Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

A real Artist, God is! You're spot on here. Yes, His hand really can be seen in so many, many things. Great little poem!

Mike

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014

Thanks Mike, :-) Carolyn

reply by mikemagine on 20-Dec-2014

:-)

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Nice Lune poem. Not only is the painted desert of the southwest an amazing sight painted by God so are the lovely sunrise and sunsets of the southwest. Blessings, Patricia

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014

Thank you Patricia for this wonderful review. Yes the southwest is a beautiful part of our country. :-) Carolyn

Comment from GE Parson

Excellent

Very good Lune.

Glorifies our Father, the Divine Artist.

He has made all things beautiful in His creation

God's blessing on the contest you ave my vote.

Jerry

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014

Thank you Jerry for this great review. I'm glad you like the Lune. God gets all the glory. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your syllable count should be 5-3-5 for a LUNe

good alliteration in
shifting, sands

good use of "E" "I" assonance
good use "T" consonance

your few words portray well the shifting sands of the masters palette paints the desert
cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014

Did I get the count requirment backward, I will have to check that out. I am glad you liked the poem anyway. :-) Carolyn

reply by Smoothiecool on 20-Dec-2014

looks that way LOL have a blessed weekend ,,,SC <:> Faye

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Be the master in this case Divine or Motherly
I couldn't agree more - the palette is sublime,
and the ever changing vision hypnotizing :-)

Nicely done :-)

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 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014

Thank you for this fine review. ;-) Carolyn

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Well the poem in itself is great! As a lune contest entry it has a problem - it is supposed to be 5-3-5 not 3-5-3. I almost made the same mistake. If you change it, let me know and I'll change your rating.
Teresa

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 Comment Written 19-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2014

I changed it. I must be sleepy. LOL Let me know how you like this one. It has the same directive just conforms. :-) Carolyn

reply by TAB_that's me on 21-Dec-2014

It's perfect:) I changed the rating (sometimes it seems to take a day before the change shows to you).

reply by the author on 23-Dec-2014

Thanks Teresa, That was a kind gesture. It has shown up. Happy Holidays to you and yours. Carolyn