Your Last Night
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Comment from winnona
This poem is so full of pain and agony that it was hard for me to read it. Loosing a child also, the pain is too deep not to feel the pain you suffer. I hope the poem helps ease the pain a little. My daughter has been gone a few years and I could not even begin to write something like this. I would not be able to get to the second line without going to pieces.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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This poem is so full of pain and agony that it was hard for me to read it. Loosing a child also, the pain is too deep not to feel the pain you suffer. I hope the poem helps ease the pain a little. My daughter has been gone a few years and I could not even begin to write something like this. I would not be able to get to the second line without going to pieces.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear winnona, please accept my sincere condolences on the loss of your daughter. I know you know how it feels. Unfortunately, you and I were forced to join a club that we neither wanted to join, nor can we revoke our membership. But, I'm glad to know another member of the club.
Love,
jeni
Comment from Caressa_08
Oh, so hard the burden you bear now.....Though can still see that your dear son is alive in your thoughts and his spirit is with you......that I know that helps you cope considerably. And, we can only do so much sometimes & that's all, as other things take over in our children's lives that we cannot control and should never feel guilty afterwards what occurs.
I have twin 39 yr old sons...who well aren't like they were when they were younger...One is a 100% disabled vet with PTSD & TBI who contributed to this even more so, by becoming an alcoholic ( though off that band wagon, finally ...But now a diabetic and sickly ) & the other twin, a Army veteran also... has changed so much though getting along OK in his marriage, though so much different... Yes, they are alive though so distance than ever I would of imagined now in their adulthood.
God Bless...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Oh, so hard the burden you bear now.....Though can still see that your dear son is alive in your thoughts and his spirit is with you......that I know that helps you cope considerably. And, we can only do so much sometimes & that's all, as other things take over in our children's lives that we cannot control and should never feel guilty afterwards what occurs.
I have twin 39 yr old sons...who well aren't like they were when they were younger...One is a 100% disabled vet with PTSD & TBI who contributed to this even more so, by becoming an alcoholic ( though off that band wagon, finally ...But now a diabetic and sickly ) & the other twin, a Army veteran also... has changed so much though getting along OK in his marriage, though so much different... Yes, they are alive though so distance than ever I would of imagined now in their adulthood.
God Bless...Caressa_08
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Caressa, I'm honored by your six-star review. I'm glad that I was able to write about this so well in your eyes. Your children..l will pray for you and them, by adding y'all to my prayer list. I'm so sorry for the pain you must be feeling. For you to write me the kind review that you did, was an amazing act of courage.
Best,
jeni
Comment from LaRosa
I am grieved for you, Luna; but I am grateful you are finding your way again.
Your memories, your questions unanswered, are expressed so honestly.
He knew you were there. How he must have loved you, trusted you, to try to come home.
May the Lord hold you in His arms, I know you are in His heart.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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I am grieved for you, Luna; but I am grateful you are finding your way again.
Your memories, your questions unanswered, are expressed so honestly.
He knew you were there. How he must have loved you, trusted you, to try to come home.
May the Lord hold you in His arms, I know you are in His heart.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you, LaRosa, it is nice to know that you think he knew I was there. Yes, we loved each other very much.
Thank you for your warm and supportive review.
Best,
luna
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Comment from DR DIP
Jeni I can't imagine everyday the pain you must go through I can't imagine the grief of losing a son especially this They time heals but does it Maybe in time you can forgive but you can never forget. You are such a wonderful, beautiful person to keep clegacy alive through your verse Please don't feel guilty forever Mickey would never want that
xxdip
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Jeni I can't imagine everyday the pain you must go through I can't imagine the grief of losing a son especially this They time heals but does it Maybe in time you can forgive but you can never forget. You are such a wonderful, beautiful person to keep clegacy alive through your verse Please don't feel guilty forever Mickey would never want that
xxdip
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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dear dip,
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Thank you for your really warm and supportive review. It's wonderful to have friends like you for support.
