Will You Play With Me?
A contest entry26 total reviews
Comment from K. Lorraine
Unfortunately this type of kidnapping happens too often.
This was a good story for the thriller part of the prompt.
The ending was extremely good.
This story among so many other good ones, is a contender for the win. Thanks for sharing...
Best of luck in the voting booth.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Unfortunately this type of kidnapping happens too often.
This was a good story for the thriller part of the prompt.
The ending was extremely good.
This story among so many other good ones, is a contender for the win. Thanks for sharing...
Best of luck in the voting booth.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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It is an unfortunate truth, you're right. Thanks for reading.
John
Comment from kriver
Hi
Yikes,
and the chase is on.
I won't feel sorry for the guy
when those mothers catch the guy and deliver their own brand of justice.
This is a good write. Lots of drama in the scene, good dialogue and the start of character development. I think it would be one of a parent's worst nightmares to live through something like that.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Hi
Yikes,
and the chase is on.
I won't feel sorry for the guy
when those mothers catch the guy and deliver their own brand of justice.
This is a good write. Lots of drama in the scene, good dialogue and the start of character development. I think it would be one of a parent's worst nightmares to live through something like that.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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I cannot imagine what I would do, after taking care of my wife. Than you for reading. John
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I cannot imagine what I would do, after taking care of my wife. Than you for reading. John
Comment from Shirley McLain
I love flash fiction and you wrote a great piece. I did not see any obvious errors. The story line was exciting and certainly held my attention. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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I love flash fiction and you wrote a great piece. I did not see any obvious errors. The story line was exciting and certainly held my attention. Great job.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Thank you Okie for the stars, for reading and reviewing. I always appreciate it. John
Comment from Janet7053
Great highlighting of child abduction. It happens just that easy. Keep your eyes on your little angels. I shudder just thinking about someone taking my grand babies. You gave nothing away in the first few lines, then chloroform hankie and I felt a sense of urgency. Great job!
Best wishes in the writing contest.
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Great highlighting of child abduction. It happens just that easy. Keep your eyes on your little angels. I shudder just thinking about someone taking my grand babies. You gave nothing away in the first few lines, then chloroform hankie and I felt a sense of urgency. Great job!
Best wishes in the writing contest.
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Janet for a great review. John
Comment from kiwijenny
This Is a true horror
This was a fear of mine..that my kids would be snatched like this...I think I would rather they died ..honest than be taken and abused
Most of these 100 word horrors have been a farce
Yours is good
God bless
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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This Is a true horror
This was a fear of mine..that my kids would be snatched like this...I think I would rather they died ..honest than be taken and abused
Most of these 100 word horrors have been a farce
Yours is good
God bless
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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It is a horrifying thought. Thank you, jenny for reading. John
Comment from TAB_that's me
This one sent chills down my spine. It is well written and is a fresh look in the contest. Good luck to you in it.
Teresa
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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This one sent chills down my spine. It is well written and is a fresh look in the contest. Good luck to you in it.
Teresa
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Thank you Teresa, for reading and the generous star reward.
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I voted for you so hope you win:)