak up and not hold his peace? I guess I will have to wait for the next chapter.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
|
What a surprising ending. Interesting love story about the one that got away. Poor Ric, now what? Is he going to attend the wedding and speak up and not hold his peace? I guess I will have to wait for the next chapter.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
-
Thank you so much, Maria, for your generous review and kind words. I just realized that I need to go back and add five short lines to the ending to make it complete, or at least this chapter. This was supposed to be one chapter, but then my pea brain got in the way. I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from jenintorre
O.M.G. What a cliff hanger. I can't wait to read more. This is my kind of story. I love it. I found the first part of the story so erotic. The anticipation, the best part. ("Oh never mind I won't be embarrassed ") wow!
The fact that they didn't have cell phones makes me think that you maybe wrote this a long time ago or it is set in the B.C.P. period. Whatever. This is amazing writing.
Take care. Jen. X
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
|
O.M.G. What a cliff hanger. I can't wait to read more. This is my kind of story. I love it. I found the first part of the story so erotic. The anticipation, the best part. ("Oh never mind I won't be embarrassed ") wow!
The fact that they didn't have cell phones makes me think that you maybe wrote this a long time ago or it is set in the B.C.P. period. Whatever. This is amazing writing.
Take care. Jen. X
Comment Written 13-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2022
-
Thank you so much, Jen, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. No, I didn't write this a long time ago, just wrote the second chapter yesterday, but the events that gave me the idea happened in the 1980s. I probably should have updated it to current times, but then it would seem a little to personal for me. LOL. I just realized that this can't be complete without five more lines which I'm going back to add at the ending. I hope you'll check it out and let me know what you think. If it should be there or not. It's always a pleasure to get your reviews and read your posts. I appreciate YOU!