The Minx and the Mensch
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Comment from LIJ Red
I might juggle quotes until the end rhymes were always at the end, but if the judges like it, it's fine by me. Looks like it fits the carnal caperings prompt.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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I might juggle quotes until the end rhymes were always at the end, but if the judges like it, it's fine by me. Looks like it fits the carnal caperings prompt.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thanks, LlJRed.
Comment from TPAC
A charming story, explosive ending, finding that bang mounted suspense from given descriptive statement, appealing read in my opinion of this particular write.
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A charming story, explosive ending, finding that bang mounted suspense from given descriptive statement, appealing read in my opinion of this particular write.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thank you, TPAC.
Comment from Bill Schott
This carnal caperings poem, The Minx and the Mensch, presented in a dialogue format, runs us through the supposedly sexual back and forth of our couple until we see that the real action across at the neighbors house. It's better than cable.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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This carnal caperings poem, The Minx and the Mensch, presented in a dialogue format, runs us through the supposedly sexual back and forth of our couple until we see that the real action across at the neighbors house. It's better than cable.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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And so much cheaper!!! Thanks for this delightful review, Bill!
Comment from Gail Denham
well, you did it - the steady dragging the reader along to anticipate ... what? Still, I sorta' figured it was something like this - a repair job. Nevertheless, it was well done.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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well, you did it - the steady dragging the reader along to anticipate ... what? Still, I sorta' figured it was something like this - a repair job. Nevertheless, it was well done.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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It wasn't a repair job! They're voyeurs. They took the shutters down to watch the neighbors in their bedroom garage!!
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Right - but your lead up was suggestive. Good job.
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent entry for the Carnal Caperings contest
With very good misdirection and twist at the end.
Some rhymes make it a bit more like a poem, though it reads like prose.
Excellent title draws the reader in, too.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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You've written an excellent entry for the Carnal Caperings contest
With very good misdirection and twist at the end.
Some rhymes make it a bit more like a poem, though it reads like prose.
Excellent title draws the reader in, too.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thanks, Robert! So glad you finished feeling satisfied!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
What a hoot! Believable and fun! Quite the temptress and mensch. What I appreciate about your offering is that it isn't crass. It's suggestive and made me smile. Good fun!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Hello Mystery Writer,
What a hoot! Believable and fun! Quite the temptress and mensch. What I appreciate about your offering is that it isn't crass. It's suggestive and made me smile. Good fun!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thank you, Mrs. KT! That's right: anything off-color was exclusively in the reader's mind!!
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Yes!
I understand the prompt and your offering is most appropriate. I just have an issue when writers post crass offerings in contests that - to my mind - make a mockery of the prompt and the contestants.
Take Care!
Duabe
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Hah!
Never post a reply using a smartphone... diane
What the heck is a "Duabe?"
:)
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I hear you. I, too, think that Fun and Respect for one's readership should co-exist.
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Yes!
I understand the prompt and your offering is most appropriate. I just have an issue when writers post crass offerings in contests that - to my mind - make a mockery of the prompt and the contestants.
Take Care!
Duabe
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Yes!
I understand the prompt and your offering is most appropriate. I just have an issue when writers post crass offerings in contests that - to my mind - make a mockery of the prompt and the contestants.
Take Care!
Duabe
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Yes!
I understand the prompt and your offering is most appropriate. I just have an issue when writers post crass offerings in contests that - to my mind - make a mockery of the prompt and the contestants.
Take Care!
Duabe
Comment from misscookie
Ha-Ha
This was great
Not only did the artwork you choose captured my attention but your poem, which are a perfect match
I was about to fell do it or forget it!
And when they did I got the shock of my life this should be a winner
cookie
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Ha-Ha
This was great
Not only did the artwork you choose captured my attention but your poem, which are a perfect match
I was about to fell do it or forget it!
And when they did I got the shock of my life this should be a winner
cookie
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thank you, Miss Cookie. I appreciate your fun review.
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Your very welcome, glad you thought it was funny.
have a nice week end
cookie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written suggestive poe about opening the window from inside so that the outside view can become a visible feature to look out and see what can be seen.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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A very well-written suggestive poe about opening the window from inside so that the outside view can become a visible feature to look out and see what can be seen.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Thank you, Sandra! I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is hilarious... I knew you were tricking me, but all the same you kept the interest throughout.
Very funny dialogue in a poem.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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This is hilarious... I knew you were tricking me, but all the same you kept the interest throughout.
Very funny dialogue in a poem.
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Sometimes it's fun to be tricked when you know very well it's a trick! Thanks for playing along, Maria.
Comment from Mastery
Funny and intriguing at the same time, author. It is an old ploy that works well in flash fiction, I'm not sure of poetry. The only line that is definitely misleading as it has no bearing at all, (that I can see) in the final result, is this one:
""What if it's so hard it hurts you," he asked." (see what I mean?) It is a bit of a stretch)
Bless you, good job, regardless. Bob
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Funny and intriguing at the same time, author. It is an old ploy that works well in flash fiction, I'm not sure of poetry. The only line that is definitely misleading as it has no bearing at all, (that I can see) in the final result, is this one:
""What if it's so hard it hurts you," he asked." (see what I mean?) It is a bit of a stretch)
Bless you, good job, regardless. Bob
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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What if it's so hard to dislodge that shutter that you injure your hand in the process.
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That could be. :) Bob