All my best,
jeni
Comment from mermaids
I feel like I am there with you. Your words are strong and are helpful to the reader.
I like how you talk to your son in your poem, you give him a voice. Poetry is therapeutic and helps both the writer and reader.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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I feel like I am there with you. Your words are strong and are helpful to the reader.
I like how you talk to your son in your poem, you give him a voice. Poetry is therapeutic and helps both the writer and reader.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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dear mermaids,
Thank you for the kind six-star review you laid upon my poem. I appreciate your kind words of review and support.
love,
jeni
(Thank you once again!)
Comment from Irish Rain
The last 2 verses are of course the most painful, because it's true. We are supposed to protect. How horrible grandma must feel, that she turned him away...but really, who wouldn't? Addictions are hard to put up with. I can't say why he tried to call...but I do believe that as soon as he died, he was, and is..at perfect peace. I wish he could tell you that. Bless your heart, a mothers nightmare....
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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The last 2 verses are of course the most painful, because it's true. We are supposed to protect. How horrible grandma must feel, that she turned him away...but really, who wouldn't? Addictions are hard to put up with. I can't say why he tried to call...but I do believe that as soon as he died, he was, and is..at perfect peace. I wish he could tell you that. Bless your heart, a mothers nightmare....
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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My dear Irish Rain, all you say in your lovely six-star review is true and I thank you. I held my mother responsible for his death for a little while, but of course that was not accurate. His death was the result of a tragic mistake, and now, I live in my new normal without him. I do feel that he is at perfect peace and know that he has now access to all the answers.
Love, Jeni
(Thanks once again for your supportive six-star review!)
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I would be devastated if my son died, but like you, I'd eventually come to accept, and I'd see him in all beauty.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Luna, don't ever hide or deny your feelings. Let us folks here on Fanstory know that you need us to feel your dismay from the lost of your son.
Talk about your son and share your precious memories..
Always remember that you can always talk to God through prayer.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Luna, don't ever hide or deny your feelings. Let us folks here on Fanstory know that you need us to feel your dismay from the lost of your son.
Talk about your son and share your precious memories..
Always remember that you can always talk to God through prayer.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Gert,
I wont hide or deny my feelings. Thank you for the amazing six-star review for this remembrance. I will keep talking about my son and share my "precious memories."
Love,
Jeni
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Please take care Luna
Gert
Comment from Aiona
Normally, I prefer poems that rhyme, but this one touches my heart as I too grieve for someone. So that helplessness, that desire to know, "Why?" And that thought that perhaps they fely alone in their last moments. Or the fervent hope they knew they were loved....
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Normally, I prefer poems that rhyme, but this one touches my heart as I too grieve for someone. So that helplessness, that desire to know, "Why?" And that thought that perhaps they fely alone in their last moments. Or the fervent hope they knew they were loved....
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Aiona, you have my condolences, please know that. I appreciate your kind six star review and hope that my son did know he was loved in his last moments.
Thank you again for your very expansive review and six-star rating.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem had to be written just to get it out and shared with the world. The epidemic of heroin use touches us everywhere. Loss and the empty spaces that no one can ever fill are soul draining. The haunting hollowness of never knowing why, as your son's repeated phone calls represent, will have to await answers on another plane.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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This poem had to be written just to get it out and shared with the world. The epidemic of heroin use touches us everywhere. Loss and the empty spaces that no one can ever fill are soul draining. The haunting hollowness of never knowing why, as your son's repeated phone calls represent, will have to await answers on another plane.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Bill,
Thank you for your warm, insightful and supportive review. I appreciate the exceptional six-star rating. Thank you for your kind supportive words.
Yours,
jeni
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Those we have connected to deeply - we will never lose. All those we love deeply become a part of us. Thanks so much for this poem.
Bill~
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Those we have connected to deeply - we will never lose. All those we love deeply become a part of us. Thanks so much for this poem.
Bill~
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Bill,
Thank you for your warm and supportive words of review. I appreciate them deeply.
Best,
Jeni