Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from royowen
It seem like you folk can sense the approaching spring, and I don't blame, although our winters aren't severe, I sense we share something common, it's been hot here, but I know autumn approaches, well done, good luck in the contest, blessings Roy
Suggestion : just like a frown, (not good to leave out articles for syllable count.) 2: warm sun its source. 3: with warming rays.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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It seem like you folk can sense the approaching spring, and I don't blame, although our winters aren't severe, I sense we share something common, it's been hot here, but I know autumn approaches, well done, good luck in the contest, blessings Roy
Suggestion : just like a frown, (not good to leave out articles for syllable count.) 2: warm sun its source. 3: with warming rays.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Roy, your comments are so valued, I think you saved this from the circular file - thank you.
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Good luck
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and poem, Jim.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-Good progression with the
development of the bud.
-It peeks through the snow
and is warmed by the sun
until it finally blooms.
-I like your concluding verse
as "nature nurtures" you.
-Good luck in the contest.
*In line one, you have 7 syllables;
you could put 'has' in front of sprung
*sun's source
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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-Nice image and poem, Jim.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-Good progression with the
development of the bud.
-It peeks through the snow
and is warmed by the sun
until it finally blooms.
-I like your concluding verse
as "nature nurtures" you.
-Good luck in the contest.
*In line one, you have 7 syllables;
you could put 'has' in front of sprung
*sun's source
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much Pam, I changed to Spring again sprung forth as a tease.
I so value your feedback always ...
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You are welcome, and it looks good!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I now live in Texas but when I lived in Northern Illinois, I would always look forward to the first signs of spring. The crocus, the jonquils, the first robin. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I now live in Texas but when I lived in Northern Illinois, I would always look forward to the first signs of spring. The crocus, the jonquils, the first robin. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Thanks Barbara, you know winters last grasp very well then,
Comment from karenina
This form becomes more endearing the more that I read it! You wrote of nature and seasons and I thing how we all must persevere and "weather" adversity...
Very nice!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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This form becomes more endearing the more that I read it! You wrote of nature and seasons and I thing how we all must persevere and "weather" adversity...
Very nice!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Hi Karenina, thanks will watch for yours...
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It always takes me much more than a "Minute" to come up with a "Minute."
(Stubborn muse!)-- It's on my "to do" list!
Comment from Jessa Miller
I loved this. My grandmother had a way with words and, seeing something so simple, could call attention to the beauty of it. This reminded me of her and I appreciate that. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I loved this. My grandmother had a way with words and, seeing something so simple, could call attention to the beauty of it. This reminded me of her and I appreciate that. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Jessa thank you, I am certain she was a great lover of nature.
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a lovely spring poem for the minute contest. I believe you only have seven syllables in the first line, though. (as if to tease??) The other lines are fine, and I like the rhymes you chose. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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This is a lovely spring poem for the minute contest. I believe you only have seven syllables in the first line, though. (as if to tease??) The other lines are fine, and I like the rhymes you chose. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Carol I spritely is 3 syllables thanks for your lovely thoughts
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I just turned seventy and am aware that, as I have aged, the signs of spring that come in late winter are more sweet to me--reminding me that I too
can still "blossom." Your minute poem is lovely and inspirational.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I just turned seventy and am aware that, as I have aged, the signs of spring that come in late winter are more sweet to me--reminding me that I too
can still "blossom." Your minute poem is lovely and inspirational.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Janice thank you much, I will be seventy-two March 26th I agree 100%
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed your minute poem, I have never written one but may give it a try. What is your favorite style of poetry? The topic of spring seems to be popular choice and you have done a great job with it.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed your minute poem, I have never written one but may give it a try. What is your favorite style of poetry? The topic of spring seems to be popular choice and you have done a great job with it.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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K.L. thank you for stepping into my poem.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Minute Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Hello JLR a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your Minute Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thanks friend, Hope your week is outstanding in every manner.