Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

Mama needs a capital M as it's being used as a name sub. This is one piece of righteous anger and Mama is seething and ready to blow. I hope to read a follow-up piece though I can;t see it ending well for these characters.

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thank you for the 'catch' and for your review this evening! Don't think this will have a follow, SallyO, as this was hard to write for this contest (and, yes, it is fiction). Thanks again!!

reply by Sallyo on 28-Sep-2019

I took it for fiction... It's a mistake to believe every first person piece is fact. I also hit that darned semi colon instead of the apostrophe again!

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This is a very sad poem. I don't know how people abandon their children and breakup families to please their sexual desires. Good use of rhyme and proximate rhyme. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019

Thank you for your review this evening. Twas a tough write for the contest even though its fiction.

reply by dejohnsrld (Debbie) on 27-Sep-2019

I'm glad it was fiction :)~Debbie