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Comment from dellsworthpoet
A simply told story. The words portray well the sorrow and horrors of wars. The images are clear. The pace is good. The poem stays on point. It comes across as a poignant homage.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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A simply told story. The words portray well the sorrow and horrors of wars. The images are clear. The pace is good. The poem stays on point. It comes across as a poignant homage.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you, dellsworthpoet.
I like to write some poems that touch others with
humanitarian messages.
The after effects of war
can also be about people
forgetting our soldiers
sacrifice. We should never
forget. Many blessings to
you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is a great tribute. "Welcome Home," is a great title. I enjoyed your post. There are so many men and women living and mangled. It is sad to visit the Veterans Hospital. The hospital is full of patients and visitors. Young and old. Welcome home to those that are living. And may the dead rest in peace. Thank you.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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This is a great tribute. "Welcome Home," is a great title. I enjoyed your post. There are so many men and women living and mangled. It is sad to visit the Veterans Hospital. The hospital is full of patients and visitors. Young and old. Welcome home to those that are living. And may the dead rest in peace. Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much,
Carolyn. War is such a tragic
destroyer of youth. Our
soldier veterans should always get the best care that
they deserve. The politicians
finally passed burn pits
legislation to begin to treat
more Middle East war veterans. Many soldiers
Suffered from Agent Orange
from the Vietnam War Era.
The Camp Lejeune poisoned
water was another tragic
lack of caring by the U.S.
government. Thank you for
the 5 stars. Many blessings
to you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
My brother fought in Vietnam and was even wounded, albeit no badly, my dad fought in WW2 was at Dunkirk in the beginning of the war. The young lives wasted, and the carnage is terrible, but one must think of those left behind, particularly mums, this is beautifully and sensitively written dear Regina, excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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My brother fought in Vietnam and was even wounded, albeit no badly, my dad fought in WW2 was at Dunkirk in the beginning of the war. The young lives wasted, and the carnage is terrible, but one must think of those left behind, particularly mums, this is beautifully and sensitively written dear Regina, excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Roy.
I also appreciate the British
soldiers sacrifices too. Yes,
the soldiers families are
so deeply affected too.
It takes a toll on them also.
Thank you for taking the
time to read and review my
poem. Many blessings to
you and your family.
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Well done
Comment from newilk
within the first stanza the 'it never goes away' made something in my heart shatter because that small phrase really carries so much weight to it, something so heavy to come from a man so young it's almost dizzying
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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within the first stanza the 'it never goes away' made something in my heart shatter because that small phrase really carries so much weight to it, something so heavy to come from a man so young it's almost dizzying
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Hello newilk. War destroys
so many young lives. It
deeply affects their families
too. I had a loss for words
right after the Vietnam
veteran said that sentence
to me. My throat narrows
and tightens up when I
feel some of my empathic
sorrow. Our soldiers always
deserve good medical care
too. The Middle East wars
burn pit injury legislation
was finally passed as an
open door for our soldiers
to be taken seriously. It's
about time. Your reaction
to my poem tells me you
have a big heart. Many
blessings to you.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
I just awarded my last six to another wartime entry. However, your entry too is so deserving. The message is so clearly stated and rings with the heartaches of war. The visual fits perfectly. I am a veteran, and my brother is too. He served in Vietnam, and I served behind the Berlin wall before it was removed. I would drop the first line down one space and enlarge the text by one size so all the older vets like me can read your honoring tribute to all Vets. It is so well-done.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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I just awarded my last six to another wartime entry. However, your entry too is so deserving. The message is so clearly stated and rings with the heartaches of war. The visual fits perfectly. I am a veteran, and my brother is too. He served in Vietnam, and I served behind the Berlin wall before it was removed. I would drop the first line down one space and enlarge the text by one size so all the older vets like me can read your honoring tribute to all Vets. It is so well-done.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, dear
Sandra, for your volunteering
to serve back then. It takes
a lot of guts for a woman
to sign up for military
service. I appreciate your
brother stepping up to the
plate too. A big welcome
home to you both. Many
blessings to you and your
family.
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Thank you so much for your well wishes. I wish the same for you and your loved ones.
Comment from susand3022
Hi Regina, This is a beautiful Free Verse. I really enjoyed reading it.
I do have a suggestion though, break it up into sentences. Use periods and capital letters in places, it will read better. As it stands now, each stanza reads like a run-on sentence. For example:
Stanza 1 could break at...
line 3 showed.
line 4 My
line 7 All
line 8 cease.
line 9 Soldiers
line 10 Americana.
line 11 Their
line 12 soul.
line 13 Not
line 14 homecoming.
Did you mean to put (...) after homecoming or (.) because you put (..) which is nothing.
So, my only suggestion is on punctuation to make for an easier read, your words are perfect. Susan :)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Hi Regina, This is a beautiful Free Verse. I really enjoyed reading it.
