Comment from JarodMcLeay1

Excellent

It's pretty good, including western and first nation spiritual and bringing them together. I'm just wondering since I just read this one, could you tell me what it is about?

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Hi, Jarod. The basic premise is that a University Professor seeks out the advice of a Mexican shaman who is reputed to have extensive knowledge of altered states. Doctor Morales is planning to write a book about ways to treat delusional personality disorders, which is his area of expertise.

Thanks for stopping by--hope that helps.

:) Bev

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Oh, Bev, I loved this chapter/part of your wonderful story. Such excellent writing is so engrossing and entertaining. I love your character Pasquale and look forward to reading more about him.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Hi, Karyn. Thanks for taking time to read this long-delayed follow-up. I appreciate both your support and encouragement.

Always great to hear from you!

:) Bev

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Wow! This is one captivating piece you have delivered my friend. The details are impeccable Bev making this an extraordinary read. I am looking forward to the next one.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Thanks so much! It's great to know I'm learning how to effectively use details to deepen my story. I can tell you that's been a journey for sure as it was not my strong point when I started out on FanStory.

I really appreciate both your support and encouragement, Neonewman.

:) Bev

reply by Neonewman on 18-Jan-2016

My pleasure Bev! My journey here has been as equally fulfilling. The depth of a story can bring the viewer in and keep him/her from coming up from air.

reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Well said, Neo! Glad your experiences have been as helpful as mine. This is a really good site for learning and growing.

:) Bev

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Exceptional

Superb post in every way. Your writing never ever fails to make me blush with envy. Fantastic work Bev. This paragraph, all by itself, merits the little gold FS cross:

"I know and accept any of my actions has the potential to be my final one. Spirit does not negotiate on this matter. So, I walk on the earth with a harmonious intent. In turn, the Mother speaks to me just as she did to you back there. This time, I was able to save you from being consumed by your morbidity. But I assure you, until you stop fighting your fate--the fate of every living creature--and learn to accept death as an advisor, you will pass away from something stupid like cancer."

Absolutely brilliant. I got chills. Love Pasquale. I've no doubt he exists, and is speaking through you, my friend. Don't make us wait so long for the next one... please!!!

Av

xx

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Av, thank you for your beautiful review. I, in turn, am blushing.

I promise to get the next one out in a more timely fashion. I'm so glad you love Pasquale. He's someone I would fallow to the ends of the earth. I just hope our brilliant scientist seizes his opportunity.

Thank you seems hardly adequate for your generosity and support, Av.

XXX Bev

Comment from JW

Excellent

In reading this only one word came to mind - WOW!

This chapter literally captured my attention from the very beginning and held it to the end - leaving me wish there was more. Great job, Bev.

Thanks for sharing this. JW

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Hi, JW. Thank you so much for your great review. I'm so pleased you liked this seventh part, and appreciate your insights and encouragement.

:) Bev

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

You had my attention from the first line to the last.
There was never a dull moment.
Wow this is a great chapter.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Thank you so much, Cookie. I really appreciate you taking time to read this post and for you kind encouragement.

:) Bev

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A very interesting episode episode Bev, poor old Motales wants to go back from whence he came but the mysterious Pasquale won't allow him to do any such thing, He sees the Shaman as some young warrior at one stage, he tells Morales. he might die of something mudane as cancer or some such. Well done, my friend. Good scribing, blessings.Roy

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Thanks so much, Roy. I really appreciate your kind and encouraging review.

:) Bev

reply by royowen on 18-Jan-2016

Most welcome Bev

Comment from w.j.debi

Exceptional

I was just going to check how many messages I had and not review anything tonight, but I saw you had posted the next chapter and could not resist reading it.

This is amazing writing, Bev. This chapter is so full of action. The imagery is fantastic, especially the shape shifting of Pasquale. I felt like I was there with the Shaman in the heat and the dust. The doctor is being pushed beyond his physical, emotional and intellectual limits. The attack by the apparent prehistoric bird came right out of nowhere and left a startling impression. I bet a lot more surprises are in store. You explore the gamut of emotions from fear, to defiance, to confusion, to curiosity in such a short space of time and with such precision. There is not a wasted word in this chapter. You nailed it and then some!

I am glad I stayed up late to read this. I look forward to the next chapter!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Hi, Debi. Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I'm so glad you liked the chapter. I know it took me a while to get it together, but my head was not in the right place until just a day or so ago. Then I knew I was ready to finish it.

I really appreciate you hanging in there with this story. Your insights and encouragement mean a lot to me.

:) Bev

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Bev

= Once again, a great chapter.
= You have such a knack for details and establishing circumstance.
= Love the last line ----> Feeling emboldened like a mouse beyond the reach of the wolf, I wondered: If death stalked me, what face would it wear?
= Great job, my friend.

*Cheers & Blessings...*
Keep Smilin'... Jackie (*>*) Jax

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Thanks so much, Jax. I appreciate you hanging on with this story and your shared insights.


:) Bev

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

Wow, Bev, this has to be the nominee for novel of the month--or whatever they call it. Your writing sparkled, your images were so wedded to language they seemed to float off the page. Some exquisite creative work here.

His stared at the center of my abdomen, [HE ? stared at the center ...]

Great job!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016

Jay, what an honor to receive such a fine review from you. I've always admired your ability to pull the reader into your stories through great use of detail and language.

Thanks so much for your insights, your encouragement and your generosity. I really appreciate it!

:) Bev