Swirling swallows.
Wending wheeling.83 total reviews
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Roy,
Congrats on winning this alliterisen contest. First Ive heard of the style and your poem is a worthy introduction. Alas for the sixes Ive used up. Thanks for sharing this! R
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Hi Roy,
Congrats on winning this alliterisen contest. First Ive heard of the style and your poem is a worthy introduction. Alas for the sixes Ive used up. Thanks for sharing this! R
Comment Written 15-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Raoul for your most delightfully generous review and remarks,you approval's nice, blessings, Roy.
Comment from LeslieP5
Wow, this rhyming alliterisen is a real tongue twister when you try to read it out loud especially the first four lines. They do paint an image of the "swirling swallows ... in tumbling turning flutt'rings flight." The end rhymes all work and fit the rhyming pattern. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Wow, this rhyming alliterisen is a real tongue twister when you try to read it out loud especially the first four lines. They do paint an image of the "swirling swallows ... in tumbling turning flutt'rings flight." The end rhymes all work and fit the rhyming pattern. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Lesley, for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
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You're welcome. It was a pleasure to read.
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You're welcome. It was a pleasure to read.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Congratulations on your win.
I haven't previously seen this form, but I think you've done a great job of using the stringent requirements to your advantage. And what a subject you chose - we have many swallows here and their tumbling, twirling flight is their trademark.
I'm not sure that apostrophe in the last line is in the right place, but it does nothing to weaken this special effort.
Steve
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Congratulations on your win.
I haven't previously seen this form, but I think you've done a great job of using the stringent requirements to your advantage. And what a subject you chose - we have many swallows here and their tumbling, twirling flight is their trademark.
I'm not sure that apostrophe in the last line is in the right place, but it does nothing to weaken this special effort.
Steve
Comment Written 15-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thanks Steve for great review, I couldn't decide if it was possessive or plural, so I took the former, blessings, Roy.
Comment from cmowen87
Loved the rhyming scheme and alliteration. Imagery was excellent throughout. I also enjoyed the photo. Felt it really worked well with your words. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Loved the rhyming scheme and alliteration. Imagery was excellent throughout. I also enjoyed the photo. Felt it really worked well with your words. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Simply marvelous! I did not get to vote in this contest as I will not vote if I don't have the time to read and review all the entries and it has been a busy week for me. This is most exceptional in all ways. It met the contest requirements beautifully but the content is delightful and wonderfully enchanting. I love watching the birds and you have described these lovely little creatures splendidly with alliterative mastery - smooth and soothing not at all forced. It certainly deserves all these ribbons and then some. Thank you very much for sharing it.
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Simply marvelous! I did not get to vote in this contest as I will not vote if I don't have the time to read and review all the entries and it has been a busy week for me. This is most exceptional in all ways. It met the contest requirements beautifully but the content is delightful and wonderfully enchanting. I love watching the birds and you have described these lovely little creatures splendidly with alliterative mastery - smooth and soothing not at all forced. It certainly deserves all these ribbons and then some. Thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Dear Monica, you have a way with these generous, uplifting and gracious way, with warmth in this gratefully received accolade, sincere thanks my friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Roy,
yes, I can see why you may have won this contest... alliteration abound that took flight within dizzy spells of swirling-soaring sights. A very clever and imaginative construction... congratulations for your deserved win.
With our thoughts we create,
combinations of wondrous words,
James.
******Stars!!!!!!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Hi Roy,
yes, I can see why you may have won this contest... alliteration abound that took flight within dizzy spells of swirling-soaring sights. A very clever and imaginative construction... congratulations for your deserved win.
With our thoughts we create,
combinations of wondrous words,
James.
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much James, for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Gert sherwood
I can clearly see why you received 1st prize
I 've seen swallows and yes they are comical clowns and love to frolic around..
Real good how you tell us the yare quiet when they know hawks are around to feast.
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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I can clearly see why you received 1st prize
I 've seen swallows and yes they are comical clowns and love to frolic around..
Real good how you tell us the yare quiet when they know hawks are around to feast.
Gert
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Gert, for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from GWinterwin
Hey I like this poem very much, and I think the picture is perfect. A very real message told with a small amount of wording. Swallows are truly quite marvelous to watch.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Hey I like this poem very much, and I think the picture is perfect. A very real message told with a small amount of wording. Swallows are truly quite marvelous to watch.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from mermaids
Cluttering clowns pluck their plight is a fun line with a humorous feel to it. I like your use of words, it makes this a fun poem to read out loud. Your words create a clear scene of nature. This is a challenging form to write and you did an excellent job here.
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Cluttering clowns pluck their plight is a fun line with a humorous feel to it. I like your use of words, it makes this a fun poem to read out loud. Your words create a clear scene of nature. This is a challenging form to write and you did an excellent job here.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sasha
You did a magnificent job with this. I can see why it won the contest. Excellent alliteration and equally superb rhyme. Again, terrific job with this one.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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You did a magnificent job with this. I can see why it won the contest. Excellent alliteration and equally superb rhyme. Again, terrific job with this one.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your most delightfully generous review and remarks, blessings, Roy.