I do have a suggestion though, break it up into sentences. Use periods and capital letters in places, it will read better. As it stands now, each stanza reads like a run-on sentence. For example:
Stanza 1 could break at...
line 3 showed.
line 4 My
line 7 All
line 8 cease.
line 9 Soldiers
line 10 Americana.
line 11 Their
line 12 soul.
line 13 Not
line 14 homecoming.
Did you mean to put (...) after homecoming or (.) because you put (..) which is nothing.
So, my only suggestion is on punctuation to make for an easier read, your words are perfect. Susan :)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Susan.
I hope to correct it via your
thoughtful suggestions soon.
Our soldiers have gone
through so much tragedy
and so much deserve good
care by the VA hospitals. Many blessings to you.
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a beautifully written poem for this contest. I think it will be a very strong entry. Good luck. The story and message you deliver are compelling. I also love the way you presented the poem in lowercase, in my opinion, it made it more powerful. I am sorry I am out of 6s. Exceptional work. Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem for this contest. I think it will be a very strong entry. Good luck. The story and message you deliver are compelling. I also love the way you presented the poem in lowercase, in my opinion, it made it more powerful. I am sorry I am out of 6s. Exceptional work. Terry.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Terry.
Our soldiers deserve all the
best care they need.. The
politicians finally passed
the Middle East wars
burn pit legislation. The sad
story is, so many soldiers
have died waiting for
good health care at the VA
hospitals. They are honored
and remembered by so many
Americans. Many blessings
to you.
Comment from Write Right Writer
Regina...
This is excellent writing. Well done1
You capture the honor, sacrifice, camaraderie, and heroism of military service and juxtapose it, very effectively, against the pain, horrors, brokenness, and tragedy of life as a veteran.
Without yet having seen other entries, I cannot imagine your poem not receiving my vote. It should do very well in the contest.
Best of luck.
Curt (WRW)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Regina...
This is excellent writing. Well done1
You capture the honor, sacrifice, camaraderie, and heroism of military service and juxtapose it, very effectively, against the pain, horrors, brokenness, and tragedy of life as a veteran.
Without yet having seen other entries, I cannot imagine your poem not receiving my vote. It should do very well in the contest.
Best of luck.
Curt (WRW)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Curt
I haven't gotten a chance yet
to read another entry in this
contest, but glancing over
it I can sense it's a very noble write. Thank you so much
for your caring comments
about or troops. Many
blessings to you..
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You are most welcome, Regina. Congratulations on your well-deserved win!
And I must add, "told you so."
Curt (WRW)
Comment from Dawn Munro
"Their nightmares flashing as
they wake up sweating in
their sheets in the dark,
still hearing the firefight,
still seeing the VC,
and hearing the life breaths
leaving mortally wounded
brothers,..."
You bring to life the horror of war. This reminds me so much of what Ukraine faces now.
But on a personal level, I identify with this --
"I met a woman in
her eighties,
a little confused,
couldn't remember
where her son's grave
was located,
her son was a
Vietnam veteran,
she told me her
daughter in law
couldn't bear to
visit his grave,..." Some loss is nigh on impossible...
Wish I had a six for this stunning free verse.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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"Their nightmares flashing as
they wake up sweating in
their sheets in the dark,
still hearing the firefight,
still seeing the VC,
and hearing the life breaths
leaving mortally wounded
brothers,..."
You bring to life the horror of war. This reminds me so much of what Ukraine faces now.
But on a personal level, I identify with this --
"I met a woman in
her eighties,
a little confused,
couldn't remember
where her son's grave
was located,
her son was a
Vietnam veteran,
she told me her
daughter in law
couldn't bear to
visit his grave,..." Some loss is nigh on impossible...
Wish I had a six for this stunning free verse.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much,
Ideasaregems. When I wrote
this tribute poem I tried to
walk in their shoes, empathically. Yet, only the
war vets themselves really
know the horror of war.
Their families suffer too.
Thank you so much for
taking the time to read my
poem, and for the 5 stars.
Many blessings to you.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is well written, and thought provoking. Makes a person stop and think. This is a very heartfelt and amazing poem that you shared, and it is an exceptional way to pay tribute to our service men and women. The flow of the words were done perfectly, and it tells a sad, but true story, of some of the way Veterans still suffer even after they come home. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is well written, and thought provoking. Makes a person stop and think. This is a very heartfelt and amazing poem that you shared, and it is an exceptional way to pay tribute to our service men and women. The flow of the words were done perfectly, and it tells a sad, but true story, of some of the way Veterans still suffer even after they come home. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much,
Jacquelyn, for taking the time to read my poem tribute
to our troops. War is such
a tragic and heartbreaking
shame on humanity. The
politicians wage the wars and its the youth who have
to go and fight it. Thank you
so much for the 6 stars.
Many blessings to you.