My First Love, My Hero
Short Story29 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
It's not always the biggest meanest or best looking guy that is the most intimidating...it's how he carries himself and probably how he relates to others. When you treat everyone equally, you have a much better overall standing with those around you. This guy stood up for what he believed in through every facet of his being and was obviously a tremendous influence and a wonderful example to those whose paths he crossed. Well written, although I'm not qualified to rate stories, this was totally relatable in the realm of bullies and the shit they try and hang on others, when quite possibly THEY are the ones suffering an identity crisis or suffering from being bullied themselves...a solid write, my friend.
Cheers P
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It's not always the biggest meanest or best looking guy that is the most intimidating...it's how he carries himself and probably how he relates to others. When you treat everyone equally, you have a much better overall standing with those around you. This guy stood up for what he believed in through every facet of his being and was obviously a tremendous influence and a wonderful example to those whose paths he crossed. Well written, although I'm not qualified to rate stories, this was totally relatable in the realm of bullies and the shit they try and hang on others, when quite possibly THEY are the ones suffering an identity crisis or suffering from being bullied themselves...a solid write, my friend.
Cheers P
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Each of us havemey the bullies one or other time. They are not only in the schools they are also creeping into the work place. Its only their methods that change.
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Each of us havemey the bullies one or other time. They are not only in the schools they are also creeping into the work place. Its only their methods that change.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from Rubylou
Hi Mikey,
Great story. I like how you took the love theme and incorporated the hero's fight against bullying.
What makes this impactful is that the effects of these events will last forever. A damsel in distress but without the stereotypical sticky sweetness. Nice one.
Rubylou
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Hi Mikey,
Great story. I like how you took the love theme and incorporated the hero's fight against bullying.
What makes this impactful is that the effects of these events will last forever. A damsel in distress but without the stereotypical sticky sweetness. Nice one.
Rubylou
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
Excellent piece here. Emotional without being saccharine. All kinds of romance and this is very chaste and restrained. Exceptionally well told too.
I think this ought to do very well. It deserves to.
your seat is getting' cold. - either delete the apostrophe or the 'g'.
All the best
G
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Hi Mikey,
Excellent piece here. Emotional without being saccharine. All kinds of romance and this is very chaste and restrained. Exceptionally well told too.
I think this ought to do very well. It deserves to.
your seat is getting' cold. - either delete the apostrophe or the 'g'.
All the best
G
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
what a beautiful story. I wish someone had been around when that was happening to me. Red hair and freckles were not the in thing when I was at school. This is such a great entry for the romance contest, and I suspect a different take on what others might write.
Good luck.
Brenda:))x
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Hi Mikey,
what a beautiful story. I wish someone had been around when that was happening to me. Red hair and freckles were not the in thing when I was at school. This is such a great entry for the romance contest, and I suspect a different take on what others might write.
Good luck.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from nordicgirl
Michael, I can verify your story and even add to it. LOL
I swear, we thought "Jimmy" was going to get his ass kicked when he walked over to confronn those idiots. No one could believe you walked back with Sherry. DAMN, that was something else. You tell "Jimmy" he was one bad ass little dude and, thanks.
A great story. I wish I could write. I would tell the whole story and brag like hell about that boy. :)) NG
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Michael, I can verify your story and even add to it. LOL
I swear, we thought "Jimmy" was going to get his ass kicked when he walked over to confronn those idiots. No one could believe you walked back with Sherry. DAMN, that was something else. You tell "Jimmy" he was one bad ass little dude and, thanks.
A great story. I wish I could write. I would tell the whole story and brag like hell about that boy. :)) NG
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I see someone else has been up all night writing too. This is a very sweet story, mikey. Well written and no spags that I see. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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I see someone else has been up all night writing too. This is a very sweet story, mikey. Well written and no spags that I see. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Bullies are you said they were.
The best way to overcome them is to stand up to them.
Seems "James" had it going on and knew it too.
Also appears he could have cared less what anybody else thought, except the girl in the tale.
Story is tightly writtem with good characterizations.
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Bullies are you said they were.
The best way to overcome them is to stand up to them.
Seems "James" had it going on and knew it too.
Also appears he could have cared less what anybody else thought, except the girl in the tale.
Story is tightly writtem with good characterizations.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2016
Comment from jusylee72
I really like this story. It has so much truth in it. I understand completely why she adores this guy. We all need a guy like him in our lives while we are at high school. Delightful story, Mikey. You capture our girl spirit very well in this one.
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I really like this story. It has so much truth in it. I understand completely why she adores this guy. We all need a guy like him in our lives while we are at high school. Delightful story, Mikey. You capture our girl spirit very well in this one.
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Comment Written 04-Sep-2016