It Wasn't Amore
(598 words) A disastrous dinner date.31 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
What a story, LisaMay. :) I can see why you are a winner every time. :) With your over active imagination and life's dependencies you pen a whale of a story. LOL and still laughing. :) This is an exelent entry for the Describe a First Date contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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What a story, LisaMay. :) I can see why you are a winner every time. :) With your over active imagination and life's dependencies you pen a whale of a story. LOL and still laughing. :) This is an exelent entry for the Describe a First Date contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your fantastic review! I figured if it made me laugh then it would entertain others.
Comment from RodG
Hi, Lisa. In America we call these tall tales because of the imaginative hyperbole. I really enjoyed it! You do a great job of setting the scene in the Italian restaurant and describing your date. Then that scene where you broke your dentures was priceless and I love how the "action" evolves. Rod
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hi, Lisa. In America we call these tall tales because of the imaginative hyperbole. I really enjoyed it! You do a great job of setting the scene in the Italian restaurant and describing your date. Then that scene where you broke your dentures was priceless and I love how the "action" evolves. Rod
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I got carried away with the hyperbole and could easily have created more destruction with a longer word count! The entire restaurant would have been in peril.
Comment from zanya
Thankfully humour never goes out of fashion - a humorous look at a first date not of the lovelorn, younger set - but of a more mature demeanour - a most enjoyable read
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thankfully humour never goes out of fashion - a humorous look at a first date not of the lovelorn, younger set - but of a more mature demeanour - a most enjoyable read
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks. i'm pleased you enjoyed it. The young and lovely feature often enough - it's time us oldies had a laugh.
Comment from djsaxon
Hilarious (sorta). It is so bizarre it has to be true. No one could make this up. The best I can muster is dribbling a milkshake all down the front of my shirt on a first (and only) date with I girl I was desperate to impress back in the day. I stopped drinking milkshakes and bought a cat. - DJ
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hilarious (sorta). It is so bizarre it has to be true. No one could make this up. The best I can muster is dribbling a milkshake all down the front of my shirt on a first (and only) date with I girl I was desperate to impress back in the day. I stopped drinking milkshakes and bought a cat. - DJ
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Your solution to public embarrassment was perfect.
Thanks for your revealing review. Now you know too much about ME from reading this story.
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Maybe a little frivolous and I realize that I should comment about content, grammar and flow yah de yah but you clever pen renders that redundant. DJ
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I adore frivolity. There is too much yah de yahda in the world. Thank you for the compliment. My clever pen lets me hold it sometimes.
Comment from Wils
Hilarious, and embarrassing to boot. I can imagine the situation. It is funny how a story can take on a life of its own. Glad you let it flow, it added to the humour.
Geoff
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hilarious, and embarrassing to boot. I can imagine the situation. It is funny how a story can take on a life of its own. Glad you let it flow, it added to the humour.
Geoff
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the great review, Geoff. Crazy stuff develops a flow of its own... I was clinging onto the reins as this story bolted.
Comment from Debra White
Hi LisaMay, so glad I had a six left to award your hilarious story!
I really enjoyed the read. Your tone is engaging and the plot is slapstick brilliant.
Good luck in the contest!
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hi LisaMay, so glad I had a six left to award your hilarious story!
I really enjoyed the read. Your tone is engaging and the plot is slapstick brilliant.
Good luck in the contest!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your stars and comments Debra. In my 'tone' i was aiming for mature gentility as a contrast to the manic mayhem unfolding.
Comment from JudyE
What a hoot! So much fun. it would make a great TV or stage farce. Breaking your dentures would be bad enough but from there the action just snowballed. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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What a hoot! So much fun. it would make a great TV or stage farce. Breaking your dentures would be bad enough but from there the action just snowballed. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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As I was writing this i could picture it as a TV slapstick farce. In fact, i toyed with the idea of making it a script but i am more comfortable writing stories. Thanks for your brilliant review.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Oh my goodness, LisaMay, I don't remember when I laughed this hard! I could picture the whole thing going down just as you say. Each time one more thing happened and I started laughing again! This is absolutely great!!!
(((((((((((((((((((HUGS)))))))))))))))))))))))
Parry "Quack!"
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Oh my goodness, LisaMay, I don't remember when I laughed this hard! I could picture the whole thing going down just as you say. Each time one more thing happened and I started laughing again! This is absolutely great!!!
(((((((((((((((((((HUGS)))))))))))))))))))))))
Parry "Quack!"
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I love picturing you having a jolly good laugh - i'm pleased i could serve up a dose of laughable silliness for you. xx
Comment from RShipp
"knowing that my inner beauty lay under a woeful welter of wrinkles. " Loved that line.
"He was staring at my lips. He must think I'm kissable! Then I noticed his hearing aids. He's lip reading!" Hahaha
"He became so goggle-eyed at my predicament that one of his eyeballs fell out, rolled across the table and broke on the floor." Oh My!!!
I was in stitches!
Best of luck in the Describe a First Date writing contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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"knowing that my inner beauty lay under a woeful welter of wrinkles. " Loved that line.
"He was staring at my lips. He must think I'm kissable! Then I noticed his hearing aids. He's lip reading!" Hahaha
"He became so goggle-eyed at my predicament that one of his eyeballs fell out, rolled across the table and broke on the floor." Oh My!!!
I was in stitches!
Best of luck in the Describe a First Date writing contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Great! I love your response to my story. Just because i found it funny when i was writing it does not always equate to others laughing too.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is known as a chain reaction or one thing leads to another. Look on the bright side though you have clearly used up your months allocation of bad luck and for the the next ten days or so you will be immune. So my advice is to pull yourself together and get out there and live. It will soon be a new month when you will receive a new allocation of bad luck.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This is known as a chain reaction or one thing leads to another. Look on the bright side though you have clearly used up your months allocation of bad luck and for the the next ten days or so you will be immune. So my advice is to pull yourself together and get out there and live. It will soon be a new month when you will receive a new allocation of bad luck.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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I do not lead the sort of life where immunity is possible, unfortunately, no matter how much i pull myself together. Enjoying 10 days without some disaster happening would be a blessing. But because of that it does allow for an accumulation of other stories to tell.