Babysitting Legacies
They're never quite what we remember... are they?34 total reviews
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the contest Yvette. This was great, so many hints throughout as she listened to the twins story. Up to the part where she went outside and found the troll and the cat. Then things became clearer. I really enjoyed the suspense you incorporated, it made me wonder what was causing the sound. You even hinted that she had cared for the boys father as well. Great job, very much enjoyed. Again good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Good luck in the contest Yvette. This was great, so many hints throughout as she listened to the twins story. Up to the part where she went outside and found the troll and the cat. Then things became clearer. I really enjoyed the suspense you incorporated, it made me wonder what was causing the sound. You even hinted that she had cared for the boys father as well. Great job, very much enjoyed. Again good luck.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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You know me too well, Alie! ;) Glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
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You are so welcome Yvette.
Comment from RShipp
"Jarrod's feet commanded his attention" and "Faye's snaps were legendary among her charges" are great visual phrases!
I loved the beast's name that the babysitter was blaming .... Freckles!!!
I was caught by surprise by a troll with allergies.... loved it.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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"Jarrod's feet commanded his attention" and "Faye's snaps were legendary among her charges" are great visual phrases!
I loved the beast's name that the babysitter was blaming .... Freckles!!!
I was caught by surprise by a troll with allergies.... loved it.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for these lovely stars and such an awesome review -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful weekend, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Susan Larson
What a delightful story and what an interesting surprise twist at the end. At first I thought the twins were just stalling bedtime. The dialogue was realistic and flowed very well. Having raised three boys just as you have, I can relate to it. I believe this creative story has a great chance of winning .
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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What a delightful story and what an interesting surprise twist at the end. At first I thought the twins were just stalling bedtime. The dialogue was realistic and flowed very well. Having raised three boys just as you have, I can relate to it. I believe this creative story has a great chance of winning .
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Susan -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Our boys.... wouldn't trade those adventures for the world, huh? :) Take care out there and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Brett Matthew West
-Proper start meets contest requirement
-The battle to get the boys to bed begins as is often the case with babysitting. Story reveals her clients are being raised by a single father who she may have an interest in
-"for few seconds" --- should this be "for a few seconds"?
-seems the boys have quite a time explaining the noise they heard
-Drustan is a nice little twist to the story, and "Fay" is revealed to be a fairy
-well crafted story
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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-Proper start meets contest requirement
-The battle to get the boys to bed begins as is often the case with babysitting. Story reveals her clients are being raised by a single father who she may have an interest in
-"for few seconds" --- should this be "for a few seconds"?
-seems the boys have quite a time explaining the noise they heard
-Drustan is a nice little twist to the story, and "Fay" is revealed to be a fairy
-well crafted story
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Brett -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
This is a delightful magical entry for the sentence prompt contest, Yvette. Jerrod and Gerald sound like my two oldest sons born a year apart. They were always stirred by outside noises and called for midnight investigations. I, however, was no fairy. ;)
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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This is a delightful magical entry for the sentence prompt contest, Yvette. Jerrod and Gerald sound like my two oldest sons born a year apart. They were always stirred by outside noises and called for midnight investigations. I, however, was no fairy. ;)
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest,
Sally xo
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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LOL! You know me and my 'magic', Lady Sal!! ;) Our boys.... wouldn't trade those adventures for the world, huh? :) Thanx for the review and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from MamaBebop
Yvette,
I absolutely LOVED this! It was a wonderfully spun tale. It shows you have an in-depth knowledge of the inner workings of young boys!(wink, wink-mom of boys) I was delighted by the interaction of Faye and the boys and the snotty troll. Good luck in the contest, though I don't think you will need it!
Blessings, Beth
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Yvette,
I absolutely LOVED this! It was a wonderfully spun tale. It shows you have an in-depth knowledge of the inner workings of young boys!(wink, wink-mom of boys) I was delighted by the interaction of Faye and the boys and the snotty troll. Good luck in the contest, though I don't think you will need it!
Blessings, Beth
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Hooray!! You are too awesome, Beth!! ;) And, yeah, I did have a bit of an inside track on the interactions...lol! ;) Thank you so much for these lovely stars and such an awesome review -- and I'm glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Trolls need love, too!! ;) LOL! ;) Take care, my friend! ;) Yvette
Comment from dmt1967
This is a delightful story. I liked the way you lead the reader to assume the story was about one thing when really it was about another. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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This is a delightful story. I liked the way you lead the reader to assume the story was about one thing when really it was about another. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for these lovely stars and such an awesome review -- so glad you enjoyed Faye's magical babysitting expertise! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from tfawcus
This post displays an in-depth knowledge of the psychology of young boys! I was thoroughly entertained by the dialogue between Faye and her young charges. I imagine that there would be quite a few babysitters in the world who would give their eye teeth for such magical powers! A delightful twist at the end. This one will be hard to beat in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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This post displays an in-depth knowledge of the psychology of young boys! I was thoroughly entertained by the dialogue between Faye and her young charges. I imagine that there would be quite a few babysitters in the world who would give their eye teeth for such magical powers! A delightful twist at the end. This one will be hard to beat in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Tony -- three sons gives me a 'leg up' on these types of interactions...LOL!! ;) Thanx for the review, sir! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
Comment from JudyE
Great story. Very enjoyable and I'm glad there wasn't a monster or somesuch outside!
Just a couple of small points:
You have two different spellings for Jerrod/Jarrod.
Jerrod appeared to duck his head until Gerald nudged him.
"Jarrod?" Might as well go to the weakest link first - and later it's Jerrod again.
Have you ever heard a Maine Coon Cat cough up a hairball - should 'cat' be lower case?
"Dru! Cover you mouth!" - should be 'cover your mouth'
Best of luck
Judy
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Great story. Very enjoyable and I'm glad there wasn't a monster or somesuch outside!
Just a couple of small points:
You have two different spellings for Jerrod/Jarrod.
Jerrod appeared to duck his head until Gerald nudged him.
"Jarrod?" Might as well go to the weakest link first - and later it's Jerrod again.
Have you ever heard a Maine Coon Cat cough up a hairball - should 'cat' be lower case?
"Dru! Cover you mouth!" - should be 'cover your mouth'
Best of luck
Judy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Thanx for the catches on this one, Joan -- oh, and name changes are what you get when part is written at work (between classes) and then finished at home! ;) Thanx for the review, ma'am! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
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We're getting name changes here too! LMHO It's Judy - not that it matters. You've got me correct in the next one. :)
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Sorry -- was at (doing a class observation...ugh) and started with a J-word and I guess the fingers did the rest -- I did give you the review credit, yeah? Let me know and my apologies...
Of course, now I'm wondering who Joan is...
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Yes, I got the nomination thanks very much. Someone else has called me 'Joan' at least once. haha I'm wondering who she is too!
Comment from Ricky1024
I wish I had six stars but I used them up!
This is a delightful tale I knew there was something special about the babysitter Faye.
In the very end you find out.
I loved the twins and they were adorable.
And, I thought they were actually imagining some strange noises.
And, a strange outside creature like that hides in the closet at night!
Well done and thanks.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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I wish I had six stars but I used them up!
This is a delightful tale I knew there was something special about the babysitter Faye.
In the very end you find out.
I loved the twins and they were adorable.
And, I thought they were actually imagining some strange noises.
And, a strange outside creature like that hides in the closet at night!
Well done and thanks.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Ricky -- this is me getting my pen out of mothballs and letting my imagination start up after the holidays! ;) Thanx for the review, sir! ;) Take care out there and have a wonderful year ahead! ;) Yvette
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Your more than welcome.
Ricky