Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This sounds like an idyllic scene that the author has depicted with this piece of work. It conjures up fantastic imagery of a beautiful rural setting.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks Tomes for the great review Mary

reply by Tomes Johnston on 05-Sep-2014

My pleasure

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Don't you just love Haiku? And here you have given a double treat. It is easy to imagine the river, the kingfisher and the babbling brook.
Good luck in the contest,
:-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

I am so pleased you enjoyed it, Thank you, Mary

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is very well done and meets the contest requirements splendidly. Your stacked haiku is very well connected creating a complete picture for the reader. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks Monica for the excellent review. Mary

Comment from LoannaLois

Excellent

Another six, Mary. You took this prompt and made it your own. This was a difficult challenge, but you succeeded with a flourish! I love your subject matter and could picture every single detail as you wrote.( a splash of ultramarine) ahhhhh.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Nice one Loanna, I enjoyed reading your review. Mary

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Thanks for entering, Mary.

I particularly like 'darting/splash/trickling' to convey vivid dramatic imagery.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray xx

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks Ray for the excellent review. Mary

reply by Domino 2 on 05-Sep-2014

ADDED. Please check my PM, Mary, as your entry needs to relate to a pond or lake. Cheers, Ray xx

Comment from Finglas

Excellent

Nicely done. The cadence of the 5-7-5 really suits the subject matter. I love kingfishers, have not seen one in quite a while. Brings back fond memories of hunting with my dad.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks Joe for the great review Mary

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Lovely expressive poem, Mary. This is one that paints a story even without a picture.

I think this is genuinely a contender.
The imagery is vivid indeed
I really like this. It is not very often writers get the right balance in the small poems but you have done very well here. Lovely.
Best wishes,
RG


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 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

thanks RG for the encouraging review, Mary

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I like this - partly because the kingfisher is one of my favourite birds - a real personification of the river. You need to put the A in lower case to comply with the rules of the prompt. Nice alliteration of 'b' and contrast of ultramarine against the brown.

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 Comment Written 05-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks for the excellent review, and the observation of the A, I appreciate it. Mary