Words
An essence poem about what we can do with words36 total reviews
Comment from Ninap2
Wow-so much said in so few words. "Words like darts" -amazing imagery. I look at the flowers and think about a husband making up for some hurtful words spoken previously. Thanks for sharing. -Nina
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Wow-so much said in so few words. "Words like darts" -amazing imagery. I look at the flowers and think about a husband making up for some hurtful words spoken previously. Thanks for sharing. -Nina
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
You have written a good two line poem with the necessary six syllables in each line and the necessary internal rhyme of broken/spoken and end rhyme of hearts/darts. Well done and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
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You have written a good two line poem with the necessary six syllables in each line and the necessary internal rhyme of broken/spoken and end rhyme of hearts/darts. Well done and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Leineco
Nicely done :-)
Apology and concession can go a long way
on the path to contrition. Words spoken
in anger or fear need not be the last thing
we say. Repairs can be made when the heart
is invested.
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Nicely done :-)
Apology and concession can go a long way
on the path to contrition. Words spoken
in anger or fear need not be the last thing
we say. Repairs can be made when the heart
is invested.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Words we speak are not like words we write in the respect that once they have flown out of our mouths, there's no deleting them. By then, it is too late.
We should always choose our words carefully, especially when angered or upset, and think before we speak. Not always an easy thing to do...
Well done, anonymous, and good luck.
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Words we speak are not like words we write in the respect that once they have flown out of our mouths, there's no deleting them. By then, it is too late.
We should always choose our words carefully, especially when angered or upset, and think before we speak. Not always an easy thing to do...
Well done, anonymous, and good luck.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
Your essence poem has great end and internal rhymes. All of the rules have been followed:) Best of luck to you.
~~Teresa~~
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Your essence poem has great end and internal rhymes. All of the rules have been followed:) Best of luck to you.
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
Oh I know so well that particular walk of shame - eating those terrible words you let loose is wretched, but tempers then calm, the air gets clearer and sometimes even a hug gets shared. Really nice tanka...close to home. AT=/
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Oh I know so well that particular walk of shame - eating those terrible words you let loose is wretched, but tempers then calm, the air gets clearer and sometimes even a hug gets shared. Really nice tanka...close to home. AT=/
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from dennis0530
At one time or another, we eat our words. Either out of thoughtlessness or anger, we let out words that hurt, insult and belittle.
This inconsiderate action often cause irritation in those who we direct the words at. But for the benefit of both, apologies are often asked for.
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At one time or another, we eat our words. Either out of thoughtlessness or anger, we let out words that hurt, insult and belittle.
This inconsiderate action often cause irritation in those who we direct the words at. But for the benefit of both, apologies are often asked for.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from adewpearl
good form with two 6 syllable lines and a strong internal rhyme of broken and spoken and strong end-line rhyme of hearts darts
I really like the image of hurtful words as spoken darts
BRooke
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good form with two 6 syllable lines and a strong internal rhyme of broken and spoken and strong end-line rhyme of hearts darts
I really like the image of hurtful words as spoken darts
BRooke
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, I love essence poems though I never do well with them in the voting booth. people expect too much there or don't know what to vote for. good luck in the contest.
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, I love essence poems though I never do well with them in the voting booth. people expect too much there or don't know what to vote for. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014