Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Metamorphose"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from C.A.Currie
Nice writing! I have to admit I didn't know that caterpillars only have 6 legs - just goes to show you that you can learn something every day - even when you're 68! I guess I was thinking along the lines of a centipede.
Thanks for the beautiful haiku and for the entomology/lepidopterist lesson!
Hugs and Sunshine from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Nice writing! I have to admit I didn't know that caterpillars only have 6 legs - just goes to show you that you can learn something every day - even when you're 68! I guess I was thinking along the lines of a centipede.
Thanks for the beautiful haiku and for the entomology/lepidopterist lesson!
Hugs and Sunshine from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Smiling back, I am grateful for your supportive review. I have only written a handful of Haiku over the three years I have been a member. For me this is a reflection of the transformation of our subjective humanness from birth to death, through the witnessing of natures constant metamorphous that surrounds our daily life.s.
Comment from mermaids
When I read your haiku, I can feel the caterpillar changing into a butterfly."My two wings unfold" is a perfect last line that sums up the first two lines. Excellent haiku form that creates a picture of nature.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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When I read your haiku, I can feel the caterpillar changing into a butterfly."My two wings unfold" is a perfect last line that sums up the first two lines. Excellent haiku form that creates a picture of nature.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Mermaids, thank you! I am grateful for your supportive review. I have only written a handful of Hauiku over the three years I have been a member. For me this is a reflection of the transformation of our subjective humanness from birth to death, through the witnessing of natures constant metamorphous that surrounds our daily life.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your topic was well chosen, JLR. The picture's perfect, too.
I understand what you were saying, but I don't believe this
fits the haiku style. However, that doesn't diminish the fact
your poem was well done. I don't wish to lower the rating from
5 to 4 because I could be wrong. So, a 5 it is.
title-->Metamorphus-->Metamorphous
Six feet do carry
this body morphing until
my two wings unfold
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Your topic was well chosen, JLR. The picture's perfect, too.
I understand what you were saying, but I don't believe this
fits the haiku style. However, that doesn't diminish the fact
your poem was well done. I don't wish to lower the rating from
5 to 4 because I could be wrong. So, a 5 it is.
title-->Metamorphus-->Metamorphous
Six feet do carry
this body morphing until
my two wings unfold
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Jan, I am grateful for your review. I have only written a handful of Haiku style submissions over the three years I have been a member, so you very well may be correct. For me, this is a reflection of the transformation of our subjective humanness from birth to death through the witnessing of nature's constant metamorphous that surrounds our daily life.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-I like the "six feet" reference and the
description about morphing.
-A good concluding line.
-Good luck in the the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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-Good artwork and presentation.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-I like the "six feet" reference and the
description about morphing.
-A good concluding line.
-Good luck in the the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Pam. thank you! I am grateful for your supportive review. I have only written a handful of Haiku over the three years I have been a member. For me this is a reflection of the transformation of our subjective humanness from birth to death, through the witnessing of natures constant metamorphous that surrounds our daily life.
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You are very welcome, Jim. I appreciate your sharing in your reply.
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent haiku. You let the whole life of the butterfly in a unique and clever way. The picture is perfect to compliment your poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Excellent haiku. You let the whole life of the butterfly in a unique and clever way. The picture is perfect to compliment your poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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I am honored by your validation thank you!
Comment from Terry Broxson
An excellent entry for the haiku contest, good luck. You got a lot going on that makes a good haiku. You have nature. You have a good visual with the writing and a good photo to illustrate the poem, good job. Terry.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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An excellent entry for the haiku contest, good luck. You got a lot going on that makes a good haiku. You have nature. You have a good visual with the writing and a good photo to illustrate the poem, good job. Terry.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Terry, thank you so very much! I appreciate your comments and validation.
Comment from livelylinda
JLR: a good haiku about the changing into a butterfly. This is one of the many wonders of nature and should allow us to stop and envision God's work. Linda
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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JLR: a good haiku about the changing into a butterfly. This is one of the many wonders of nature and should allow us to stop and envision God's work. Linda
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Linda, I am so deeply grateful for your six star validation on the celebration of transformation. Something we humans subjectfully do from birth to death.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Oh, I see. Six feet do carry means the six feet used for locomotion by a caterpillar suits you just fine until you transition into a flying butterfly. This is an excellent Haiku and paints a mental picture of the morphing of us as we go through life to become more than we were previously. I have transitioned in many ways in my life including becoming a more serious writer and poet.
Thanks for sharing this gem.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Oh, I see. Six feet do carry means the six feet used for locomotion by a caterpillar suits you just fine until you transition into a flying butterfly. This is an excellent Haiku and paints a mental picture of the morphing of us as we go through life to become more than we were previously. I have transitioned in many ways in my life including becoming a more serious writer and poet.
Thanks for sharing this gem.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Jesse, thank you and yes we humans do transition and morph our way from birth to death.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I can name your poem, the story of the butterfly: "Six feet do carry
this body morphing until
my two wings unfold". Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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I can name your poem, the story of the butterfly: "Six feet do carry
this body morphing until
my two wings unfold". Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Smiling back, thank you!
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Metamorphus, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, allows that a caterpillar can tell when it is time to get the lead out and fly. Nice.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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This haiku, Metamorphus, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, allows that a caterpillar can tell when it is time to get the lead out and fly. Nice.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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thanks much, Bill!