Mom's Last Christmas
Almost one holiday too late24 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is well-written and very poignant. It was easy to follow and see everything you mentioned. The discussion you and your mom had about the ventilator sounded just like a child being reprimanded by mom--even though you were the ages stated. I'm thrilled your mom got to see the beautiful lights before returning to the home, and that is such a special memory for you.
she the (then) croaked
She picked out everybody's for Christmas presents. (I would delete the word 'for')
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Your contest entry is well-written and very poignant. It was easy to follow and see everything you mentioned. The discussion you and your mom had about the ventilator sounded just like a child being reprimanded by mom--even though you were the ages stated. I'm thrilled your mom got to see the beautiful lights before returning to the home, and that is such a special memory for you.
she the (then) croaked
She picked out everybody's for Christmas presents. (I would delete the word 'for')
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 01-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much Jan. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from equestrik
Your mom sounds like one heck of a tough and determined lady. I am sorry for your loss but I feel you are very fortunate to have had such a strong woman for your mom.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Your mom sounds like one heck of a tough and determined lady. I am sorry for your loss but I feel you are very fortunate to have had such a strong woman for your mom.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Mystery writer, a terrific Thursday to you. Thank you for sharing that deeply personal and touching story with us. I think you executed the writing prompt well, should be a strong contest entry. Good job and good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Hello Mystery writer, a terrific Thursday to you. Thank you for sharing that deeply personal and touching story with us. I think you executed the writing prompt well, should be a strong contest entry. Good job and good luck.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Your mom sounded like a strong independent woman who knew what she wanted and took command.
I appreciate that. I enjoyed your story.
Thank you for your story and sorry for your loss particularly that mom did not see you graduate and that you did not have her longer.
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Your mom sounded like a strong independent woman who knew what she wanted and took command.
I appreciate that. I enjoyed your story.
Thank you for your story and sorry for your loss particularly that mom did not see you graduate and that you did not have her longer.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.