God And War
6 Sentence 120 Word Spiritual Fiction Contest Entry45 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
What can I say ? I always try to write a review as fair as I possibly can, but from past experience you make it difficult for anybody to give a fair review. I see a few grammatical issues, but who am I to say.
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What can I say ? I always try to write a review as fair as I possibly can, but from past experience you make it difficult for anybody to give a fair review. I see a few grammatical issues, but who am I to say.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from Wayne Fowler
You did it, followed a hundred and twenty thousand word directive in a hundred and twenty words. My only wish is that you had been economical enough with words to have saved some back to have spared a billion people.
Best wishes.
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You did it, followed a hundred and twenty thousand word directive in a hundred and twenty words. My only wish is that you had been economical enough with words to have saved some back to have spared a billion people.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from jessizero
You did a great job. God is everywhere in everything. Thank you for choosing to share this here. You did a great job with the prompt and the guidelines.
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You did a great job. God is everywhere in everything. Thank you for choosing to share this here. You did a great job with the prompt and the guidelines.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written story. You followed the writing prompt well. The story reads, and flows well. I liked how the story ended with the child thanking God. Nice job.
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This was a well written story. You followed the writing prompt well. The story reads, and flows well. I liked how the story ended with the child thanking God. Nice job.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from Anne Johnston
You certainly put a lot of time and effort into this entry for the contest. As near as I can tell, you have obeyed all the rules. I didn't even try this one, so admire your effort very much.
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You certainly put a lot of time and effort into this entry for the contest. As near as I can tell, you have obeyed all the rules. I didn't even try this one, so admire your effort very much.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from Annette R.
I think you followed the instructions and restrictions. One thought: Whispering to Him instead of whispering Him. Another thought: Three countries being devastated today. Any changes totally up to you of course. The large font made it easier to read and the words highlighted in red was a nice touch.
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I think you followed the instructions and restrictions. One thought: Whispering to Him instead of whispering Him. Another thought: Three countries being devastated today. Any changes totally up to you of course. The large font made it easier to read and the words highlighted in red was a nice touch.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and formatting of your story.
-You did a good job with the required words.
-I like the idea of a 12 year old boy as the subject.
-The boy chose a very good wish.
-The inclusion of the evening news report was effective,
along with the closing lines and the boy's final comment.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Nice image and formatting of your story.
-You did a good job with the required words.
-I like the idea of a 12 year old boy as the subject.
-The boy chose a very good wish.
-The inclusion of the evening news report was effective,
along with the closing lines and the boy's final comment.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from RGstar
Not sure which three countries are spoken of, or how the 999 situation interacts. Would be good to get an idea of these factors to further understand the reasoning behind the post. One thing is evident. Faith, which is very strong, as in other works from you.
Best wishes.
RGstar
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Not sure which three countries are spoken of, or how the 999 situation interacts. Would be good to get an idea of these factors to further understand the reasoning behind the post. One thing is evident. Faith, which is very strong, as in other works from you.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from James Ott
The author did a fine job with all these restrictions. Only the opening lines seemed difficult but that is probably due to my definition of benediction. Of course, it is a "blessing," and does apply here. I am amazed that he writer managed to say anything cogent given the restrictions. On the whole a good job. I am in agreement with what is being said.
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The author did a fine job with all these restrictions. Only the opening lines seemed difficult but that is probably due to my definition of benediction. Of course, it is a "blessing," and does apply here. I am amazed that he writer managed to say anything cogent given the restrictions. On the whole a good job. I am in agreement with what is being said.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely story. That the young boy asked for all those people to be saved and didn't ask for anything for himself. That is what Christianity is all about. Love thy neighbour, and that child did. Well done, it was a lovely story and an excellent contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra
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What a lovely story. That the young boy asked for all those people to be saved and didn't ask for anything for himself. That is what Christianity is all about. Love thy neighbour, and that child did. Well done, it was a lovely story and an excellent contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022