Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

These words show the depth of grief a parent has when losing a child. It shouldn't happen that way.. I like that the son Jay answers and tells the father to stay and not wish to die.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind thoughts and review.
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reply by dragonpoet on 03-Jun-2017

You're welcome, Ricky.

Joan

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Ricky. This one is so sad my friend. It has an unusual rhythm and your "I's" keep pulling me down the page to see what the next thought will be. Engaging. Keep writing from the soul. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017

Thanks dear and write so I can read.
Are we friends?
Ricky...

Comment from MaggieF

Excellent

Hard to read with tears in my eyes, I admire that you are still here. I won't say I know how you feel, because I couldn't even begin to know. I'm glad though that your boy get a mention to-night, he's alive tonight as we read about him. Your tribute is beautiful and Jason would be so proud, is probably smiling down on you now. Thank you for sharing. MaggieF

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind thoughts and review Maggie.
Ricky....

Comment from tyco2992

Exceptional

Wow this is amazing and so heartfelt. Sorry about your son the best always seem to be the first to go. I commend you for Sharing this wonderful peice of art I doubt it was easy. Great

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017

Thanks taco and sorry for the delay...
This generated a lot of attention.
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Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Missing a loved one is quite natural. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017

Thanks Charlie and sorry for the day...
This generated a lot of attention.
Ricky
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Comment from Annie_ Stone

Excellent

I can't say I could imagine the lost of a child, for mine are still here, but it is very sad always to hear. I hope am forever thankful mine have both it into their young adult lives so far... may you find some peace. Annie

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Kids your son or daughter and let them know about Jay and giving to keep four living.
It's important for your child may need that gift.
We never know..
Thanks and Jay thanks you too...
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Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

I'm so sorry about your son, Jay. He is now an angel in wherever we go when we die. Organ donation is awesome. I don't know what I could donate because I have so many damn problems.

Please keep writing. TC

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Writing script, poems, stories are all of form of journaling our thoughts.
Some share more then others.
This helped me...
Thanks,
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Comment from nancyrabbrose

Excellent

Yours is a very poignant poem and I know that it gave you relief and healing to write it. I noted that as the song went on you heard your son tell you to keep going on -- that you have things you need to do and you realized that you can keep writing poem to and about your Jay.
One correction:
change "your" to "you're"

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Thanks Nancy and tour thoughts are sweet and helpful.
I made a minor adjustment to edit the error.
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Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Ricky, I have always felt my friend in my heart that no parent should ever lose a child....he is such a handsome young man...and I say is because his spirit is alive in Heaven...I don't understand death Ricky...I just know that we are only on this earth a short time...and then we go to Heaven and live eternally...with our loved ones...Jason will always be a part of you...and you a part of him...a very touching song...and a wonderful tribute to Jason...love your song/poem...and your picture is priceless...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Thanks Raven for your love.
Almost in a Pie form.
But with faith.
I knew that young man and cut the cord and watched Him fly.
He saved lives while sacrificing with nocsecond thought.
That was Him in Life...
Eternally in death...
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reply by l.raven on 31-May-2017

your soooooo welcome my sweet friend...love xxoo Linda

Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Excellent

A beautiful tribute to your son. While the inspiration for the write is tragic, the hope it may bring to others that they too can get through the pain is a wonderful gift in itself. Your faith shines through, offering hope and love. The mention in the notes of organ donation is a marvelous idea.- Wendy

 Comment Written 31-May-2017

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reply by the author on 31-May-2017

Thanks ever so much Wendy
I am hoping for enough reviews to give it the recongnization it and...
" The Gift of Life" deserve.
Ricky....