Warm Waters
Winter is too cold and needed a warmer inspiration21 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
This appears to be a fine haiku, 5-7-5 nature poem
Good concrete imagery in waves/body
And good connection grammatically
Excellent third line satori
I sometimes use an em dash ( -- ) after line two
for better separation
Well done
Good luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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This appears to be a fine haiku, 5-7-5 nature poem
Good concrete imagery in waves/body
And good connection grammatically
Excellent third line satori
I sometimes use an em dash ( -- ) after line two
for better separation
Well done
Good luck in the contest
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for your comments. All help is appreciated.