I Haven't A Clue
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Comment from Dr. Von
This is a great story written with a solid flow of pithy humor. Congratulations on the use of good dialogue to create a very interesting tale. I enjoyed your writing very much. This is fun that a wider audience should experience. Thank you for your gift.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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This is a great story written with a solid flow of pithy humor. Congratulations on the use of good dialogue to create a very interesting tale. I enjoyed your writing very much. This is fun that a wider audience should experience. Thank you for your gift.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2022
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Thank you. I wasn't sure if people would laugh, or find it silly. You have vindicated my effort, my friend! I appreciate the generous rating!
Comment from Ricky1024
"I Haven't a Clue"
This was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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"I Haven't a Clue"
This was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional, while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thank you Sir. You are a blessing!
Comment from Susan Newell
Mystery writer,
I'd give this a six, despite some SPAGS, just for creativity and content. I used to love to play Clue and it was wonderful to see the characters brought to life. And of course, there is no "powder room" on the playing board. Loved the colonel's repetitive, "Quite." This was a delightful read from start to finish! Definitely Story of the Month caliber.
Sue
amongst several documents and a half drank glass of -- I believe ==> drunk
Mummy and daddy insisted that I attend Princeton and follow the path of an educator, but clues man. That is my first love." -- capital D for Daddy -- suggest the following: educator. But clues, man . . . those are my first love.
Professor Plum completely phubbed Peacock as he checked the weather on his phone and then held up a bloody document in his left hand, after making a pretense of studying it with his magnifying glass, he disclosed, "So, as I was saying, I found some interesting documents, most important being the will!" -- Run-on sentence. Suggest period after "hand" and new sentence beginning with "After." Great use of the new word "phubbed."
has only known that southern trollip for three months." ==> trollop
Professor Plum raised his pointer finger in the air for emphasize. ==> emphasis
in the ballroom last night?", the professor looked upset -- comma not needed or correct
"I just pee in the plants," Mrs. Peacock admitted. -- ROFLOL
"Wait a minute, I thought that you said that you were with the colonel in the balling room from 1:30 to 1:40 am?" ******
back of his head with the candelabra. ==> candlestick? Two different things. A candelabra holds multiple candles and wouldn't fit in his pants.
"Missed another clue did ya, Sherlock Holmes?" Mr. Green shook head. ==> his head
"Are you certain that you didn't do a crappy job on your butt poking?", Mustard unintentionally punned. -- comma is extraneous --LOL
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2022
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Mystery writer,
I'd give this a six, despite some SPAGS, just for creativity and content. I used to love to play Clue and it was wonderful to see the characters brought to life. And of course, there is no "powder room" on the playing board. Loved the colonel's repetitive, "Quite." This was a delightful read from start to finish! Definitely Story of the Month caliber.
Sue
amongst several documents and a half drank glass of -- I believe ==> drunk
Mummy and daddy insisted that I attend Princeton and follow the path of an educator, but clues man. That is my first love." -- capital D for Daddy -- suggest the following: educator. But clues, man . . . those are my first love.
Professor Plum completely phubbed Peacock as he checked the weather on his phone and then held up a bloody document in his left hand, after making a pretense of studying it with his magnifying glass, he disclosed, "So, as I was saying, I found some interesting documents, most important being the will!" -- Run-on sentence. Suggest period after "hand" and new sentence beginning with "After." Great use of the new word "phubbed."
has only known that southern trollip for three months." ==> trollop
Professor Plum raised his pointer finger in the air for emphasize. ==> emphasis
in the ballroom last night?", the professor looked upset -- comma not needed or correct
"I just pee in the plants," Mrs. Peacock admitted. -- ROFLOL
"Wait a minute, I thought that you said that you were with the colonel in the balling room from 1:30 to 1:40 am?" ******
back of his head with the candelabra. ==> candlestick? Two different things. A candelabra holds multiple candles and wouldn't fit in his pants.
"Missed another clue did ya, Sherlock Holmes?" Mr. Green shook head. ==> his head
"Are you certain that you didn't do a crappy job on your butt poking?", Mustard unintentionally punned. -- comma is extraneous --LOL
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much Sue. You are a blessing!
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:-)