Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Carolyn, I love the sunset...I love sunrise...and sundown...both are beautiful...I love your poem and the picture is stunning...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo...love ya

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks my dear friend, I love this time of year although I must admit, one snow will be enough to do me when winter comes. When I found that picture on fanart, I could not believe the stunning resemblance. I promise, I didn't take it, but I wish I could have. Love you, hope you are doing well. Are you still taking care of everyone? And yourself too I hope. :-) Carolyn

reply by l.raven on 18-Oct-2014

I am at my daughters babysitting the house and the dogs...I am leaving to my mom's on Monday or Tuesday...to help my dad...mom is suppose to have surgery...but there not sure if they are going to do it...her vitals have been all over the place for awhile...trying to stable her out...otherwise...doing fine with each day...I hope all is well with you...always glad to see you...left you a note in your profile...see you visited me...and I didn't get it...sorry...now stick around...Love ya Linda xxoo luff

Comment from mauial

Excellent

Great Tanka and you did a good job with the pivot line, line three, so that it could be divided into two poem and still make sense.

Kaleidoscope turns
color burst on western sky
brilliant red-gold

brilliant red-gold
sets the tops of autumn trees
divinely ablaze with fire

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you for this amazing review. I appreciate your noting the strong pivot line. I had hoped for that. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

You've done an amazing job of conveying the blazing picture with so few words.

Makes one want to stand up and sing How Great Thou Art at the top of one's voice!

Have a blessed Sabbath.

Until next time,

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

How Great Thou Art is one of my favorite songs as well. Thank you for this wonderful review. I 'm so happy you enjoyed it.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

I know you can fix this so going with the rating it deserves for beautiful content. 'Brilliant' is a two syllable count making you a syllable short of requirements in one line. I checked six different references before reviewing this and I am pretty sure the judges are going to be LESS considerate LOL. Love you and know you can make this good to go before the judging begins.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Hi there and thanks so much. I checked the count on Kaleidoscope but wasn't as diligent about brilliant. Un-brilliant of me, wasn't it. LOL. Take a look and see what you think. I know Tanka contest rules say you can use fewer syllables on the entry but I wanted to stick with 5-7-5-7-7 in this one.
Love, Carolyn

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 18-Oct-2014

PERFECT! HUGS as I knew you would make it right easily. Good luck to you lovely lady.

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

:-)

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

What a beautiful scene, Carolyn. Nice little poem to go with it. Not sure of what a Tanka consists of, but this is good. Love it. Miss Sally

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks Miss Sally,
a tanka has 5 lines, syllable count of 5-7-5-7-7. I counted til I was blind. LOL . Contest rules are finicky, however, they were actually lenient on this one. I am glad you liked it. I write them for pleasure as I have no idea what it takes to win one of these contest. Smile... :-) Carolyn

reply by angelface2 on 18-Oct-2014

Hey, I know what you mean. I think I may have won 2. One for sure. what I think is good never makes it! LOL. :>D Miss sally

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, Carolyn, I am glad you were able to write about what you saw today. it's always beautiful to write these poems about sunrises and sunsets.

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

In nature there is always something to inspire us. Thanks for the great review and generous rating. So glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn