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Moondream

Free Verse

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Comment from mbroyles2
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Wonderfully presented.
Exquisite imagery with the riding of the unicorn of white.
Crisp words.
We enter the Moondream and awe at its beauty.
Happy new year
Michael

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
    Oh Michael, thanks
Comment from Chrissy710
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Oh Luna .Well done this is a beautiful poem and I really enjoyed reading this and I have also read your profile and your sone Mickey would be smiling down at you now and your heart is always open. A lovely free verse with such a beautiful presentation. I loved the way you personified the elements . Welcome back to FanStory and from someone relatively new to this site only 18 months I will look forward to more of your work Have a great Xmas Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Janet Foor
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Moondream is a lovely story poem. I liked the various doorways and the fantasy like tone of the poem. Excellent artwork to add to the dream.

Well done.
blessings and Merry Christmas
Janet

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Dean Kuch
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This is very lovely and so well composed, Jeni.
I especially liked the metaphorical reference to the various doorways in your story/poem, and how each one has a different and very valuable gift to share if we can only muster up enough courage to go through it.
No matter how painful it might be.

Beautifully done, Jeni, from both a presentation / compositional standpoint and the poignant, poetic proclamation portraying parental love.
That never dies...
Here's hoping your Christmas was merry and bright.
Happy Holidays,
~Dean

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Bill Schott
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This magical poem, Moon Dream, seems to skip through the tenets of creativity that become visible to the dreamer. Some stick after the dream ends and, we get a Moon Dream poem, perhaps.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Lu Saluna
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This is a very enchanting and magical poem full of hope and wisdom.
So beautifully written and very creative. Perhaps the world will be as you describe it one day.
Merry Christmas!

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from CEO2020
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Another very touching poem. I see you are very diverse in your poems.

"Understanding nods ~ her gift is that of Empathy.
Freedom from Judgment smiles ~ his gift is Acceptance of All.
Attentiveness stretches out her hands ~ Listening to another is her gift."

Beautifully written and said!

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Heather Knight
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I do like it. You got some wonderful gifts in this dream. I love the fact that you are riding a unicorn and also that you have used my favorite word: gossamer.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Merry Christmas to you and yours! blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016

Comment from Thal1959
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Very well done, Luna - and glad I am to be reading something cheerful rom you. The theme is very fascinating and well expressed. I know the nature of free verse, but one thing that gives me a twinge is when a line of thought is grammatically connected to a second line. For instance:
"Sleepy-eyed, I'm led to
a world of creativity and passion."
To preserve any semblance of even a hinted beat, one would have to mentally place a comma after "to," but this makes the sentence incomplete. Generally, each line or clause should be able to stand alone or be regulated with punctuation, as in:
"Beautiful Moonprincesses are singing
as they spin on wooden wheels"
Here, one can hear the completeness of the first clause, even without a comma after "singing." Thus, "Beautiful Moonprincesses are singing" can be rendered with a comma after "singing" or a period, a semicolon, or even an exclamation point. But even without punctuation, it stands alone and works. Enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 25-Dec-2016